King Wise
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Comment from Dilettante junior
Dear Alcreator Litt Dear, it is always a pleasure to review your work. You take an idea and make it your own in your own created unique style which I think is pretty brilliant. This one attests to just that. Keep it up!
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Dear Alcreator Litt Dear, it is always a pleasure to review your work. You take an idea and make it your own in your own created unique style which I think is pretty brilliant. This one attests to just that. Keep it up!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from Marigo J. Stathis
Overall,...very interesting, narrative poem that has a big message. Love it! I do feel that the word "name" is repeated too often (especially at the end of the poem), which dilutes the power a bit. Maybe you could replace a few with synonyms? Just a thought! Keep up the beautiful work!
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Overall,...very interesting, narrative poem that has a big message. Love it! I do feel that the word "name" is repeated too often (especially at the end of the poem), which dilutes the power a bit. Maybe you could replace a few with synonyms? Just a thought! Keep up the beautiful work!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from Wendy G
King wise learnt his wisdom through trialling a different experience and learning the value of a name above a number. Man was made to be called a name. Man was given the honour of naming animals. Numbers are too impersonal and bereft of relationship. Thank you for sharing in your own unique way.
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King wise learnt his wisdom through trialling a different experience and learning the value of a name above a number. Man was made to be called a name. Man was given the honour of naming animals. Numbers are too impersonal and bereft of relationship. Thank you for sharing in your own unique way.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from beizanten
An attention capturing title and picture. A pretty good opening stanza. So is the second and third stanza. The fourth fifth and six paragraph was well written. Good ending. Overall pretty good
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An attention capturing title and picture. A pretty good opening stanza. So is the second and third stanza. The fourth fifth and six paragraph was well written. Good ending. Overall pretty good
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from equestrik
This is a clever acrostic which is fun but also gives one a reason to think and consider the point of this writing. I enjoyed your picture choice as well. All the best to you.
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This is a clever acrostic which is fun but also gives one a reason to think and consider the point of this writing. I enjoyed your picture choice as well. All the best to you.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
Comment from eliz100
I read the comments as directed before I read the poem. But I did not need to. The poem speaks for itself. Numbers do not replace names, especially for God.
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I read the comments as directed before I read the poem. But I did not need to. The poem speaks for itself. Numbers do not replace names, especially for God.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
Comment from MissMerri
I very much enjoyed this whimsical poem. I have pondered the idea before of everyone being known by a number rather than a name. It would be impossible for me to remember someone by their number but I like remembering names. I think your poem is both clever and thought-provoking and I appreciate this fun and well-written acrostic. Thank you for posting it.
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I very much enjoyed this whimsical poem. I have pondered the idea before of everyone being known by a number rather than a name. It would be impossible for me to remember someone by their number but I like remembering names. I think your poem is both clever and thought-provoking and I appreciate this fun and well-written acrostic. Thank you for posting it.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
Comment from Possummagic
I love your creative flair. Who on earth thinks up these sorts of pieces. It's clever, meaningful and so well written anyone could understand the message. Really loved this piece. Marie x
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I love your creative flair. Who on earth thinks up these sorts of pieces. It's clever, meaningful and so well written anyone could understand the message. Really loved this piece. Marie x
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
Comment from Mands
This was a great idea, what if we were known as a number. However, I found some of the lines didn't quite flow. I understand that you had put notes on stating that less punctuation was intentional, but I feel some lines needed it.
Such as 'Number replaces a name with a given serial number that he enrolls on kingdom's register'.
The artwork is perfect. Thank you for sharing.
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This was a great idea, what if we were known as a number. However, I found some of the lines didn't quite flow. I understand that you had put notes on stating that less punctuation was intentional, but I feel some lines needed it.
Such as 'Number replaces a name with a given serial number that he enrolls on kingdom's register'.
The artwork is perfect. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2021
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Alcreator.
-You wrote a good poem
about a creative topic.
-The progression of
ideas is very good, as
you begin with the premise,
and soon the king realizes
this wasn't such a good idea.
-A good concluding line, too.
-I enjoyed your poem.
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Alcreator.
-You wrote a good poem
about a creative topic.
-The progression of
ideas is very good, as
you begin with the premise,
and soon the king realizes
this wasn't such a good idea.
-A good concluding line, too.
-I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
