Utopia
cinquain contest entry37 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
I found this 5-7-5 poem very profound and poignant. So much portrayed in so few words. Nice one. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Take care. Jen.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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I found this 5-7-5 poem very profound and poignant. So much portrayed in so few words. Nice one. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Take care. Jen.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the short but rave review. I appreciate the good luck wishes.
Joan
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Such great words, safe and secure. The military and law enforcement keep us safe from harm's way. I've had many relatives in the military and am grateful for their service.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Such great words, safe and secure. The military and law enforcement keep us safe from harm's way. I've had many relatives in the military and am grateful for their service.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the kind words. All those who serve to keep us safe should be honored and thanked.
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Comment from Sallyo
I'd agree with that neat little poem. Fortunately, I do feel safe most of the time... we live in a quiet place, although of course it's had its moments! I wonder if Eden was a safe-feeling place...
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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I'd agree with that neat little poem. Fortunately, I do feel safe most of the time... we live in a quiet place, although of course it's had its moments! I wonder if Eden was a safe-feeling place...
Comment Written 17-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the review.
Joan
Comment from john mallahan
One can only hope you're right, or maybe, that you just may not care! My eyes can see the Eden, but yet, really don't believe. How could everything diverge from? Maybe only introspection can divulge...
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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One can only hope you're right, or maybe, that you just may not care! My eyes can see the Eden, but yet, really don't believe. How could everything diverge from? Maybe only introspection can divulge...
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the review. I don't know how anyone can just not care about all the violence.
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Comment from Marie Foster1
I find that a lot of poems that are written to suit a particular format do not make sense to me. It could be that I am not poetically enlightened enough :) This poiem made a lot of sense to me and I enjoyed it. I hope it fares well in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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I find that a lot of poems that are written to suit a particular format do not make sense to me. It could be that I am not poetically enlightened enough :) This poiem made a lot of sense to me and I enjoyed it. I hope it fares well in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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I am glad I didn't fall into the first category. I am glad you liked it.
Thanks for the review and good luck wishes.
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Comment from rjuselius
this is a beautifully crafted piece of poetry dear dragonpoet! I think you have a sound philosophical sentiment and insightful commentary.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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this is a beautifully crafted piece of poetry dear dragonpoet! I think you have a sound philosophical sentiment and insightful commentary.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thanks for reading and reviewing this, Rebekka. I am glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Yes, it is true that those of us that are far from the atrocities happening, are safe and blessed so we can say where we are is Eden. Hopefully those atrocities will diminish and we will never be prone to them; In a few words you have reminded some of their blessings.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Yes, it is true that those of us that are far from the atrocities happening, are safe and blessed so we can say where we are is Eden. Hopefully those atrocities will diminish and we will never be prone to them; In a few words you have reminded some of their blessings.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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It is what we all wish. Thank you for the comments and high rating.
Have a great weekend.
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Comment from judester
This is a great poem that makes me realize that safe and secure is a fading reality in America. Where can people feel truly safe?
Apparently not at walmarts, concerts, mosques, schools, garlic festivals, yoga class, on public transport, restaurants, day care centres where our helpless children are exposed to random gunfire.
One writer wrote about his five year old son practised an active shooter drill on his first day of school.
Safe and secure certainly does seem like utopia these days. Cheers, judester
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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This is a great poem that makes me realize that safe and secure is a fading reality in America. Where can people feel truly safe?
Apparently not at walmarts, concerts, mosques, schools, garlic festivals, yoga class, on public transport, restaurants, day care centres where our helpless children are exposed to random gunfire.
One writer wrote about his five year old son practised an active shooter drill on his first day of school.
Safe and secure certainly does seem like utopia these days. Cheers, judester
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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It is sad but true. It seems hardly anywhere is safe now a days.
Thanks for the review. Have a good weekend.
Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job on this introspective poem!! The simple observation that living in peace and safety is like existing in a utopian environment is good and relatable. Well done on this verse.
Melissa
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Great job on this introspective poem!! The simple observation that living in peace and safety is like existing in a utopian environment is good and relatable. Well done on this verse.
Melissa
Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the kind words and generous rating.
Joan
Comment from Agate Lucas
Great poem on a very actual theme that needs to be addressed ! I love the three first lines, but I thought the fourth did not flow quite as well. I still loved the poem and hope you write some more about such themes !
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Great poem on a very actual theme that needs to be addressed ! I love the three first lines, but I thought the fourth did not flow quite as well. I still loved the poem and hope you write some more about such themes !
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Comment Written 16-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2019
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Thanks for the review and constructive criticism.
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