Adventures Substitute Teaching
Some things you don't want to remember42 total reviews
Comment from Alex Rosel
This was enjoyable read. I especially like the humor you slip in {smiles}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
a freshly minted graduate 1 I like this turn of phrase {smiles}.
When I got there I was told if you're not a certified industrial arts teacher insurance won't cover you to be in the shop -- If this was mine, I'd insert a comma after "When I got there" to emphasize it's a modifying clause. (Or, better still, "When I arrived".)
I was in the shop handing out tools when the assistant principal burst in looking harried, and she was out of breath. -- If this was mine, I'd omit the telling narrative snippet "looking harried". The "burst in", "out of breath", and what follows establishes that. I like to allow the reader space to imagine the scene in their mind's eye.
There's a very good reason. /
When I was called to sub in kindergarten I tried to palm it off. / "I'm a secondary teacher," I said. / They were desperate; I must have been the last one on the list. -- This passage is duplicated. An editing slip?
you're not allowed to fire kindergarten line leaders. -- Ha, ha. {Smiles}.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
This was enjoyable read. I especially like the humor you slip in {smiles}.
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
a freshly minted graduate 1 I like this turn of phrase {smiles}.
When I got there I was told if you're not a certified industrial arts teacher insurance won't cover you to be in the shop -- If this was mine, I'd insert a comma after "When I got there" to emphasize it's a modifying clause. (Or, better still, "When I arrived".)
I was in the shop handing out tools when the assistant principal burst in looking harried, and she was out of breath. -- If this was mine, I'd omit the telling narrative snippet "looking harried". The "burst in", "out of breath", and what follows establishes that. I like to allow the reader space to imagine the scene in their mind's eye.
There's a very good reason. /
When I was called to sub in kindergarten I tried to palm it off. / "I'm a secondary teacher," I said. / They were desperate; I must have been the last one on the list. -- This passage is duplicated. An editing slip?
you're not allowed to fire kindergarten line leaders. -- Ha, ha. {Smiles}.
Good luck with the competition {smiles}.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my story. Good catch with the duplication, i got it fixed.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The theme is orderly thought and exposed that kindergarten teaching is not so easy; experimentally conveyed; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
The theme is orderly thought and exposed that kindergarten teaching is not so easy; experimentally conveyed; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind words and taking the time to read and review my work.