Hark Fair Maiden
A short humorous mishap from a grade school play15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Hi there! I was skimming through your impressive portfolio in search of any posts that need just one more review to become "recognized" or "ATB"--
A difficult thing since most of your work is well past the ATB threshold!
At last, I found this one...maybe one more review will give you the blue ribbon you deserve!
Funny story! Even the " tame" version!
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Hi there! I was skimming through your impressive portfolio in search of any posts that need just one more review to become "recognized" or "ATB"--
A difficult thing since most of your work is well past the ATB threshold!
At last, I found this one...maybe one more review will give you the blue ribbon you deserve!
Funny story! Even the " tame" version!
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you for a very generous review. I owe you a great deal for your extreme kindness.
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You owe me nothing...
Although your smile really warms my heart!
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Nomi
Oh Lordy, this is the funniest one I've read so far. I so wish I could write like this. You'd think it wouldn't be so hard since it's only 100 words, but oh yeah it is! Great, great write. Well done and good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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Hi Nomi
Oh Lordy, this is the funniest one I've read so far. I so wish I could write like this. You'd think it wouldn't be so hard since it's only 100 words, but oh yeah it is! Great, great write. Well done and good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 12-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2019
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OMG. Thank you so much. I am such a romantic, there was no way I was not going to read and review your post. That you found enjoyment in mine is awesome. You, dear lady, are very much appreciated
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Hark Fair Maiden, meets the word requirement and gives a perfect example of dull lines getting spiced up and making a memory that survives a lifetime.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2019
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This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Hark Fair Maiden, meets the word requirement and gives a perfect example of dull lines getting spiced up and making a memory that survives a lifetime.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2019
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Thanks Bill, I was afraid that you might not see the post, I did not promote it as well or highly as I usually do.
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I?m behind on reviewing. Just got to this one.
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That's okay, II was willing to wait.
Comment from Rikki66
Reminds me of an old religious joke, the young priest nervous about his first sermon has too much sacramental wine and the taffy pull at St. Peters becomes a: you know.
Rikki:)
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Reminds me of an old religious joke, the young priest nervous about his first sermon has too much sacramental wine and the taffy pull at St. Peters becomes a: you know.
Rikki:)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Yes I do know. This particular story gave me lots of laughs as well.
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A laugh is always good.
Rikki:)
Comment from Earl Corp
Did you change from the profanity? I thought I read it with the profanity in it. I think its a funny little story that should get some attention in the voting booth. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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Did you change from the profanity? I thought I read it with the profanity in it. I think its a funny little story that should get some attention in the voting booth. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2019
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In the original telling, there were some cuss words that I omitted. Now I do admit that the term 'snatch' is slang for a woman's sex organ, but without it the joke does not work, and as things and words go, it is far less offensive that some other terms. I thank you for your review comments.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This was a fun story, which made me smile as I read it. I thought it was humorous, and I could picture the kids laughing, as the lines were misread in the play. I think it worked just as well, without added profanity. Profanity is overused, I think, in today's language usage. The photo is fun and adds to the story well. An enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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This was a fun story, which made me smile as I read it. I thought it was humorous, and I could picture the kids laughing, as the lines were misread in the play. I think it worked just as well, without added profanity. Profanity is overused, I think, in today's language usage. The photo is fun and adds to the story well. An enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Jesse, your comments are very well received and appreciated.
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You are very welcome.
Jesse
Comment from shaffer40
This is such a funny vignette. I could clearly see the kids getting flustered and saying all the wrong things. Actually, I think it's probably funnier minus the profanity, which would weaken the effect of the naughty botched lines.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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This is such a funny vignette. I could clearly see the kids getting flustered and saying all the wrong things. Actually, I think it's probably funnier minus the profanity, which would weaken the effect of the naughty botched lines.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I totally agree. I respect the choices comedians make when they decide to tell a joke, but the truly gifted ones rarely use profanity any more, it becomes a crutch and I feel takes away from a persons ability to make you laugh at the funny and not the profane.
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Meant to mention, I like the title.
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Thanks again for your great review.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This is very funny! You did an excellent job describing the interaction between these young people! I can see it happening for sure! I like your cleaned up version because hopefully, 5th graders aren't being more graphic than this! Yikes! LoL! xoxo
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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This is very funny! You did an excellent job describing the interaction between these young people! I can see it happening for sure! I like your cleaned up version because hopefully, 5th graders aren't being more graphic than this! Yikes! LoL! xoxo
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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We can only hope. I was well into my thirties before my mother even heard me say damn, and even then I was anticipating some sort of rebuke. That it did not come did not make me feel comfortable using cuss words around her.
Comment from Mastery
Funny stuff Nolan. I love it. I think you have a real winner here for the contest. I would suggest however for clarity and emphasis, you split this up into about five paragraphs. You will see them if you check, i'm sure. Great job, my friend. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Funny stuff Nolan. I love it. I think you have a real winner here for the contest. I would suggest however for clarity and emphasis, you split this up into about five paragraphs. You will see them if you check, i'm sure. Great job, my friend. : ) Bob
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thanks Bob, your opinion on anything I try is always appreciated and valued. Take care.
Comment from DonandVicki
I'm having trouble typing because I'm still shaking from laughing so hard. A real belly buster. I can remember being in a play in second grade, I was wearing a little girls dress and the class audience was laughing so hard. I should have enjoyed and played the comedian, but no... I ran off stage crying. A missed opportunity for sure. Thank you Nomi for the memories. Don
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I'm having trouble typing because I'm still shaking from laughing so hard. A real belly buster. I can remember being in a play in second grade, I was wearing a little girls dress and the class audience was laughing so hard. I should have enjoyed and played the comedian, but no... I ran off stage crying. A missed opportunity for sure. Thank you Nomi for the memories. Don
Comment Written 01-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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No, thank you. I am so sorry that your experience was not a happy one. I suspect tat you made up for it in later years. Thank you for your comments.
