Chalk One up For Smuckatellly
Smuckatelly comes out smellling like a rose33 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
WoW! I loved your story .i wish i had a six .****** virtual sixes for you .
i loved your smuckatelly ,one smart alec .good that he taught you all and gyou people got back a little of your own medicine
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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WoW! I loved your story .i wish i had a six .****** virtual sixes for you .
i loved your smuckatelly ,one smart alec .good that he taught you all and gyou people got back a little of your own medicine
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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I appreciate the virtual six. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Sallyo
Ha! Smuckatelly was by no means as dumb as a box of rocks! This story is great fun and I can imagine it would go down well told at a campfire. There are a few oddities in the formatting (Evil Eddy I expect) and one sentence just isn't right.
Since we were the only Infantry unit assigned to an airfield and the Aviators lived in awe of us.
I suggest you get rid of the "Since".
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Ha! Smuckatelly was by no means as dumb as a box of rocks! This story is great fun and I can imagine it would go down well told at a campfire. There are a few oddities in the formatting (Evil Eddy I expect) and one sentence just isn't right.
Since we were the only Infantry unit assigned to an airfield and the Aviators lived in awe of us.
I suggest you get rid of the "Since".
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2019
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Could you clarify why this story rated a four especially because you only had one suggestion.
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The formatting problems... If it's a problem I can always re-rate. I just follow the site rules for reviewing, but most people don't.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Bwah-ha-ha... I remember snipe stories even at Mormon girls' camp. The white-out caper is one to remember! 10 points to the newbie and the German secretary! Thank you for sharing a funny story. Interesting enough to look up some more later, yes!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Bwah-ha-ha... I remember snipe stories even at Mormon girls' camp. The white-out caper is one to remember! 10 points to the newbie and the German secretary! Thank you for sharing a funny story. Interesting enough to look up some more later, yes!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Yhtnk you, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I hope you'll check out the other ones and let me know if I have a book or not. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Mastery
Good one, Earl. Puts me in mind of a similar deal that happened to me as a new comer to supply section when I was in the Marines. On my first day, the Top Sgt. told me to go to ethe warehouse and get a carbon tool. Right. LOL Good write, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Good one, Earl. Puts me in mind of a similar deal that happened to me as a new comer to supply section when I was in the Marines. On my first day, the Top Sgt. told me to go to ethe warehouse and get a carbon tool. Right. LOL Good write, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Bob, I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Always a pleasure to read your writing, Earl. Bob
Comment from robyn corum
Earl,
This guy seems to come out smelling like a rose no matter what poop you guys threw on him. I like that!
Around here, the newest (old) thing is sending new teen drivers in to ask to have their blinker fluid refilled. *smile* The oldies never truly die.
haha!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Earl,
This guy seems to come out smelling like a rose no matter what poop you guys threw on him. I like that!
Around here, the newest (old) thing is sending new teen drivers in to ask to have their blinker fluid refilled. *smile* The oldies never truly die.
haha!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Robyn for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from poetwatch
Earl, that is a pearl of a laugh turned around. :) Smuckatelly is a true name? Or have the names been changed to protect the innocent? :) either way I got a smile. When a trick turns around and it tickles down the arm of a SFC. The common soldier is the last to laugh. :) This is a good entry for the True Story Contest. Thanks for sharing and good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Earl, that is a pearl of a laugh turned around. :) Smuckatelly is a true name? Or have the names been changed to protect the innocent? :) either way I got a smile. When a trick turns around and it tickles down the arm of a SFC. The common soldier is the last to laugh. :) This is a good entry for the True Story Contest. Thanks for sharing and good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thnk you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Earl. I've always enjoyed reading about the adventures of Smuckatelly. I believe I may have been in the service with him but he had a different name. In fact he had several names. Keep 'em comin' Earl. Robert
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hello Earl. I've always enjoyed reading about the adventures of Smuckatelly. I believe I may have been in the service with him but he had a different name. In fact he had several names. Keep 'em comin' Earl. Robert
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Robert, if you've read my other Smuckatelly stories do you think I have a good book going? I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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I think the stories are very funny. Veterans would get it. I think it might even remind them I'm situations but they were caught up in while serving.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Smuckatelly always seems to get the best of you. This is so funny. What a riot that he was able to bring something back each time. Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Smuckatelly always seems to get the best of you. This is so funny. What a riot that he was able to bring something back each time. Hope you do well in the contest. Rox
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Rox for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Kelley Stead
Love a good hazing story. Not crazy about your "Now for the rest of the story..." it chops it up a little bit and messes with the flow of the story. But i love how you tied it into boy scouts and the overall masculine hazing theme that brings some humor into a serious subject(military). Kind of reminds me of a MASH or even Catch-22 type feel. Well done.
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Love a good hazing story. Not crazy about your "Now for the rest of the story..." it chops it up a little bit and messes with the flow of the story. But i love how you tied it into boy scouts and the overall masculine hazing theme that brings some humor into a serious subject(military). Kind of reminds me of a MASH or even Catch-22 type feel. Well done.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Sally Law
This was fun and we all love the stories of Smuckatelly. I belonged to a high school sorority, and remember the initiations. You have a few issues here and I know that you were repair them, so I went ahead and gave you a deserving excellent rating.
You slipped out of the past tense and into the present tense in this paragraph.
"Fun part is when they show up empty handed we made them do push-ups." My suggestion: "The fun part played out when a newbie showed up empty handed--we would've made him drop and give us twenty."
There is also a few places in the text where you have extra spaces instead of single spacing.
Add: (that) we'd been sending him on Dummy Missions for three days, . . . .
I hope these critics get you polished and ready for the contest, Earl.
Sending you my best today and for the contest,
Sally :+)
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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This was fun and we all love the stories of Smuckatelly. I belonged to a high school sorority, and remember the initiations. You have a few issues here and I know that you were repair them, so I went ahead and gave you a deserving excellent rating.
You slipped out of the past tense and into the present tense in this paragraph.
"Fun part is when they show up empty handed we made them do push-ups." My suggestion: "The fun part played out when a newbie showed up empty handed--we would've made him drop and give us twenty."
There is also a few places in the text where you have extra spaces instead of single spacing.
Add: (that) we'd been sending him on Dummy Missions for three days, . . . .
I hope these critics get you polished and ready for the contest, Earl.
Sending you my best today and for the contest,
Sally :+)
Comment Written 30-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Im glad you enjoyed it, it was a fun memory. Thank you for the tips to polish it up, i appreciate it.
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You are very welcome!
