Monica
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Comment from robyn corum
Rox,
This woman is a hateful hag kind of gal. I like her! She's the kind you love to hate. hahaha
This should be quite interesting.
Notes:
1.) He saw the (muzzle) flash. The bullet hit his heart within seconds
--> I'm not sure how to word the last part, but it would be much less than seconds - milliseconds, maybe
2.) of his car, start it and let it (run) into a tree or rock
3.) the shoulder into the empty field that (bordered) the highway.
4.) Once (hers) was hidden, she got back behind the wheel
5.) position she leaned it against the open driver('s) side door. The
Hope this helps! Thanks~!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Rox,
This woman is a hateful hag kind of gal. I like her! She's the kind you love to hate. hahaha
This should be quite interesting.
Notes:
1.) He saw the (muzzle) flash. The bullet hit his heart within seconds
--> I'm not sure how to word the last part, but it would be much less than seconds - milliseconds, maybe
2.) of his car, start it and let it (run) into a tree or rock
3.) the shoulder into the empty field that (bordered) the highway.
4.) Once (hers) was hidden, she got back behind the wheel
5.) position she leaned it against the open driver('s) side door. The
Hope this helps! Thanks~!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thank you dear. I changed it to 'within a millisecond.' =} That's fast man.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Best story I have read today. A good start to a crime story with the monster being female this time. Wow! Be care full of a bad female because when they are bad they are very, very bad. Monica is out to destroy men. Just for fun it seems. Well done, Rox. Nancy:)
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Best story I have read today. A good start to a crime story with the monster being female this time. Wow! Be care full of a bad female because when they are bad they are very, very bad. Monica is out to destroy men. Just for fun it seems. Well done, Rox. Nancy:)
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Yes, she is a very bad one. Thanks you dear. Rox
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello again Roxanna. That was one hell of a continuation to the story. Damn I'm so sad William is already dead, WTF? This is one crazy lady, I feel sorry for who ever gets in her way. Can't wait to read more! Great job!
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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Hello again Roxanna. That was one hell of a continuation to the story. Damn I'm so sad William is already dead, WTF? This is one crazy lady, I feel sorry for who ever gets in her way. Can't wait to read more! Great job!
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Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Yes, now I have to figure out what comes next. =] Thank you sir. Rox
