Comment from Darlene Franklin

Excellent

I like this poem, reflecting on the beauty of the seashell, the memories it brings back, and the feelings of serenity it evokes. Is this meant to follow a particular rhyme scheme? Overall, it works.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019

Thanks for your review. Rhyme is apparent in my poem, but there is no overall scheme. It perhaps reflects the ebb and flow of seaside currents. I did not want to pin it down to a formula. The rhyming is broken rather than predictable. (I added this as an author's note after reading your review.)

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

There's much that can be read into both your shell and your poem. I found the description intriguing. Inner beauty can sometimes only be appreciated when the outer shall has been worn away by time and tide.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019

Appearances can be deceptive. Thanks for your review.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

It is always good to have something to bring things back into perspective. Or to calm you down. This well written free verse with some rhyme in each stanza tells us that life's problems can be calmed if you find
strength for things and people around you. Good extended metaphor.
In the last stanza, I think your should be yours.
Good luck and keep writing

dragonpoet

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 Comment Written 20-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019

Thanks for pointing out that the last stanza is not clear. No, i did not mean 'yours' as that would imply the reader had a shell of their own. I meant it to be 'near and dear' as in human loved ones, so I modified it to 'near-and-dear' to try to eliminate ambiguity.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Shells are magical and they have all been on the same hellish journey we have put ourselves through and when we look at them they also have history just like us with memories they may prefer to forget. Collecting shells is a freeing occupation, being near the sea, a calming experience well described in your words here, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 20-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019

Thanks for your review, Dolly.
I wonder if we are attracted to the sea because we are composed of such a high percentage of water ourselves?