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23 total reviews
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
first and foremost, I hope your son is getting favorable results
from his cardiac testing. I know firsthand what it is like to have
a child with serious health issues.
I like "Seige of the Rockin' A" for the title of your book. Congratulations
on getting your book published.
enjoyed this chapter,
jan
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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barbara:
first and foremost, I hope your son is getting favorable results
from his cardiac testing. I know firsthand what it is like to have
a child with serious health issues.
I like "Seige of the Rockin' A" for the title of your book. Congratulations
on getting your book published.
enjoyed this chapter,
jan
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the well wishes. So far that title is winning. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Katie Jo and I will pray for your family and esp your son. He is way too young for that. (Katie Jo crosses her paws and prays to the Puppy God.) This is well written and interesting story, my friend. I look forward to getting caught up on what is going on~~Debbie
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Katie Jo and I will pray for your family and esp your son. He is way too young for that. (Katie Jo crosses her paws and prays to the Puppy God.) This is well written and interesting story, my friend. I look forward to getting caught up on what is going on~~Debbie
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2019
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Tell Katie Jo that I appreciate her puppy prayers. All prayers are important. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Gail Denham
Praying for your son - he's way too young for this. Do keep us all posted. This chapter moved right along. I would vote for the shorter title "Seige..." it says the same thing I believe.
God bless your son - and keep your from fretting (that's a big order, at least it is for me)
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Praying for your son - he's way too young for this. Do keep us all posted. This chapter moved right along. I would vote for the shorter title "Seige..." it says the same thing I believe.
God bless your son - and keep your from fretting (that's a big order, at least it is for me)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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I have a worry issue going for me. Thank you for the prayers. We're waiting on test results. Thank you for the review.
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blessings.
Comment from SLMorrical
A wonderful chapter. I can picture your characters and how they interact with each other. Mac needs to just admit she likes Logan. It may not be obvious to Mac that her and Logan are attracted to each other and are starting a relationship, but it is obvious to everyone else. Mac is a very interesting woman. I would be wondering also why he wanted to know if Mac still played poker. I guess everyone is under suspicion for attempting to kill Mac. This flows well, and introduces more characters. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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A wonderful chapter. I can picture your characters and how they interact with each other. Mac needs to just admit she likes Logan. It may not be obvious to Mac that her and Logan are attracted to each other and are starting a relationship, but it is obvious to everyone else. Mac is a very interesting woman. I would be wondering also why he wanted to know if Mac still played poker. I guess everyone is under suspicion for attempting to kill Mac. This flows well, and introduces more characters. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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We'll find out more in my next post. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Its a a good thing I had just eaten before I read this or I would be raiding the fredg. Good one Barb. Trying to figure out where this is going . Love working in shadows?
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Its a a good thing I had just eaten before I read this or I would be raiding the fredg. Good one Barb. Trying to figure out where this is going . Love working in shadows?
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Yes, I do like to keep people guessing. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation.
Background, Previous Post, and then starts the current part of the story.
I like your this Approach.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Description of scenes, especially Kitchen related matters, are interesting.
Dialogues / conversational part are worth enjoying.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation.
Background, Previous Post, and then starts the current part of the story.
I like your this Approach.
Smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Description of scenes, especially Kitchen related matters, are interesting.
Dialogues / conversational part are worth enjoying.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Tootsie55
Another great read. As usual always looking forward to your next chapter. As far as some things I said elsewhere, I see another example of the "are" possibly left out. "How (are??) you coming?" Keep em coming!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Another great read. As usual always looking forward to your next chapter. As far as some things I said elsewhere, I see another example of the "are" possibly left out. "How (are??) you coming?" Keep em coming!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I will recheck that area, but I have a feeling it's another time us Americans have butchered the language. LOL
Comment from judiverse
This is great. Joanie seems a bit of a matchmaker, so I know she'll be more than happy to provide Mac with some easy to prepare recipes. Even I would find a brownie with ice cream and chocolate topping on it a bit much. Delicious, though. Wonder what Mitch has in mind for Mac when he inquires about her poker game. Excellent work with this chapter, and it moves at a great pace. judi
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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This is great. Joanie seems a bit of a matchmaker, so I know she'll be more than happy to provide Mac with some easy to prepare recipes. Even I would find a brownie with ice cream and chocolate topping on it a bit much. Delicious, though. Wonder what Mitch has in mind for Mac when he inquires about her poker game. Excellent work with this chapter, and it moves at a great pace. judi
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. Remember this scene. It will show up at about chapter 25. LOL
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Sankey
Hi, good to see you back. LOOK SIXES again! I miss my favourite prose writers. Just wondering about the following? Suggestion. In the kitchen, McKenzie stood beside (Joanie)and watched [Joanie]
After the men[,] headed outside,
(new line for dialogue pretty sure)"Is there anything romantic starting between you and Logan?"
Just in passing noticing a couple of instances where "are" is being omitted as in the following examples/ Is that a way of speaking or??
How (are? or 're) you doing
Why (are? or 're)you asking?
Yay got it in the last..."Why are you interested
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Hi, good to see you back. LOOK SIXES again! I miss my favourite prose writers. Just wondering about the following? Suggestion. In the kitchen, McKenzie stood beside (Joanie)and watched [Joanie]
After the men[,] headed outside,
(new line for dialogue pretty sure)"Is there anything romantic starting between you and Logan?"
Just in passing noticing a couple of instances where "are" is being omitted as in the following examples/ Is that a way of speaking or??
How (are? or 're) you doing
Why (are? or 're)you asking?
Yay got it in the last..."Why are you interested
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, first of all I want to say that my thoughts are with you. What a worry it must be. I hope your son is okay.
Then to the story, and that's where my six comes in. It's well written and I'm looking forward to more. I like McKenzie a lot. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Hi Barbara, first of all I want to say that my thoughts are with you. What a worry it must be. I hope your son is okay.
Then to the story, and that's where my six comes in. It's well written and I'm looking forward to more. I like McKenzie a lot. Ulla xx
Comment Written 28-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the thoughts. We're waiting for the test results. Thank you for the kind review.
