tethered to our Earth (5-7-5)
kite flying17 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Hearing some fun poetic devices hidden in here. "th" sound in "tethered" and "earth," and alliteration with "b" in "breaks the bond." I think you are hinting at zoomorphism, a cool word I learned a month or so ago, with the kite waggling its tail like a dog or snake, perhaps. I might put a comma after earth and un-capitalize it.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Hearing some fun poetic devices hidden in here. "th" sound in "tethered" and "earth," and alliteration with "b" in "breaks the bond." I think you are hinting at zoomorphism, a cool word I learned a month or so ago, with the kite waggling its tail like a dog or snake, perhaps. I might put a comma after earth and un-capitalize it.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Good catches Crystie! Sometimes, they just slide in for me. I was trying to raise Earth to a higher level. Normally I avoid caps in all my verses.
Zoomorphism may be an entry for a future obscure word contest for you or me! LOL
Mark
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Gorgeous imagery that is complimented by a stunning photo. You tell and entire story and set it exquisitely with just a few words--not an easy feat! Lovely.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Gorgeous imagery that is complimented by a stunning photo. You tell and entire story and set it exquisitely with just a few words--not an easy feat! Lovely.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Thanks Shauna for your lovely review. So pleased it met your pleasure. What you see is my typical posting style in 5-7-5 syllables. I try to use FanArt illustrations whenever I can.
Mark
Comment from Nike23
This poem follows the 575 rules. Your word choice is vivid and descriptive. I like the word tethered. The word makes me think of being very connected. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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This poem follows the 575 rules. Your word choice is vivid and descriptive. I like the word tethered. The word makes me think of being very connected. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Thanks for your comments Nike. Apparently, other reviewers liked my choice of 'tethered' too.
Mark
Comment from Janetsue
This is a posting filled with an energy being shared with readers. It can be interpreted on a personal level for those whose childhoods were enhanced by kite flying experiences--the elation and then the fall when one's kite plummets down. Perfect graphic, too. I enjoyed reading this very much, Mark.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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This is a posting filled with an energy being shared with readers. It can be interpreted on a personal level for those whose childhoods were enhanced by kite flying experiences--the elation and then the fall when one's kite plummets down. Perfect graphic, too. I enjoyed reading this very much, Mark.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2019
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Thanks Spangle for such a high-flying review. I liked your insightful comments. So pleased it had different meanings for you to consider.
Mark
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You're very welcome, Mark!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I enjoyed this metaphorical 5-7-5 short piece.
We are but kites enjoying a soaring journey should we make that effort. Our umbilical chord - first visible then not - soon frays to release into....
I got carried away but that is where it took me :-) ~DD
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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I enjoyed this metaphorical 5-7-5 short piece.
We are but kites enjoying a soaring journey should we make that effort. Our umbilical chord - first visible then not - soon frays to release into....
I got carried away but that is where it took me :-) ~DD
Comment Written 04-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2019
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DD,
I do like the way you interpreted my short verse - much more vivid than my short form! My guess you can run with those sentiments and create a much longer one in the same vein. As likely shared previously with you, my poetry skill set does not include entries that exceed my 5-7-5 type genre.
Glad you skyed/skied with me on my posting.
Mark
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It was a breeze Mark. Thanks for the share :-) ~DD
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, I do so like this one as it takes our sky and blends it into part of the universe...how cool is that!! :) :) And then you leave the reader with the sense that the kite will fly forever into that universe...cool! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Oh, I do so like this one as it takes our sky and blends it into part of the universe...how cool is that!! :) :) And then you leave the reader with the sense that the kite will fly forever into that universe...cool! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Yvette,
It is doubtful that a dirigible (or hot air balloon) image would give you the same emotion. LOL
Mark
Comment from Sugarray77
I like the word tethered. It conjures up a bit of restraint, but not a full blown restriction to something. You have done a good job with this 5-7-5, Mark, its an enjoyable read.
Melissa
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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I like the word tethered. It conjures up a bit of restraint, but not a full blown restriction to something. You have done a good job with this 5-7-5, Mark, its an enjoyable read.
Melissa
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Melissa
I thought a kite was more manageable than a dirigible for this effort. LOL
Mark
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about flying kites I the sky with a string atrached to one on the ground to have control over the flight until the connection breaks
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about flying kites I the sky with a string atrached to one on the ground to have control over the flight until the connection breaks
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Sandra,
Glad this short verse connected with you. So pleased with your review and compliments.
Mark
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed the tiny but dramatic story your 5-7-5 recounted and the matching, energetic picture. Your made kite flying more than a pastime. Well done- Joan
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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I enjoyed the tiny but dramatic story your 5-7-5 recounted and the matching, energetic picture. Your made kite flying more than a pastime. Well done- Joan
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thanks Joan for flying with me on this story.
Mark
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Tethered to our Earth", is short, succinct and very much to the point. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. To me, this is a six, but I'm never given enough of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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"Tethered to our Earth", is short, succinct and very much to the point. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. To me, this is a six, but I'm never given enough of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Thanks Duchess for flying with me on this journey. Hopefully, you will sail with me on other short trips (-:
Mark
