A Chance Encounter
Watching dancing mist at the shore6 total reviews
Comment from JudyE
I enjoyed this and can easily conjure up a nymph dancing in the shallows.
I think in the following: Twirls, sauters and pirouettes - you might have meant 'saunters'
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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I enjoyed this and can easily conjure up a nymph dancing in the shallows.
I think in the following: Twirls, sauters and pirouettes - you might have meant 'saunters'
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Sauter is a ballet term meaning to jump. Thank you for the read and review.
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Oh sorry. I should have googled it. I thought it seemed a strange choice. My apologies.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the encounter with a dancing nymph on the waves of the ocean visible from the hotel room. Her dance last until she saw you and blow you away kiss to makeat your day a bliss.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about the encounter with a dancing nymph on the waves of the ocean visible from the hotel room. Her dance last until she saw you and blow you away kiss to makeat your day a bliss.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the read and the comments. Right on the mark.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
You have created some very beautiful and magical images! I can see the mermaid dancing across the water and sand - a beauty to behold! But as with all mermaids, disappearing is their forte! Great job! xoxo
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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You have created some very beautiful and magical images! I can see the mermaid dancing across the water and sand - a beauty to behold! But as with all mermaids, disappearing is their forte! Great job! xoxo
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thanks much for your read and encouraging review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry, Harry. Great job with imagery creating words--even if no picture had been included. Your lines flow smoothly and I felt as if I were seeing this. I like your approach to the dance contest theme. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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I enjoyed your contest entry, Harry. Great job with imagery creating words--even if no picture had been included. Your lines flow smoothly and I felt as if I were seeing this. I like your approach to the dance contest theme. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thanks so much for you read and encouraging words.
Comment from Heather Knight
Lovely, evocative poem.
Just one question: are you using 'sauters' as a verb? Then there should be a comma here:Twirls (,) sauters and pirouettes
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Lovely, evocative poem.
Just one question: are you using 'sauters' as a verb? Then there should be a comma here:Twirls (,) sauters and pirouettes
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Your read is appreciated. Thanks for the tip. I will edit.
Comment from JLR
Perfect use of the sea the motion, the rocking the rolling to be the metaphor for dancing. You created a great anticipation for the reader with the chosen graphic. Very good luck in the voting.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Perfect use of the sea the motion, the rocking the rolling to be the metaphor for dancing. You created a great anticipation for the reader with the chosen graphic. Very good luck in the voting.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thanks much for your read and comments.
