Lonely vs. Alone
Lonely Poem Contest Entry11 total reviews
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Hmmm... how did I miss this one? I love the format of color you used! I've known this twin in my life too! Thankfully, I have a number of years behind me now and am rather happy to have my independence. I learned to love that twin and find a peace within. xoxo
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
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Hmmm... how did I miss this one? I love the format of color you used! I've known this twin in my life too! Thankfully, I have a number of years behind me now and am rather happy to have my independence. I learned to love that twin and find a peace within. xoxo
Comment Written 07-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2019
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Thanks, D. That's pretty much where I am now with the bawdy one claiming the lead. I like her a lot. LOL!! I'm glad you identified with this. That kinda' makes it worth writing. Much appreciated. Lynda
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I?m sure many do even if they would never admit.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I think your post says a lot. You can be with someone but yet feel alone. You can be by yourself but still happy and fulfilled. Like the twins loathing each other.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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I think your post says a lot. You can be with someone but yet feel alone. You can be by yourself but still happy and fulfilled. Like the twins loathing each other.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much Patty! These are lovely comments and I thank you for taking the time to read and review this piece. Much appreciated.
Comment from juliaSjames
Nice fancy to personify two aspects of the solitary life.
I was amused at Alone doing whatever she likes reveling in the joy of solitude. But the poem doesn't create a feeling of empathy for the Lonely twin.
As the adage goes, "Laugh and the world laughs with you. Cry and you cry alone."
Don't know if there's ever a balance. Independence comes with a price. Once we accept that we're good to go.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Nice fancy to personify two aspects of the solitary life.
I was amused at Alone doing whatever she likes reveling in the joy of solitude. But the poem doesn't create a feeling of empathy for the Lonely twin.
As the adage goes, "Laugh and the world laughs with you. Cry and you cry alone."
Don't know if there's ever a balance. Independence comes with a price. Once we accept that we're good to go.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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You are right, Julia. I tried rewriting Lonely's stanza several times before the post. I ran out of lines. LOL! I also found I didn't like climbing into her head to write about her. Alone was easy. I appreciate your detailed comments and I'm glad you took the time to read this. Thank you.
Comment from Ben1
Good read and the idea or way that you betrayed them as different people. You should definitely make this in to a bigger poem or short story some day. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Good read and the idea or way that you betrayed them as different people. You should definitely make this in to a bigger poem or short story some day. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2019
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Oh, Ben, this is a lovely review! I will say that it was a challenge to get all of this into 15 lines. I'm so glad you liked this and I will take your suggestion into consideration. I appreciate your time and comments. Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the concept of lonely vs alone. The lonely one cannot do anything alone without feeling miserable all the time, while the one who function better alone, is the one that find happiness in herself by being alone.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about the concept of lonely vs alone. The lonely one cannot do anything alone without feeling miserable all the time, while the one who function better alone, is the one that find happiness in herself by being alone.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Oh, Sandra, thank you so much for understanding this piece. Your comments are lovely and I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this contest entry. Thank you!
Comment from Sylvia Page
Is this poem about one and the same person...a split personality perhaps?
There are times when a person can feel lonely and as a result, be miserable. On the other hand, even if you are alone and are occupied with no time to spend on being miserable you have overcome loneliness.
Great poem, and best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Is this poem about one and the same person...a split personality perhaps?
There are times when a person can feel lonely and as a result, be miserable. On the other hand, even if you are alone and are occupied with no time to spend on being miserable you have overcome loneliness.
Great poem, and best wishes in the contest.
Sylvia
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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I put in some author notes after reading your review. Thank you so much for these comments. I appreciate you reading (and then actually mulling over) this contest entry. Very helpful. Thanks.
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I saw them, they are great.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
In this poem a clear concept of lonely is shown the differences between lonely versus alone; lonely is a state of mind and alone is the state of feeling of existence; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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In this poem a clear concept of lonely is shown the differences between lonely versus alone; lonely is a state of mind and alone is the state of feeling of existence; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much, DR. I love your comments on my piece. You understood it perfectly. No higher compliment to a writer. Stars are much appreciated. Thank you again.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Unusual personification poem using two aspects of lonely--flat-out Lonely and Alone. The poet points out that Lonely is more of a sad-sack, while Alone is just finishing up alone-time projects like garden work and then feels comfortable drinking beer on a couch after discarding dirty clothes. I thought the ending was interesting to point out that Alone could very easily cross over into the hated Lonely at any time, but that they were still necessary components of "independence," so to speak. Nice write.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Unusual personification poem using two aspects of lonely--flat-out Lonely and Alone. The poet points out that Lonely is more of a sad-sack, while Alone is just finishing up alone-time projects like garden work and then feels comfortable drinking beer on a couch after discarding dirty clothes. I thought the ending was interesting to point out that Alone could very easily cross over into the hated Lonely at any time, but that they were still necessary components of "independence," so to speak. Nice write.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for "getting this"! Your comments are spot on and so very much appreciated. Great review. Thanks again.
Comment from DragonSkulls
Wow, what a fantastic angle to go at this contest, author. "They are the components of my independence." Excellent. Toss the crybaby a tissue and the worker a towel, haha. The artwork you used is a perfect match. Changing colors of the three was a great idea as well. I wish you great riches in the booth with this awesome write. Have a great rest of your weekend.
DS
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Wow, what a fantastic angle to go at this contest, author. "They are the components of my independence." Excellent. Toss the crybaby a tissue and the worker a towel, haha. The artwork you used is a perfect match. Changing colors of the three was a great idea as well. I wish you great riches in the booth with this awesome write. Have a great rest of your weekend.
DS
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Wow, thank you so much DS for this fantastic review! It's a different write for me and I'm glad you liked it. All those stars and your great comments are greatly appreciated.
Comment from LisaMay
This is different for sure... trying to come to terms with the dichotomy within us that we independent types struggle with... to cherish our alone-ness, our apart-ness, but run the risk of it becoming loneliness because we have disconnected in order to keep our sense of ourselves intact.
The belching, farting private one, and the more refined wine-drinking one, the civilised one who has to mediate.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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This is different for sure... trying to come to terms with the dichotomy within us that we independent types struggle with... to cherish our alone-ness, our apart-ness, but run the risk of it becoming loneliness because we have disconnected in order to keep our sense of ourselves intact.
The belching, farting private one, and the more refined wine-drinking one, the civilised one who has to mediate.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the review, Lisa! I was just trying to write something out of the box for this contest. Actually, these two are in my living room every night. LOL Much appreciated!
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My living room gets that unnecessary extra one at times too. It's a constant battle to integrate them, isn't it? Bad twin, good twin.
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Ha! Yes, independence is a bitch... two of them.
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You're just seeing double because of the booze!!
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I see you're in my living room as well. Care for a drink?
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Yeah, let's get smashed and chase those brooding ones away! Let's see who can belch and fart the loudest. Let's jump up and down on the couch and swing from the chandelier (do you have one? Downlights are problematic.)
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LMFAO!!! You crack me up, NZ!
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As we'd say down here: Let's crack a tinnie (i.e. open a can of beer)
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Have to remember that.
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Cheers! :))
