Stream Ten
free verse for the club15 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The picture you have chosen is perfect for the setting of the mood of this account. I like the juxtaposition. "a little stinging,
then the wait " but then more stinging no of the eyes but of the heart. he reader has it right in there face in this poem why "ignorance can preserve bliss". Now we know so many mirrors are cracked. This could be a cautionary tale. Do not wait too long to appreciate what you have. Well thought out.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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The picture you have chosen is perfect for the setting of the mood of this account. I like the juxtaposition. "a little stinging,
then the wait " but then more stinging no of the eyes but of the heart. he reader has it right in there face in this poem why "ignorance can preserve bliss". Now we know so many mirrors are cracked. This could be a cautionary tale. Do not wait too long to appreciate what you have. Well thought out.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I am back, with two functioning eyes and twenty-five pounds lighter, and a muse that is still tongue-tied.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Red. Good poem. I take it that you just had a cataract op. I had one in February and one in June. Great to see clearly again. I don't need glasses anymore. Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Hi Red. Good poem. I take it that you just had a cataract op. I had one in February and one in June. Great to see clearly again. I don't need glasses anymore. Marilyn
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I need reading glasses for the very fine print, and binoculars for the stars, but in between, my plastic bulbs work very well. I like it. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. Maybe my muse will wander home soon...
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Good 10 minute free verse Red, realising after the cataracts are gone what the world really looks like.
Liked the -- good dope, cute nurse - a little humour, a little serious, and a good read.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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Good 10 minute free verse Red, realising after the cataracts are gone what the world really looks like.
Liked the -- good dope, cute nurse - a little humour, a little serious, and a good read.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 10-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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I am back, with two eyes, twenty-five pounds lighter. Sorry for the long delay in replying. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Now if my rambling muse would come home....
Comment from Priest B. Brown
What one would call a crutch can often me an admission that we are all indeed... crippled in one way or another. So, those who refuse the help are the ones truly deceived.
Stirring, thoughtful and brilliant.
Great Job.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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What one would call a crutch can often me an admission that we are all indeed... crippled in one way or another. So, those who refuse the help are the ones truly deceived.
Stirring, thoughtful and brilliant.
Great Job.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2019
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It has been a rough summer, hot, with pets and friends dying. Sorry about the long delay, and thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is thought-provoking and well-written. You have drawn an effective comparison/contrast between what we "see" when vision is clouded and what we see when vision is crystal clear.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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This is thought-provoking and well-written. You have drawn an effective comparison/contrast between what we "see" when vision is clouded and what we see when vision is crystal clear.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Unfortunately my renewed vision has unveiled nothing I feel capable of writing. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. Apology for the delayed reply.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good to see you, Red.
-Interesting image.
-A good stream of
consciousness poem.
-The description in
the second verse is
particularly vivid.
-I like the third verse, too;
good description and
concluding line.
-Hope this finds you doing well.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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-Good to see you, Red.
-Interesting image.
-A good stream of
consciousness poem.
-The description in
the second verse is
particularly vivid.
-I like the third verse, too;
good description and
concluding line.
-Hope this finds you doing well.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my post.
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You are very welcome. It's good to see you, and I hope you are doing well. Take care.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I enjoyed the read of this free verse poem, and the taletelling, and word visuals and word imagery; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I enjoyed the read of this free verse poem, and the taletelling, and word visuals and word imagery; well said, well done. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 08-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my post.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your 10 minute free verse, Red. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines/words flow smoothly with great details. I have a friend who just had cataract
surgery, and she felt much the same way. Your description of your pets is sad-esp as they age. Nice to see you are back. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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You did a great job with your 10 minute free verse, Red. I enjoyed reading it. Your lines/words flow smoothly with great details. I have a friend who just had cataract
surgery, and she felt much the same way. Your description of your pets is sad-esp as they age. Nice to see you are back. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my post. The eye surgery took some getting
used to!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ten minute bash for the free verse club. Telling us about your absence and in the process of healing after a cataract removall, now you can see clearly.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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A very well-written ten minute bash for the free verse club. Telling us about your absence and in the process of healing after a cataract removall, now you can see clearly.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my post. I had a clash between eyes, who was going to be the dominant eye. Scary.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Five stars for a strong beginning and a strong ending! Then I had to look up Lucinda Matlock and remembered the Spoon River Anthology assignments we had in high school. The literal vision doctor appointment in the office, is of course, symbolic of how we view the world mentally as well. Nice job.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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Five stars for a strong beginning and a strong ending! Then I had to look up Lucinda Matlock and remembered the Spoon River Anthology assignments we had in high school. The literal vision doctor appointment in the office, is of course, symbolic of how we view the world mentally as well. Nice job.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2020
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I apologize for the long delay in replying. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my post.