St Louis
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
She certainly has plenty of valid reasons to detest the use of alcohol under any circumstances. This is very well written and moves along nicely which keeps the reader engaged and focused. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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She certainly has plenty of valid reasons to detest the use of alcohol under any circumstances. This is very well written and moves along nicely which keeps the reader engaged and focused. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having captivating flow through Conversational Approach / Dialogues.
Though after a long gap, yet I'm sure I'll catch its SPIRIT soon.
I'm waiting for the next parts / chapters.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction having captivating flow through Conversational Approach / Dialogues.
Though after a long gap, yet I'm sure I'll catch its SPIRIT soon.
I'm waiting for the next parts / chapters.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
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Barbara.wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I'm glad you are enjoying your vacation. I have been gone so long, I have no idea what this is about, but hopefully, I will get it when I read more. It is well written as always, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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I'm glad you are enjoying your vacation. I have been gone so long, I have no idea what this is about, but hopefully, I will get it when I read more. It is well written as always, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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I hope you continue to read my posts again. I understand health has prevented it.
Comment from tfawcus
Gradually Logan is coming to understand more about Mac. Her background explains a lot about her character. I hadn't appreciated that they had only met four days ago. I thought it was longer.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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Gradually Logan is coming to understand more about Mac. Her background explains a lot about her character. I hadn't appreciated that they had only met four days ago. I thought it was longer.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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I know reviews thought they had been together longer and they wanted more action between the couple, but I couldn't see it happening because they have only know each other such a short time. Hence, the reason I added that. I think because it takes so between my posts that it confuses people. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from light
I think bringing the back story forward makes things more clear. Sorry to be so late in reviewing, but because of my eye problems my children have threatened to take my iPad if I spend too much time o it.
Blessings,
Elaine
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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I think bringing the back story forward makes things more clear. Sorry to be so late in reviewing, but because of my eye problems my children have threatened to take my iPad if I spend too much time o it.
Blessings,
Elaine
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2019
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LOL Thank you for the kind review. I work off my PC and my font sized up to 195%. LOL I do understand.
Comment from Gail Denham
Well told story indeed - lots of back story comes out - suspense is there - also details such as the brisket - I've never cooked one and was intrigued. Are they easy to grill - are they inclined to be tough? See, that raised some interest.
Good chapter. And if this is romance, then the practical aspects are a good touch
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Well told story indeed - lots of back story comes out - suspense is there - also details such as the brisket - I've never cooked one and was intrigued. Are they easy to grill - are they inclined to be tough? See, that raised some interest.
Good chapter. And if this is romance, then the practical aspects are a good touch
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Briskets are not hard to cook, they just take time because you slow cook them, if you cook too fast they will be tough. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Nice job. So glad you're getting to enjoy your grandbaby! What a joy!!
Some notes, if I may?
1.) Logan walked to her and tapped her shoulder. "Come here. It's okay." His arms went around her.
--> just 'walked up to her' a couple sentences ago
2.) over a month since we've last had lunch. How are you doing?(")
Nice chapter -- well written. I enjoyed!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Barbara,
Nice job. So glad you're getting to enjoy your grandbaby! What a joy!!
Some notes, if I may?
1.) Logan walked to her and tapped her shoulder. "Come here. It's okay." His arms went around her.
--> just 'walked up to her' a couple sentences ago
2.) over a month since we've last had lunch. How are you doing?(")
Nice chapter -- well written. I enjoyed!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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I have made those changes. Thank you for the help and the review.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
This is strong material in the backstory however often it seems that the rain helps us to appreciate the sunshine all the more. The backstory gives depth and also contributes a level of complexity to the narrative. Well executed. Good job!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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This is strong material in the backstory however often it seems that the rain helps us to appreciate the sunshine all the more. The backstory gives depth and also contributes a level of complexity to the narrative. Well executed. Good job!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from the13thpoet
Good Tuesday morning Barbara. That was a good continuation to the story, it was good to get some more background info on McKenzie and to find out why she is the way she is.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Good Tuesday morning Barbara. That was a good continuation to the story, it was good to get some more background info on McKenzie and to find out why she is the way she is.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
This instalment adds some more emotional heft to Mac's backstory.
"It's been over a month since we've last had lunch. How are you doing? - need closing speech marks here.
her best friend, Nancy and boyfriend, Louis attended a party. - you may need additional commas following the names here.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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Hi Barbara,
This instalment adds some more emotional heft to Mac's backstory.
"It's been over a month since we've last had lunch. How are you doing? - need closing speech marks here.
her best friend, Nancy and boyfriend, Louis attended a party. - you may need additional commas following the names here.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2019
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I have fixed the missing quotation marks. I was wondering about those commas myself. I will add the commas. Thank you for all your help. I truly appreciate it.
