The Dream Car of the Future
What happens when you talk and drive6 total reviews
Comment from mkflood
ROFLMAO!! yeah i can relate to the dog..lol..you know i had forgotten i had did this one..it was done years ago and i think the contest topic was "Boys imagination"..yep i had those future flying car dreams too.. all the way back to the "Jetsons"..lol. its an honor that you selected my work to be included with yours. great job on the story and thanks again..oh yeah let me know if ya got the word about the music video that im creating for this site..if ya already know ok..if not ask if you want to join us..(thumbs up) ..MKFlood
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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ROFLMAO!! yeah i can relate to the dog..lol..you know i had forgotten i had did this one..it was done years ago and i think the contest topic was "Boys imagination"..yep i had those future flying car dreams too.. all the way back to the "Jetsons"..lol. its an honor that you selected my work to be included with yours. great job on the story and thanks again..oh yeah let me know if ya got the word about the music video that im creating for this site..if ya already know ok..if not ask if you want to join us..(thumbs up) ..MKFlood
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2019
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Thanks MKFlood. Glad you got a laugh out of it. :) I like the Jetsons too. How do i find out where to join you guys? Take care my friend.
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I have others on all 3 sites doing the word of mouth thing..Tom has me doing all the leg work..so you can send any image you feel represents you to my email.. 1mkflood@gmail.com..the deadline is Halloween.. hope you join us!
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is a neat entry for the contest. It's one of the more unusual responses I've read for the remit. I think that's to it's advantage :)
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
As I looked down its crystal floor, the buildings far below were very small. -- This confused me. Do you mean As I looked down through its crystal floor, the buildings far below were very small.
Also, as an aside, I assumed the first-person narrator is actually in a car. But this isn't established before this sentence. I think that's partly why I was confused by it. So, if this was mine, I'd further reword it to: As I looked down through the car's crystal floor, the buildings far below were very small.
No more with you drive this imported model, -- This confused me. Do you mean No more will you drive this imported model, ?
I'm just a dog that knows how to read. -- Ha, ha. I like the twist ending :)
Good luck with the competition :)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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This is a neat entry for the contest. It's one of the more unusual responses I've read for the remit. I think that's to it's advantage :)
Here are a few points you might like to consider:
As I looked down its crystal floor, the buildings far below were very small. -- This confused me. Do you mean As I looked down through its crystal floor, the buildings far below were very small.
Also, as an aside, I assumed the first-person narrator is actually in a car. But this isn't established before this sentence. I think that's partly why I was confused by it. So, if this was mine, I'd further reword it to: As I looked down through the car's crystal floor, the buildings far below were very small.
No more with you drive this imported model, -- This confused me. Do you mean No more will you drive this imported model, ?
I'm just a dog that knows how to read. -- Ha, ha. I like the twist ending :)
Good luck with the competition :)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you Alex! I needed that smile. :)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well now there is a contest offering that certainly uses your imagination....or the dog's imagination... LOL! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Well now there is a contest offering that certainly uses your imagination....or the dog's imagination... LOL! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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The same to you Yvette. :) Glad you liked it. Thank you for reading.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello and good afternoon. That was a very interesting story. I think it was highly inventive and imaginative, good job. Good luck in the contest. So in the future Sharpie will make the vehicles? How much is that model going for?
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Hello and good afternoon. That was a very interesting story. I think it was highly inventive and imaginative, good job. Good luck in the contest. So in the future Sharpie will make the vehicles? How much is that model going for?
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Hi there 13. Glad you liked it. :) Would you believe at a low price of 3 bills. :)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This was TOTALLY out of the box. hahaha A car of the future that floats/flies (at 300/mpm no less!) with a glass bottom (cool idea) -- though I didn't understand the part about the person on the windshield the driver was talking to.
An interesting entry. Good luck!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This was TOTALLY out of the box. hahaha A car of the future that floats/flies (at 300/mpm no less!) with a glass bottom (cool idea) -- though I didn't understand the part about the person on the windshield the driver was talking to.
An interesting entry. Good luck!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you Robyn. Glad you got a laugh out of this. With the car doing the driving he/she was not paying attention while talking to a friend on the video screen. :)
Comment from Wils
Love the imagination in this. Did a nice job of drawing the reader in and holding their attention. You are just a dog that knows how to read! Well written
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Love the imagination in this. Did a nice job of drawing the reader in and holding their attention. You are just a dog that knows how to read! Well written
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you Wils. Glad you liked it. :)
