Along a Broken Road
A 5 Line Poem38 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Melissa.
-The syllable count is
good, and the use of
one continuous thought
is effective.
-Good imagery, rhyme, and topic,
as well as personification of it.
-The imagery also adds to
the message in the poem.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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-Nice image, Melissa.
-The syllable count is
good, and the use of
one continuous thought
is effective.
-Good imagery, rhyme, and topic,
as well as personification of it.
-The imagery also adds to
the message in the poem.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much, Pam!
Melissa
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You are welcome, Melissa.
Comment from juliaSjames
It's not easy to create a rhymed and metered write and still meet the requirements of this limited syllable contest.
Add the effective alliteration of "soaked in somber grey" and your poem becomes a technical masterpiece. Kudos!
Many possible meanings for this glimpse of life's journey. But I choose to see it as the road of atonement that leads in the end to salvation through a "narrow way."
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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It's not easy to create a rhymed and metered write and still meet the requirements of this limited syllable contest.
Add the effective alliteration of "soaked in somber grey" and your poem becomes a technical masterpiece. Kudos!
Many possible meanings for this glimpse of life's journey. But I choose to see it as the road of atonement that leads in the end to salvation through a "narrow way."
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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What a lovely review, Julia. Thank you for your insightful comments. I am glad you .. get it... Thansk so much.
Melissa
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You're welcome.
Comment from Pantygynt
It is good to see one of these shortform poems making sense and being poetically expressed into the bargain. This is a lovely little gem. You have also chosen an excellent picture to accompany it.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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It is good to see one of these shortform poems making sense and being poetically expressed into the bargain. This is a lovely little gem. You have also chosen an excellent picture to accompany it.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much, Jim. I think it is a bit negative, but that was my day yesterday... I hope for a brighter today. I am getting so much out of the class, Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Along a Broken Road", is short, succinct and very much to the point. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. To me, this is a six,but sadly I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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"Along a Broken Road", is short, succinct and very much to the point. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. To me, this is a six,but sadly I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Hello. Thank you very much for this lovely review. I am glad you liked it and ... got it.. Much appreciated, Duchess.
Melissa
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
For victory, for the time being, wounded spirits continue their struggle for living, and now they travel on a broken road through a narrow way; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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For victory, for the time being, wounded spirits continue their struggle for living, and now they travel on a broken road through a narrow way; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Hello Dr. A... good morning. I really appreciate you taking the time to review!!
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written five-Line poem about the road we walk each day with wounded spirits we travel on the broken road with all our sorrows and pain it is not easy ton stay on the narrow way.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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A very well-written five-Line poem about the road we walk each day with wounded spirits we travel on the broken road with all our sorrows and pain it is not easy ton stay on the narrow way.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Hi Sandra... thanks for the review!!
Melissa
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Sugarray, this is a good entry for the 5 line poem.
The opening two lines - wounded spirits - create the atmosphere of this descriptive piece with rhyme and a perfect picture choice to enhance the feel. Great job! I like it! ~DD
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Sugarray, this is a good entry for the 5 line poem.
The opening two lines - wounded spirits - create the atmosphere of this descriptive piece with rhyme and a perfect picture choice to enhance the feel. Great job! I like it! ~DD
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thanks, DD. I am glad you liked this gray piece... I normally do not write such negative pieces, but I like to shake things up a bit.
Melissa
Comment from Heather Knight
Wow! Quite striking and poignant. Both your poem and the artwork. For some reason, you made me think of Wuthering Heights.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Wow! Quite striking and poignant. Both your poem and the artwork. For some reason, you made me think of Wuthering Heights.
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Hi Maria. Thanks so very much for your review!!
Melissa
Comment from Janetsue
'wounded spirits' is an excellent way to describe those who are down and struggling with life. You have written a moving 5 line poem and I wish you well in the contest!
(That is a striking picture--very reminiscent of Ansel Adams' beautiful photos. It fits perfectly with your message.)
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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'wounded spirits' is an excellent way to describe those who are down and struggling with life. You have written a moving 5 line poem and I wish you well in the contest!
(That is a striking picture--very reminiscent of Ansel Adams' beautiful photos. It fits perfectly with your message.)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thank you Spangle. I really appreciate your time you took to review. :)
Melissa
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written piece movingly describes those who are downcast
and losing--or have lost--hope, feeling that their choices in life have been lost or irreparably damaged.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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This well-written piece movingly describes those who are downcast
and losing--or have lost--hope, feeling that their choices in life have been lost or irreparably damaged.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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I really like your insightful review, Janice, Spot on!! Thanks for the great review.
Melissa
