The French Letter
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Comment from estory
I think you did a great job tying together several disperate loose ends of this story in this chapter. I loved how you turn Arnoux into the plot as well; he turns out to be a double agent. The bombing all a set up to make the terrorists think he is dead. And now we know why Charles is being recruited in the first place; as a travel writer, he is a perfect ruse to sneak into the Hindu Kush with Helen and get close enough to try and get rid of the Lion. So lots of people involved with this have at last been validated. And you did it all with crisp dialogue, in a tense setting, in a war room in fact, very James Bond. The set up for the adventure to Pakistan is perfect, you have some great suspense here, and this should pick up in tempo as we move into the next several chapters. This should be a hell of a finale. estory
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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I think you did a great job tying together several disperate loose ends of this story in this chapter. I loved how you turn Arnoux into the plot as well; he turns out to be a double agent. The bombing all a set up to make the terrorists think he is dead. And now we know why Charles is being recruited in the first place; as a travel writer, he is a perfect ruse to sneak into the Hindu Kush with Helen and get close enough to try and get rid of the Lion. So lots of people involved with this have at last been validated. And you did it all with crisp dialogue, in a tense setting, in a war room in fact, very James Bond. The set up for the adventure to Pakistan is perfect, you have some great suspense here, and this should pick up in tempo as we move into the next several chapters. This should be a hell of a finale. estory
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Glad you like the way this is developing. I've had difficulty in deciding quite how to draw things to a conclusion, but am beginning to see some possibilities now. I appreciate your encouragement and the sixth star. All the best, Tony
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Very well structured thought of and plotted with nice development, realistic characterization and dialogues; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
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Very well structured thought of and plotted with nice development, realistic characterization and dialogues; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Keep Writing, Inspiring, Changing
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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I appreciate your time in reviewing this chapter. Many thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You have caused a lot of suspense here and it's wonderful, I do so enjoy reading this novel. I can't wait until it's finished and published.
Whether from a desire to serve to my country, or (and this was more likely) (I am not sure the second 'to' after serve is necessary.)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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You have caused a lot of suspense here and it's wonderful, I do so enjoy reading this novel. I can't wait until it's finished and published.
Whether from a desire to serve to my country, or (and this was more likely) (I am not sure the second 'to' after serve is necessary.)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Barbara. I thought I'd corrected that last night, but must have forgotten to save! Thanks very much for spotting it and pointing it out. Appreciated! Tony. (I, too, can't wait now until it's finished and published! LOL)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
My opinion of Helen bounces around more than a superball on a racquet ball court LOL. This was a great read. SO much information provided - lots for the reader to take in and absorb. Nobody is what they seem, it's like walking a narrow path between quicksand and a cliff. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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My opinion of Helen bounces around more than a superball on a racquet ball court LOL. This was a great read. SO much information provided - lots for the reader to take in and absorb. Nobody is what they seem, it's like walking a narrow path between quicksand and a cliff. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Many thanks for your review and comments, Monica. Helen certainly keeps us guessing!
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I'd say she's a mess but I actually think she's smarter than all of us LOL.
Comment from Gail Denham
Good chapte r- easy to follow - I do wonder tho - when the man reached the embassy he worried about being put in a French prison. I think that's what you meant? Anyway - good job.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Good chapte r- easy to follow - I do wonder tho - when the man reached the embassy he worried about being put in a French prison. I think that's what you meant? Anyway - good job.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Very many thanks for your review and comments, Gail. Yes, Charles was really just idly speculating on that possibility while he was waiting for the door to open. Those security guards looked as though they meant business!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Things are moving ahead now, Tony! It was a surprise to see Helen there, but a relief for Charles, too. At least that answered a few of his questions about her. Now they'll be shooting off to dangerous places again. He's not going to be satisfied with his mundane, safe job as a travel writer when he's finished! lol. This is another great chapter, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Things are moving ahead now, Tony! It was a surprise to see Helen there, but a relief for Charles, too. At least that answered a few of his questions about her. Now they'll be shooting off to dangerous places again. He's not going to be satisfied with his mundane, safe job as a travel writer when he's finished! lol. This is another great chapter, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. I appreciate the sixth star. Things are certainly warming up for the poor man. I hope he can survive it all. At least he'll end up with a good story to tell. If things get too hot for him in Pakistan, I may have to call on Herbie to come and rescue him! LOL
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I'll give him fair warning! lol. xx
Comment from Dawn Munro
Tony, here we go again; I am dropping in because I simply can't resist, although it's hardly fair to you... Your writing, though, is so flawless, and the story so intriguing it inspires. I only wish I had more time to follow this book, but then maybe when the book is published I can get a copy. *smile*
I could single out so much of what you do that makes your writing so exceptional, but time is limited, and I know that YOU know, so I will mention only one thing (and give an example)-- "Moments passed."
So many new authors do not subscribe to brevity, and to the use of long and short sentences -- to cutting and slashing as necessary to write with impact. When they try, description is often lacking. Your work does not suffer in this regard at all, which makes for a compelling read.
Your descriptions place the reader within the scene, and those curt sentences keep him or her eager for the next statement. "Moments passed." Seems simple, but truly perfection -- a complete sentence, neatly tied up and delivering the experience. Thank you!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Tony, here we go again; I am dropping in because I simply can't resist, although it's hardly fair to you... Your writing, though, is so flawless, and the story so intriguing it inspires. I only wish I had more time to follow this book, but then maybe when the book is published I can get a copy. *smile*
I could single out so much of what you do that makes your writing so exceptional, but time is limited, and I know that YOU know, so I will mention only one thing (and give an example)-- "Moments passed."
So many new authors do not subscribe to brevity, and to the use of long and short sentences -- to cutting and slashing as necessary to write with impact. When they try, description is often lacking. Your work does not suffer in this regard at all, which makes for a compelling read.
Your descriptions place the reader within the scene, and those curt sentences keep him or her eager for the next statement. "Moments passed." Seems simple, but truly perfection -- a complete sentence, neatly tied up and delivering the experience. Thank you!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Lovely to hear from you, Dawn. Your occasional visits certainly brighten my day and boost my confidence. Thank you so much for your support and for the sixth star. All the best, Tony
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You're very welcome.Always a pleasure!
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A very entertaining story. Clear and descriptive. It held my attention from beginning to end. Not a single edit or adjustment necessary.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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A very entertaining story. Clear and descriptive. It held my attention from beginning to end. Not a single edit or adjustment necessary.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Lance. I appreciate your encouragement. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
So it seems like Gaston didn't die in the bombing but was only a ruse to put others off the scent. But before he can think twice, Charles has been sucked in to journey to Pakistan on a mission of destroying, at least in part that evil network, well done, Tony, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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So it seems like Gaston didn't die in the bombing but was only a ruse to put others off the scent. But before he can think twice, Charles has been sucked in to journey to Pakistan on a mission of destroying, at least in part that evil network, well done, Tony, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Many thanks, Roy. I appreciate your continued support of this lengthy tale. Best wishes, Tony.
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Most welcome
Comment from robyn corum
Tony,
Another fine chapter. It's often hard to remember this is a spy novel - there's so much time spent touring and loving. hahaha
One kind of important note:
--> "Gentlemen, this is Charles (Brandon)." His words were met with a few nods of greeting but no reciprocal introductions.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Tony,
Another fine chapter. It's often hard to remember this is a spy novel - there's so much time spent touring and loving. hahaha
One kind of important note:
--> "Gentlemen, this is Charles (Brandon)." His words were met with a few nods of greeting but no reciprocal introductions.
Thanks!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the review, Robyn, and for the spag pick up - now corrected. I was bound to do that eventually, with two characters starting with 'B'. LOL
