King Wise
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Comment from Frank Jauregui
Thanks for sharing this acrostic poem on the power of a name. Numbers appointed to people in place of names, usually have a negative connotation - The Holocaust, the number of the Beast in Revelation etc. But society and the world still insist that we use them for identity. Instinctively, I don't think we like to be considered a number by anyone.
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Thanks for sharing this acrostic poem on the power of a name. Numbers appointed to people in place of names, usually have a negative connotation - The Holocaust, the number of the Beast in Revelation etc. But society and the world still insist that we use them for identity. Instinctively, I don't think we like to be considered a number by anyone.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
I've never seen this style of writing before, but then I'm new here and find fascinating new things daily. Thank you for opening my mind to something new. Best wishes and have a wonderful life.
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I've never seen this style of writing before, but then I'm new here and find fascinating new things daily. Thank you for opening my mind to something new. Best wishes and have a wonderful life.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
Excellent poem written for this Contest. You made a humorous poem about a serious topic. In life numbers assigned to our name are important. The image was an interesting choice for your piece. I enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest. Blessings. ~Brenda
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Excellent poem written for this Contest. You made a humorous poem about a serious topic. In life numbers assigned to our name are important. The image was an interesting choice for your piece. I enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest. Blessings. ~Brenda
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review.
I am glad that you have written this good review.
Please explain me your review:
Excellent poem written for this Contest. You made a humorous poem about a serious topic. In life numbers assigned to our name are important. The image was an interesting choice for your piece. I enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck in the contest. Blessings. ~Brenda
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
(i) Is the first sentence complete and expressive? I do not understand it. Please explain me clearly. Please write to me the type of the sentence.
(ii) Please explain me you have written it is an excellent poem in the first sentence, and again you have mentioned it a humorous poem in the second sentence, which one is correct you think, please explain.
(iii) Please explain why you have written the poem a contest entry and write to me where you have read the poem is a contest entry, please name the contest and information you read in the poem.
(iv) Please explain what makes you to think and write the poem is a contest entry.
(v) Please explain what you mean by the sentence -- In life numbers assigned to our name are important. I never understand what you are trying to mean. There is nothing in the poem about the matter you have written. Please explain, quoting the lines that means what you have stated. I know as a reviewer, I cannot write anything which is not mentioned in the work I review. I can write my view but I should expressively mention that. I do not teach you how to review. I mention the rule of writing reviews. I do not want your explanation unnecessarily or I do not wish to plead my work or prove me a best reviewer.
(vi) Please explain what you mean by ?Good luck in the contest?. Please explain what makes you to think the poem is a contest entry. Where in the poem have you read about any contest? Because you have offered a good wish. Please explain this sentence is necessary and relevant.
(vii) Please explain what makes you to write the wish word ? ?Blessings?.
(viii) In view of the facts given hereinabove, please explain that (i) the review was written by you as a reviewer, (ii) you have written the review only after reading the poem fully, (iii) you have also read the author?s notes, and (iv) you have written your view only after reading the work fully.
We all make mistakes, we know ?to err is human, to forgive is divine?. Our mistakes are forgiven, if it is confessed.
I want your explanations for you have written controversial words ------ (i) (excellent poem and humorous poem) and -----(ii) controversial rating (excellent poem and it is rated average ? good as you have not explained your rating, though it is your right, choice, author?s right is to get explanation for rating), ---- (iii) confusing words (contest, good luck in the contest, blessings), ----(iv) irrelevant words (contest, though the work was posted on 26th July, 2019, reposted today 3rd April, 2020), ---- (v) fake words (contest, good luck in the contest, blessings; the poem is an original work of 2019 reposted today, and it is not a part of any contest), ---- (vi) doubtful words (In life numbers assigned to our name are important; because there is nothing as such in the poem).
I earnestly request you to explain the points from your review.
I have written nothing to feel you embarrassed and feel you insulted.
Please do not take it personally.
Your explanation will reveal many truths and help me to learn so many things and I hope you would wish to teach me to learn anything you wish to.
With the kindest personal regards,
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
3rd April, 2020
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I am sorry but I thought this was a contest entry. I have read your lengthy review. I say "Blessings" at the end of each of my reviews. Your poem does mention numbers and your image reminds me of the gates of Heaven. I know your said that God is not religion. I think that God is religion. I thought I gave you a five star rating. If I didn't I will change it. In order to give you a lengthy explanation would require me printing the poem out and going through each point. I am sorry you didn't like my review. I am new to Fanstory and just getting use to all the ways of reviewing. Blessings. ~Brenda
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I just realized I gave you a four star rating when I met to make it five. How do I change this? Thank you. ~Brenda
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Thank you. Just delete (as edit) four star and instead rate higher.
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem shows us that there really is power in a name and that is why we are often known by our social security number or id numbers at work,
to take away some of our power.
I find there are a lot of grammar problems and a bit too much repetition.
Keep writing and keep healthy.
dp
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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This poem shows us that there really is power in a name and that is why we are often known by our social security number or id numbers at work,
to take away some of our power.
I find there are a lot of grammar problems and a bit too much repetition.
Keep writing and keep healthy.
dp
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you.
I give you relevant extracts from my author?s notes:
(i) For clarity, emphasis and true appreciation, repetition of words is considered necessary and intentional
(ii) Less punctuation is intentional
I never plead my writing.
I do not understand your review, because it is neither complete, nor expressive, so I wish to get your explanations:
Moreover, your review is not helpful, so I need your explanations.
Please explain, guide and suggest me anything to clarify your words -- I find there are a lot of grammar problems and a bit too much repetition.
It is only an 8 line poem and you have found a lot of grammar problems etc, so please help me to know with your clarification, explanations, etc and help me to learn identifying those grammar problems I have made.
I do hope you never hesitate to teach me grammar in a few minutes to improve the work.
With the kindest personal regards,
ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
3rd April, 2020
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Still learning English? 3 days over, take your time, teach me at your convenience.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup the power of your name is well know in the world. In the Christian church when a kid is baptized and it's given a name, then it known that starting with that moment that child is blessed. I really like this poem is so full of wisdom. Thank you for sharing.
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Yup the power of your name is well know in the world. In the Christian church when a kid is baptized and it's given a name, then it known that starting with that moment that child is blessed. I really like this poem is so full of wisdom. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from Patty Palmer
I read your poem with interest. I read it a couple of times, but I have to admit that I'm lost. Does this have to do with the idea of when everyone becomes a number when the antichrist comes? I'm trying to make something out of nothing I'm curious of what I'm missing here.
Stay safe and healthy!
Patty
This is the second round of reading this poem. As I see it, when the time comes that we're all given a number is when the anti-christ arrives. I'm still not sure what you're trying to convey here. Maybe I'm just trying to look too deep. If I can't figure it out twice, I'm sure others may be having the same problem. Maybe you could enlighten us in the author's notes. I give you four stars for your effort. This is my fairest review.
Patty
Patty
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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I read your poem with interest. I read it a couple of times, but I have to admit that I'm lost. Does this have to do with the idea of when everyone becomes a number when the antichrist comes? I'm trying to make something out of nothing I'm curious of what I'm missing here.
Stay safe and healthy!
Patty
This is the second round of reading this poem. As I see it, when the time comes that we're all given a number is when the anti-christ arrives. I'm still not sure what you're trying to convey here. Maybe I'm just trying to look too deep. If I can't figure it out twice, I'm sure others may be having the same problem. Maybe you could enlighten us in the author's notes. I give you four stars for your effort. This is my fairest review.
Patty
Patty
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the review.
I am sorry, I do not understand your point, I mean, what you are talking of, I never defend my writing, frankly, what do you mean by your words -- when everyone becomes a number when the antichrist comes? what exactly you wish to mean, I do not understand, how, when, where, and why antichrist comes, as you say, please explain your view and viewpoint so that I can learn, please do explain your viewpoint to teach me your idea or concept you have developed over my work, because I do not understand what you mean by the coming of antichrist, etc.
Please help me, as a reviewer you should help me learn how to write better.
With the kindest personal regards,
Alcreator Litt Dear
03/04/2020
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No, never defend your writing! I wasn't asking you to defend your writing. I don't understand your post. All I asked was what the poem was about. Look in the Bible in Revolations, it will tell you the whole story. I would rather not talk further as I am sorry that I upset you over asking my queston
Stay safe and stay healthy
Patty
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You made the mistake and punished me, thank you, stay safe.
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I don't see how I punished you! All I asked was to know what your poem was about. Please no further conversation! My apologies if I've upset you. If you are referring to your rating, I am well within giving a respectful and honest rating. No further contact please.
Comment from Ross E Silke
This is very interesting and I like your repetition and bold presentation. The picture caught my eye with the brilliant lighted gate. The numbers you use are intriguing and your word choices work well. It provides something to really think on food for though poem. I like the creativity and cleverness. An enjoyable nugget to digest on today. I like who you try to relate names and numbers in a unique way here. Keep writing. Best,
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This is very interesting and I like your repetition and bold presentation. The picture caught my eye with the brilliant lighted gate. The numbers you use are intriguing and your word choices work well. It provides something to really think on food for though poem. I like the creativity and cleverness. An enjoyable nugget to digest on today. I like who you try to relate names and numbers in a unique way here. Keep writing. Best,
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from June Sargent
In today's world, we are all just a number - social security, bank account, license, passport. But a name is different. Numbers do not truly reflect who we are. God is more than a number. We are more than a number. That is why this poem is really relevant today. Thank you for sharing,
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In today's world, we are all just a number - social security, bank account, license, passport. But a name is different. Numbers do not truly reflect who we are. God is more than a number. We are more than a number. That is why this poem is really relevant today. Thank you for sharing,
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
King Wise
by Alcreator Litt Dear
Hello my friend
Interesting poem commentary on generic religious organizations. I personally don't believe in organized Christian religion. I'm more of star wars force kind of believer. I like Buddhism too. Good job.
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King Wise
by Alcreator Litt Dear
Hello my friend
Interesting poem commentary on generic religious organizations. I personally don't believe in organized Christian religion. I'm more of star wars force kind of believer. I like Buddhism too. Good job.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
Comment from Minglement
I found this humorous acrostic poem very interesting. There truly is power in a name, especially the name of God. The acrostic form worked well for this. Thank you for your author notes.
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I found this humorous acrostic poem very interesting. There truly is power in a name, especially the name of God. The acrostic form worked well for this. Thank you for your author notes.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2020
