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Comment from SLMorrical
Mac has some pretty bad memories around alcohol and her grandfather. It is true that abusers make sure the woman have no self-esteem. Individuals say I wouldn't put up with that. That easy to say but the really don't know unless they have been in the situation. It is a never ending cycle, and the abused blames themselves. A wonderful chapter with more insight to Mac. I can relate to Mac and her feelings about alcohol and taking care of herself. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Mac has some pretty bad memories around alcohol and her grandfather. It is true that abusers make sure the woman have no self-esteem. Individuals say I wouldn't put up with that. That easy to say but the really don't know unless they have been in the situation. It is a never ending cycle, and the abused blames themselves. A wonderful chapter with more insight to Mac. I can relate to Mac and her feelings about alcohol and taking care of herself. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the understanding. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sylvia Page
It is easy for anyone who did not read this story before to understand especially with your back story. Now I have a better understanding of Mackenzie and her moods. She is lucky to have Logan beside her even though they came to know each other not too long ago. I was able to "see" the scenario taking place. Well done
Enjoy your vacation and your granddaughter they grow fast.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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It is easy for anyone who did not read this story before to understand especially with your back story. Now I have a better understanding of Mackenzie and her moods. She is lucky to have Logan beside her even though they came to know each other not too long ago. I was able to "see" the scenario taking place. Well done
Enjoy your vacation and your granddaughter they grow fast.
Sylvia
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Oce more a great chapter with all the ingredients to keep us readers entertained and looking for more of course. Good clarifying the length of Logan and McKenzie's time together. No spags.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Oce more a great chapter with all the ingredients to keep us readers entertained and looking for more of course. Good clarifying the length of Logan and McKenzie's time together. No spags.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from WryWriter
This read well. The only suggestion I have would be to break up the dialogue with some environment...maybe sights, sounds and smells of the barbecue. Some gestures instead of words. A lot of information given in this dialogue.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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This read well. The only suggestion I have would be to break up the dialogue with some environment...maybe sights, sounds and smells of the barbecue. Some gestures instead of words. A lot of information given in this dialogue.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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I don't enjoy reading a lot of detail that doesn't move the story along. I know some people do. It's an individual thing. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
You had me ready to turn the Brisket. Yea, I know about those drunk fathers and the mean ones. I see nothing wrong with this but I do seek where it is going. Just wait and see, I suppose. Good one Barb. Don't burn the meat.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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You had me ready to turn the Brisket. Yea, I know about those drunk fathers and the mean ones. I see nothing wrong with this but I do seek where it is going. Just wait and see, I suppose. Good one Barb. Don't burn the meat.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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The brisket was not burned. There are a lot of places I am going with this one. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I wish I had a six I could give you. I must say this chapter of your story of how
Helen was battered so badly that she spent almost a month in the hospital. Gus did two years in jail. McKenzie had some nasty bruises but more importantly still carries emotional scars.
Gert
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Hello Barb
I wish I had a six I could give you. I must say this chapter of your story of how
Helen was battered so badly that she spent almost a month in the hospital. Gus did two years in jail. McKenzie had some nasty bruises but more importantly still carries emotional scars.
Gert
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Hello, I have missed your reviewing my work and your poems. I hope you're back for a while.
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Hello Barb
I doing much better sine I had a stroke that caused me to lose my vison in both of my eyes was somewhat difficult, but I have learned to adjust very well with thepary.
Gert
Comment from Tootsie55
Glad I have SIXES for you again.Once more a top read. You always have us hanging on for more. I know that is a good writing trait. WHat's more NO SPAGS! Keep at it! Good to had the Note about how long they had known each other Logan and Mc Kenzie, I mean.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Glad I have SIXES for you again.Once more a top read. You always have us hanging on for more. I know that is a good writing trait. WHat's more NO SPAGS! Keep at it! Good to had the Note about how long they had known each other Logan and Mc Kenzie, I mean.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. My stories go on forever and reviewers tend to think they've known each other for years. LOL
Comment from royowen
So Mackenzie has history, her grandfather battered he mother badly, so much so, she wound up in hospital for a month, and battered Mac also. Mac has emotional scars, but they explain her pride, and her desire to protect herself from emotional ties to men, and will probably refuse help, but I think Logan's love for will overcome that. Well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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So Mackenzie has history, her grandfather battered he mother badly, so much so, she wound up in hospital for a month, and battered Mac also. Mac has emotional scars, but they explain her pride, and her desire to protect herself from emotional ties to men, and will probably refuse help, but I think Logan's love for will overcome that. Well done, Barbara, blessings, Roy
Typo : And carries emotional scar(e)s.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the kind review. I am off to fix that area.
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Well done
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter albeit it's so sad. The story is unfortunately the story of so many. It's very well written. I only found one small item: McKenzie started toward kitchen. = ... the kitchen.
Enjoy your family visit and your wee granddaughter. My youngest granddaughter is barely 6 months. A hug. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Hi Barbara, this is a great chapter albeit it's so sad. The story is unfortunately the story of so many. It's very well written. I only found one small item: McKenzie started toward kitchen. = ... the kitchen.
Enjoy your family visit and your wee granddaughter. My youngest granddaughter is barely 6 months. A hug. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Grandchildren are a gift from God. Thank you for the kind review. I'll make that correction.
Comment from judiverse
Great work! The background that Bill fills Logan in on explains a lot about Mac's behavior. It explains her suspicions of people and her intolerance about alcohol. Those two events certainly have had a lasting impact of Mac. Although Mac's in danger, she doesn't want protection from the police or from Logan. Bill is pretty insistent that she needs protection. Nice that Mac has such supportive friends. Excellent development in this chapter, and it tells a lot about Mac. I don't know what group Mary Higgins Clark's novels fall under, but I would put yours in the same category. She always has a strong female character who tries to solve a mystery and is menaced along the way. Romance usually develops in the course of the story, too. judi
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Great work! The background that Bill fills Logan in on explains a lot about Mac's behavior. It explains her suspicions of people and her intolerance about alcohol. Those two events certainly have had a lasting impact of Mac. Although Mac's in danger, she doesn't want protection from the police or from Logan. Bill is pretty insistent that she needs protection. Nice that Mac has such supportive friends. Excellent development in this chapter, and it tells a lot about Mac. I don't know what group Mary Higgins Clark's novels fall under, but I would put yours in the same category. She always has a strong female character who tries to solve a mystery and is menaced along the way. Romance usually develops in the course of the story, too. judi
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement and understanding.
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You're very welcome. judi
