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winds cause unique dance moves

sand pebbles twerk and twist

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Comment from Janetsue
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Long ago, I lived in a house across the street from the Caribbean Sea and your words bring back so many wonderful memories of beach combing after a storm has passed. We always found shells and driftwood that were so beautiful. I am so glad to have read this posting and wish you the best in the contest!

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
    Thank you for your review and stars. I never lived near such an idyllic looking seashore. I have visited the beach at Ipanema many times. The look there has other attractions besides sand and seashells. LOL
Comment from BeasPeas
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I don't object to the word "twerk" at all. I don't know if it has another meaning to prompt the warning posted on it. I like the use of twerk with twist. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
    Marilyn,

    Check out Merriam Webster. I thought its connotation deserved the warning. I don't twerk - never have, never will! I did do The Twist!

    Mark
reply by BeasPeas on 16-Jul-2019
    I looked it up on line and then watched YouTube. I guess I won't be doing the dance anytime soon.
Comment from Earl Corp
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I wouldn't object to the word twerk, i was just curious by it's use. Truthfully i don't know what twerking is but it sounds like something a hula dancer would do. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    Earl,

    IMHO 'twerking' is a bit more suggestive an provocative than the sensual hula dancing. And that was a reason I placed a languagecwarning for my verse.

    Mark
Comment from Carla Trinklein
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This is lovely imagery! I haven't made it to the beach yet this summer, but I really need to get there...time's awastin'! I love your alliteration. Nicely done!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    Thanks Carla!

    I have been to the river and a pool but not to the beach (-:

    Mark
Comment from DeborahWrite
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Dear Mark,
Your poem is 6+stars! It's brilliant, and I visualize its imagery as I write your review! Your well-selected photograph adds more and I thank you for sharing this with us! Deborah

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
    It was my pleasure to share with you Deborah!

    Mark
reply by DeborahWrite on 14-Jul-2019
    Thank you, Mark!
Comment from JudyE
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Twerk and twist sound great to me. Language is always evolving and it's good you're doing your bit to move it along. I like the hula dancer image too. Good luck.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
    Judy,

    Never been to Hawaii or Polynesia to know if the hula dancers actually are into twerking or not. Thanks for your good wishes.

    Mark
reply by JudyE on 13-Jul-2019
    Would you believe I just came across 'twerking' in another poem? I'd never heard the word before and thought you'd made it up but not so apparently. Thanks heavens for Google.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
    J

    And now you know why I placed a language warning for my post (-:

    Twerking is something I have never done or will do. LOL

    M
Comment from Sugarray77
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Hey Mark. Glad to get to read another one of your verses. I like the island theme and think you did great to compare the movement of atoll sand to hula dancers. Cute.

Melissa

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
    Melissa,

    Thanks. I try to stick in not so commonly used words into my verses. I liked atoll instead of island (-: I did the same with animals in my ebook. Are you familiar with the animals: Ainu, caracal, jerboa, and zebu? The latter you may know ... LOL

    BTW ... I never visited Hawaii to see the hula dancing, but did see a volcanic eruption flying to/from Europe via an Iceland fuel stop; no hula dancing there!

    Mark
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Do the sands actually 'twerk'...hmmm, I think that should perhaps be 'tide pool' not 'atoll' ... but the imagination can see crazy things at night depending on one's beverage, I suppose.. LOL! ;) ;) A well-worded offering even if a bit removed from reality... :) :) LOL! :) Thanx for sharing, sir! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
    Yvette,

    OK hula dancers may twerk, sand pebbles maybe not (-; poetic license used extensively by me in many of my posts. Tide pool may be right, but .... LOL

    THANKS for your review and comments.

    Mark
Comment from Joan E.
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I enjoyed the echoing sounds and the visual dance movements. I could easily imagine "hula dancers" and admired your rhyme as well. Best wishes in the 5-7-5 contest and happy weekend- Joan

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
    Joan,

    Thanks, as always, for your comments and stars for my posts.

    Mark
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem that paints a little picture to the reader of the sea breeze in the mist that make the seashells turn and twist like little hoola dancers.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2019

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
    Thanks Sandra for your comments and stars. Pleased you liked this one.

    Mark