Our Love Song
Love for life...10 total reviews
Comment from Tanvi Pauddar
That is a very nice and fun poem to read, and I enjoyed it a lot. But I think that the first line has 6 syllables instead of 5, and shouldn't a 3 line poem have 5 syllables in the first line? I could be wrong about both those things, but that is what I think. Good luck in the contest.
-Tanvi
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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That is a very nice and fun poem to read, and I enjoyed it a lot. But I think that the first line has 6 syllables instead of 5, and shouldn't a 3 line poem have 5 syllables in the first line? I could be wrong about both those things, but that is what I think. Good luck in the contest.
-Tanvi
Comment Written 19-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2019
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Hi sweetie! Yes this three line is 5-7-5 and the first line is only 5 syllables - we - write - our - love - song, each word is only one syllable :) but I?m happy that you ask questions! This is just like Haiku only for this contest, you can write on any subject. Thank for reading it and for your feedback xoxo
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Oh, okay. I thought that our is a 2 syllable word, but thanks for telling me.
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:) no it is one syllable same with hour! Even though it does kind of sound like it would be two. Same with brilliant - it is two syllables even though it sounds like it could be three. :) xoxo
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Absolutely stunning. Your words and the visual you chose. This could almost be a marketable greeting card or poster in my personal opinion. Very appealing to the eye! Great job and Good Luck!
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Absolutely stunning. Your words and the visual you chose. This could almost be a marketable greeting card or poster in my personal opinion. Very appealing to the eye! Great job and Good Luck!
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much! I love color, so Jim Warren is one of my favorite artists! I like the idea of a greeting card - never thought about that! :) appreciate your awesome feedback on this. xoxo
Comment from Sally Law
Beautifully penned with lovely, colorful artwork, too. Another fine contender for a contest. My favorite time of day has become the sunset due to my sensitive retinas. I love the amber glow as it fades away.
Sending you my best today and for the upcoming contest, dear Diana.
Congratulations on you second place finish, too. Sweet.
Sal xo
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Beautifully penned with lovely, colorful artwork, too. Another fine contender for a contest. My favorite time of day has become the sunset due to my sensitive retinas. I love the amber glow as it fades away.
Sending you my best today and for the upcoming contest, dear Diana.
Congratulations on you second place finish, too. Sweet.
Sal xo
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much Sally! I am in love with colors, so this was a fun one for me! I love the artwork of Jim Warren! I appreciate your wonderful feedback! You enjoy your day as well my friend!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A wonderful painting
and very nice presentation, Diana.
-The syllable count is good,
and the use of one continuous
thought is effective.
-I like the idea in the poem
of writing your love song
based on "colors of the day"
and continues until twilight.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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-A wonderful painting
and very nice presentation, Diana.
-The syllable count is good,
and the use of one continuous
thought is effective.
-I like the idea in the poem
of writing your love song
based on "colors of the day"
and continues until twilight.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Pam! appreciate you enjoyed! I don't know if it comes through, but I'm trying to convey a love over a lifetime-from youth until older age. I was going to use "midnight" but I liked twilight better LOL!!
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You are very welcome, Diana. I think that idea did come through, and I like twilight better, too!
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awesome! thanks again Pam
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from RodG
You have definitely captured the essence of that marvelous painting in your three-line poem. One wonders what instruments would be used to play these lovers' song. Rod
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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You have definitely captured the essence of that marvelous painting in your three-line poem. One wonders what instruments would be used to play these lovers' song. Rod
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thanks! I really appreciate you enjoyed and left me feedback. I suppose it could be any instrument over a lifetime- from youth to old age :) LOL
Comment from Brenda Henderson
This is so sweet! It all works together perfectly. The artwork chosen is exceptional for this offering. The colors in the background and the font are ethereal and beautifully bring the whole thing together.! Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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This is so sweet! It all works together perfectly. The artwork chosen is exceptional for this offering. The colors in the background and the font are ethereal and beautifully bring the whole thing together.! Well done!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you Brenda! your feedback is sincerely appreciated! I love color, so this was a fun one for me.
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You're Welcome!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a lovely entry, mu friend. It is structurally compliant with the contest requirements. The content is soft, serene, and filled with the essence of abiding love. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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This is a lovely entry, mu friend. It is structurally compliant with the contest requirements. The content is soft, serene, and filled with the essence of abiding love. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much! I appreciate your feedback. I was trying to cover love from youth to old age with this, so hopefully this came across :)
Comment from The Death
Hi Diana,
Lovely poem! Excellent word economy as you have used every syllable well. I liked the choice of having this as one continuous thought. It's very appealing. This should do well in the contest. Good luck!
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Hi Diana,
Lovely poem! Excellent word economy as you have used every syllable well. I liked the choice of having this as one continuous thought. It's very appealing. This should do well in the contest. Good luck!
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much, Anupam! Your feedback is sincerely appreciated. I love color so this was a fun one to work on. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an uplifting and vibrant presentation Diana and such a joy to read so early in the morning, words filled with love and understanding, romance and song, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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This is an uplifting and vibrant presentation Diana and such a joy to read so early in the morning, words filled with love and understanding, romance and song, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thank you, sweet Dolly! I'm in love with color, so it was fun to work on! appreciate your feedback and so happy to help start your day in a positive way!! :) xoxoxo
Comment from Maria Millsaps
Very nice, I love the art, and the poem adds great value to the picture. It conveys the message, love songs one can sing wherever they find themselves with their beloved.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Very nice, I love the art, and the poem adds great value to the picture. It conveys the message, love songs one can sing wherever they find themselves with their beloved.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Thanks for reading and leaving your wonderful feedback, Maria! It is greatly appreciated. So happy you enjoyed!! :)
