Ironic Smoke Signals
Gone in a puff of smoke10 total reviews
Comment from Marisa3
I am on this site infrequently these days, so hence the delayed read and review of this piece.
This really deserves a six. Kids know how to cut to the chase and they keep us honest.
What your son said to you I could have easily seen my son saying to me. I ended up quitting smoking because of his crusade against it. He would go into my purse, find my cigarettes and destroy them. I figured, as a single mom, I really couldn't afford them anyway. It wasn't worth upsetting him either.
I loved this piece. You said so much with so few words.
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I am on this site infrequently these days, so hence the delayed read and review of this piece.
This really deserves a six. Kids know how to cut to the chase and they keep us honest.
What your son said to you I could have easily seen my son saying to me. I ended up quitting smoking because of his crusade against it. He would go into my purse, find my cigarettes and destroy them. I figured, as a single mom, I really couldn't afford them anyway. It wasn't worth upsetting him either.
I loved this piece. You said so much with so few words.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
Comment from Lobber
Yes, kids say the dardest things. There used to be TV slow with Art Linkletter called House Party. See these clips on You Tube hosted by Bill Crosby. - Lobber
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Yes, kids say the dardest things. There used to be TV slow with Art Linkletter called House Party. See these clips on You Tube hosted by Bill Crosby. - Lobber
Comment Written 17-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2019
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Remember it well. Thanks for the read and review.
Comment from judiverse
Glad to see this post from you. The kid really nailed the narrator. Smoking is an expensive habit, even more now than ever, so a smoker's money is really going up in smoke. I hope the narrator kept that in mind next time she talked to her son about spending money. Excellent background for this with the Fourth of July fireworks and the temptation to buy them. This story is well put together, and best of luck in the contest. Great entry. judi
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Glad to see this post from you. The kid really nailed the narrator. Smoking is an expensive habit, even more now than ever, so a smoker's money is really going up in smoke. I hope the narrator kept that in mind next time she talked to her son about spending money. Excellent background for this with the Fourth of July fireworks and the temptation to buy them. This story is well put together, and best of luck in the contest. Great entry. judi
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Thanks. :I'm beginning to REALLY appreciate how so many writers struggled with their own issues that U took fir granted. Typing as an issue seems plain dumb!
My kid is now 44 and still has his wit.
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You're welcome. Sometimes great wisdom comes from the mouths of kids. judi
Comment from Sasha
This is a terrific entry for this 100 word flash fiction contest. I am still trying to quit and could relate to this one on a personal level. I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest too.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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This is a terrific entry for this 100 word flash fiction contest. I am still trying to quit and could relate to this one on a personal level. I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest too.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Aren't you sweet/ Thanks for the glitter/ Been awhile since I made the effort--very frustrating. I haven't quit either. We are social lepers.
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I've been taking some time off to give my eyes a break.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Ooooh he got ya there. My dad asked for a cigarette from someone one and once they gave it to him he proceeded to rip it up. He said they got so mad at him, but he looked at them and said that if he'd smoked it would be ruined and gone...just like the one he ripped up. I think it's the same thing as this. lol.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Ooooh he got ya there. My dad asked for a cigarette from someone one and once they gave it to him he proceeded to rip it up. He said they got so mad at him, but he looked at them and said that if he'd smoked it would be ruined and gone...just like the one he ripped up. I think it's the same thing as this. lol.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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I;m glad he got me too. Thanks
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah how children can be so fast on the uptake of the truth. This is an excellent flash fiction with all the requisite components, Ingrid and the surprise ending has just the right amount of wit to get a wry laugh.
Best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Ah how children can be so fast on the uptake of the truth. This is an excellent flash fiction with all the requisite components, Ingrid and the surprise ending has just the right amount of wit to get a wry laugh.
Best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much. He's 44 and still can churn them out.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is ironic. I enjoyed reading it. Your did a great job leading up to that lesson. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Your contest entry is ironic. I enjoyed reading it. Your did a great job leading up to that lesson. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the review and read.
Comment from damommy
Out of the mouths of babes. Gotcha, didn't he?
Very cute story, especially since it's true. I feel the same way about burning up my money in fireworks.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Out of the mouths of babes. Gotcha, didn't he?
Very cute story, especially since it's true. I feel the same way about burning up my money in fireworks.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much. Yes, he hasn't lost his sense of humor, but I don't think he thought it was funny.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Don't you just hate the comebacks your kid can come up with? It's so easy to forget our own transgressions and they are quick to remind us. LOL This is delightful, Ingrid.
Well done. Good luck in the contest. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Don't you just hate the comebacks your kid can come up with? It's so easy to forget our own transgressions and they are quick to remind us. LOL This is delightful, Ingrid.
Well done. Good luck in the contest. Nancy:)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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In his late teens I got carried away and called Michael a son of a bitch, and he told me he completely agreed with me. LOL Thanks.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Ouch! It is a tough pill to take when the kids become wiser than the parent. This is an excellent contest entry. It's timely given the 4th is still fresh in everyone's mind. It's relevant given the subtle themes of financial responsibility and kids becoming wiser than we might want them to be. It was an enjoyable read beginning to end. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Ouch! It is a tough pill to take when the kids become wiser than the parent. This is an excellent contest entry. It's timely given the 4th is still fresh in everyone's mind. It's relevant given the subtle themes of financial responsibility and kids becoming wiser than we might want them to be. It was an enjoyable read beginning to end. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much.
