Cottage by the Sea
A Trimeric Treat Entry9 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is nice and evokes the sense of blue feelings with the repetition of "turquoise waters." It feels like lyrics to a song. I like the phrase "to sail away into eternity." Not sure what to improve on! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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This is nice and evokes the sense of blue feelings with the repetition of "turquoise waters." It feels like lyrics to a song. I like the phrase "to sail away into eternity." Not sure what to improve on! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and sharing your insightful comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
At your cottage by the sea you alone dreamt every night about the two lovers who made plans to sail away into eternity; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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At your cottage by the sea you alone dreamt every night about the two lovers who made plans to sail away into eternity; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thannk you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Trimeric treat poem about dreams that do not work out as we dreamed about it, but we will never forget the beautiful memories we shared with loved one and the dreams we dreamed together.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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A very well-written Trimeric treat poem about dreams that do not work out as we dreamed about it, but we will never forget the beautiful memories we shared with loved one and the dreams we dreamed together.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insights on this piece. I appreciate it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There's much sadness in these words and gazing into water can often evoke such memories as we return to the past, I am not familiar with this form and your poem flowed perfectly, just liked water, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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There's much sadness in these words and gazing into water can often evoke such memories as we return to the past, I am not familiar with this form and your poem flowed perfectly, just liked water, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insights on this piece. I appreciate it. It was an interesting format.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Awww, he sailed away without her. You would think love would last forever in a beautiful place like that. Hopefully she won't be alone too long. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Awww, he sailed away without her. You would think love would last forever in a beautiful place like that. Hopefully she won't be alone too long. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2019
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Thank you for sharing your insights on this piece. I appreciate it.
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent Trimeric, you have balanced the story around this artwork beautifully and your descending lines flow with ease, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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What an excellent Trimeric, you have balanced the story around this artwork beautifully and your descending lines flow with ease, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your encouraging comments! I truly appreciate them.
Comment from LisaMay
Oh my gosh, how moving, how poignant... evoking such sad feelings of how it didn't work out due to fate's interventions, left living alone when they had such plans of together times. The sense of longing is very strong, and sailing off into eternity is the solution, the calm at the end of the lonely life.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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Oh my gosh, how moving, how poignant... evoking such sad feelings of how it didn't work out due to fate's interventions, left living alone when they had such plans of together times. The sense of longing is very strong, and sailing off into eternity is the solution, the calm at the end of the lonely life.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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I really appreciate your taking the time to read and share your insightful comments.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is excellent. Your story meets all of the contest criteria. This is very good. It makes a great contest submission and should do very well in the voting booth. Contests on FanStory are difficult to win, but you may do it.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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This is excellent. Your story meets all of the contest criteria. This is very good. It makes a great contest submission and should do very well in the voting booth. Contests on FanStory are difficult to win, but you may do it.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights! I appreciate the positive feedback.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
There is a sweet and sad tone to this piece which truly moves the reader. I can feel the sense of loss and love. Plans altered can be devastating when it comes to affairs of the heart, and you capture that with enormous grace.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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There is a sweet and sad tone to this piece which truly moves the reader. I can feel the sense of loss and love. Plans altered can be devastating when it comes to affairs of the heart, and you capture that with enormous grace.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2019
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I really appreciate your taking the time to read and share your insightful comments.
