She is the rhythm in my heart
For my Soulmate who has given her all...47 total reviews
Comment from Melanie Cox
This is a heartfelt, beautiful poem. It perfectly fits the contest prompt. However, I believe this poem was destined to be written anyway. "As we beat at a pace that syncs our rhythms"...love this line. It clearly offers the reader a true sense and understanding of "soulmate". The best poetry is written when our most powerful feelings are shared. You have done so here with this impassioned and sincere write. I am honestly able to experience your pure feelings of profound love in this poem. Thank you for sharing and I wish you the best in the competition.
Also, saying a prayer for you and your wife. Bless
Mel
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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This is a heartfelt, beautiful poem. It perfectly fits the contest prompt. However, I believe this poem was destined to be written anyway. "As we beat at a pace that syncs our rhythms"...love this line. It clearly offers the reader a true sense and understanding of "soulmate". The best poetry is written when our most powerful feelings are shared. You have done so here with this impassioned and sincere write. I am honestly able to experience your pure feelings of profound love in this poem. Thank you for sharing and I wish you the best in the competition.
Also, saying a prayer for you and your wife. Bless
Mel
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
Comment from kahpot
I give you your just credit not only for that hardship but feeling the way you do (still) after "six decades long" a beautiful poem and read, an excellent, heartfelt tribute to your loved one, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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I give you your just credit not only for that hardship but feeling the way you do (still) after "six decades long" a beautiful poem and read, an excellent, heartfelt tribute to your loved one, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
Comment from l.raven
HI, it's not easy fighting cancer...but true love and God can get you through....I am so happy for you and your wife...it is wonderful she beat cancer...I wish you many years of happiness together....love your poem...and love your picture...very nicely written...and thank you for your notes...love Linda xxoo
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HI, it's not easy fighting cancer...but true love and God can get you through....I am so happy for you and your wife...it is wonderful she beat cancer...I wish you many years of happiness together....love your poem...and love your picture...very nicely written...and thank you for your notes...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
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and you are soooo welcome...love ...xxoo
Comment from June Sargent
What a beautiful testimony of a love that has survived a painful test and is flourishing in spite of it. Be proud and hold her hand whenever you feel like it. Flow with the rhythm in your hearts. Thank you for sharing.
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What a beautiful testimony of a love that has survived a painful test and is flourishing in spite of it. Be proud and hold her hand whenever you feel like it. Flow with the rhythm in your hearts. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very moving poem about love and devotion. I too have pictures of my wife and I on the beach. One in particular at Ft. Lauderdale before we were married. Thank you for the moving poem.
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A very moving poem about love and devotion. I too have pictures of my wife and I on the beach. One in particular at Ft. Lauderdale before we were married. Thank you for the moving poem.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
Comment from Yuna Akil
Hi! I thought you did I great job at portraying emotion in this poem. The parallelism between three decades six and six decades nine was a great choice. I added time to the poem and once I got to the end my hear melted away.
Great job!
Yuna.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Hi! I thought you did I great job at portraying emotion in this poem. The parallelism between three decades six and six decades nine was a great choice. I added time to the poem and once I got to the end my hear melted away.
Great job!
Yuna.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
Comment from kiwisteveh
You may think the rating is a little harsh, but I really feel that this sweet poem could be improved in a number of ways.
I like the structure you have given it which traces your life together at various snapshot points.
I am confused by the use of the word 'little' twice in referring to feelings about your wife. Apparently you not only spend little time pondering the part she has played in your life - possible, but isn't it more likely to be considerable time? But you also have little wonder that she continues to be the love of your life.... In the next stanza you are in awe that she's still there. Isn't that a contradiction?
'Remembering' the first word of your poem is grammatically weak - why not change to the simpler 'I remember'?
On a final note, I see the 'sweet' but I don't really think this is 'light', which would be supplied by something more carefree and happy. Your notes add an even more serious note.
Still a lovely tribute to the love of your life. Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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You may think the rating is a little harsh, but I really feel that this sweet poem could be improved in a number of ways.
I like the structure you have given it which traces your life together at various snapshot points.
I am confused by the use of the word 'little' twice in referring to feelings about your wife. Apparently you not only spend little time pondering the part she has played in your life - possible, but isn't it more likely to be considerable time? But you also have little wonder that she continues to be the love of your life.... In the next stanza you are in awe that she's still there. Isn't that a contradiction?
'Remembering' the first word of your poem is grammatically weak - why not change to the simpler 'I remember'?
On a final note, I see the 'sweet' but I don't really think this is 'light', which would be supplied by something more carefree and happy. Your notes add an even more serious note.
Still a lovely tribute to the love of your life. Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from Raul1
This is a wonderful poem that you wrote. I have enjoyed it. It was very easy to read and I understood it. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
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This is a wonderful poem that you wrote. I have enjoyed it. It was very easy to read and I understood it. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
This is very sweet. It is nice to hear of couple still in love after many years of marriage. There are more than we know, we just don't hear about them. For some reason divorce is celebrated more than marriage.
Almost losing a loved one to cancer is something I understand well. My sister and sis-in-law both had breast cancer, both many years cancer free now. My mom had cancer twice and my youngest sister died of it. It is sad when the youngest dies first. It is a dreaded disease. So tired of hearing people I love have it. Darn stuff! So happy your wife is now cancer free. They are doing great things these days. My niece is getting a double doctorate in cancer research because of all the cancer in our family. It was her mom who had breast cancer.
This is a lovely poem and I wish you great success in the contest.
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This is very sweet. It is nice to hear of couple still in love after many years of marriage. There are more than we know, we just don't hear about them. For some reason divorce is celebrated more than marriage.
Almost losing a loved one to cancer is something I understand well. My sister and sis-in-law both had breast cancer, both many years cancer free now. My mom had cancer twice and my youngest sister died of it. It is sad when the youngest dies first. It is a dreaded disease. So tired of hearing people I love have it. Darn stuff! So happy your wife is now cancer free. They are doing great things these days. My niece is getting a double doctorate in cancer research because of all the cancer in our family. It was her mom who had breast cancer.
This is a lovely poem and I wish you great success in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
Comment from Janetsue
This is a loving and romantic poem about a wonderful marriage partnership that has stood strong down through many years. I enjoyed reading it very much and wish you the best in the contest.
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This is a loving and romantic poem about a wonderful marriage partnership that has stood strong down through many years. I enjoyed reading it very much and wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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My sincere thank you.
