Hark Fair Maiden
A short humorous mishap from a grade school play15 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
Actors tend to make better authors on many occasions. I played the porter in Macbeth years ago in a school production. Most of the naughty bits had been cut and I came under pressure from two sides, from pupils to say it like Shakespeare wrote it, and from the teacher who was directing, to stick to the bowdlerised version or take the consequences.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Actors tend to make better authors on many occasions. I played the porter in Macbeth years ago in a school production. Most of the naughty bits had been cut and I came under pressure from two sides, from pupils to say it like Shakespeare wrote it, and from the teacher who was directing, to stick to the bowdlerised version or take the consequences.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Hey, and actor's gotta do what an actor's gotta do. I hope you stood your ground.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello and happy Thursday to you Nom1338. I have to ask the question as to why a class of 5th graders are doing a romantic comedy? Aside from that it is a humorous story, wish I could have seen it myself. Good job.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Hello and happy Thursday to you Nom1338. I have to ask the question as to why a class of 5th graders are doing a romantic comedy? Aside from that it is a humorous story, wish I could have seen it myself. Good job.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you. To my knowledge, the account is pure fiction, so I don't know if there ever was actually a play at all. I too would have loved to have seen it.
Comment from Alex Rosel
Ha, ha. You caused me a few chuckles with this flash fiction piece. It provides an entertaining read :)
I think it's most probably based on a fiction, but it's none the less funny for that.
Good luck with the competition :)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Ha, ha. You caused me a few chuckles with this flash fiction piece. It provides an entertaining read :)
I think it's most probably based on a fiction, but it's none the less funny for that.
Good luck with the competition :)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you so much. I must admit that it gave me a few chuckles as well.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Might want to recount the wordage here as the competition requires exactly 100 words and I believe this is only 97.
Johnny was supposed to say," Ah, love's sweet epistle" - need punctuation before the closing speech marks here.
"Uh, Hark fair maiden, I came - hark shouldn't be capitalised here.
Love shot a pistol, err. a pistol shot of love. - A should be capitalised before pistol.
It's a good, fun little piece.
GMG
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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Hi there,
Might want to recount the wordage here as the competition requires exactly 100 words and I believe this is only 97.
Johnny was supposed to say," Ah, love's sweet epistle" - need punctuation before the closing speech marks here.
"Uh, Hark fair maiden, I came - hark shouldn't be capitalised here.
Love shot a pistol, err. a pistol shot of love. - A should be capitalised before pistol.
It's a good, fun little piece.
GMG
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from Emma 2
Your story "Hark fair maiden" is brilliant. It's a good read and a great story. And it made me smile. ð???
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Your story "Hark fair maiden" is brilliant. It's a good read and a great story. And it made me smile. ð???
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Emma
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Thank you Emma 2. I appreciate your kind comments.
