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tanka prose (roots)

a memory

43 total reviews 
Comment from Ben Colder
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An excellent thought of enjoying special moments in the flower garden . I must WARN you they are deadly poison . The Lilly of the Valleys. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you Ben for your kind and encouraging review. You are right, they are deadly poisonous.
Comment from Sanku
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This is a beautiful entry for the contest .what a fine scene you have described .i loved the robin fledgeling.'suspended in a time warp of suspended memories....loved it

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written contemporary Tanka prose about the family roots that are always strong. The things we learned from our parents will stay with us till we die and we teach our children the same values.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you Sandra for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
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This is so pretty! I love Lily of the Valley. Avon used to make a light perfume, but no longer. I need to google to see if ANYONE does! I love the way you combined prose and Tanka. The prose set up the poem and that is really nice as Tanka doesn't always tell us the whole story and leaves us wondering. So much nicer this way rather than in the author notes. Great job. Lovely!
Wendy

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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You felt surprised at the peculiar and bizarre activities and innocent act of a robin in your garden; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This tanka prose, Roots, reminds me of the haibun, and contracts the captured moments in the generational garden from the expressed prose to the condensed poem. Nice.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you Bill for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Heather Knight
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This is gorgeous. I like the 'suspended in a time warp' bit.
Lily of the valley is one of the most beautiful flowers there are in my opinion.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you Maria for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
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This is a very beautiful story and poem. The scent of the Lily-of-the-Vally is my favorite. I have many fond memories myself of these precious little flowers at my grandmother's house. Thanks for sharing this :)

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you Diana for your kind and encouraging review.
reply by Diana L Crawford on 13-Aug-2019
    It was a pleasure to enjoy xoxo
Comment from jenintorre
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I really enjoyed reading your poem. It is very atmospheric. I was right there with you. Lovely memories. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you jeni for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
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You have mastered a very difficult style. There are new styles introduced every day. It's too many for me to keep up with. You seem to make it look easy. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2019


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2019
    Thank you Thomas for your kind and encouraging review.