Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "Soul Search"Poems, Rants, Short Stories and Ramblings
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Comment from V McCrary
While you did achieve the target in syllables, I know I will seem shallow in that I did not connect the last sentence with the first two, unless you are learning to procure a degree or job certification. This is only to say if I am seeking to learn, in a transitional way, I tend to lean toward it leading me more than me leading it to my sought after destination. But neither have I even attempted to write a 5-7-5. So kudos to you. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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While you did achieve the target in syllables, I know I will seem shallow in that I did not connect the last sentence with the first two, unless you are learning to procure a degree or job certification. This is only to say if I am seeking to learn, in a transitional way, I tend to lean toward it leading me more than me leading it to my sought after destination. But neither have I even attempted to write a 5-7-5. So kudos to you. Keep writing.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the review and comments,
My attempt to combine a Human Nature and Physical destination path.
Hence a Senku so to speak.
Senryu and Haiku combo.
Blessings to you.
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading your approach to this prompt. It does seem that when we change our paths, we do gain new knowledge that leads to different roads taken by us. Good job and good luck!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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I enjoyed reading your approach to this prompt. It does seem that when we change our paths, we do gain new knowledge that leads to different roads taken by us. Good job and good luck!!
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the Time to Read and Review,
Blessings to you.
