I can canI Ican canI Ican
I can canI Ican canI Ican canI canI . . .44 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's poem giving a great message! The two words the
author chose speak volumes! Thank you for the author's notes. The
artwork is awesome and compliments the theme and words of this poem!
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I found the author's poem giving a great message! The two words the
author chose speak volumes! Thank you for the author's notes. The
artwork is awesome and compliments the theme and words of this poem!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am sure you could have come up with a few more words to describe your willingness to do this? But I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
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I am sure you could have come up with a few more words to describe your willingness to do this? But I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
Comment from JSD
Love it. Thank you! 35 syllables of abstract minimalism. Really brave. And most effective. And ending with a dot dot dot of indecision. Thanks again for responding to my special request.
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Love it. Thank you! 35 syllables of abstract minimalism. Really brave. And most effective. And ending with a dot dot dot of indecision. Thanks again for responding to my special request.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2023
Comment from lancellot
No. I mean no disrespect but no. This is not a poetry. Without proper spacing and punctuation, part of this that repeats isn't a word. I can canl I can...
See: canI is not a word.
Yes, I get a statement of some form is likely behind this but as is. It needs more work.
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No. I mean no disrespect but no. This is not a poetry. Without proper spacing and punctuation, part of this that repeats isn't a word. I can canl I can...
See: canI is not a word.
Yes, I get a statement of some form is likely behind this but as is. It needs more work.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, I can canI Ican canI Ican, could use a few more word breaks. Otherwise, this repetitive announcement of ability looks more like a testimony of the opposite.
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This poem, I can canI Ican canI Ican, could use a few more word breaks. Otherwise, this repetitive announcement of ability looks more like a testimony of the opposite.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I'll skip commenting on the accompanying picture as the poem needs to stand on its own two feet. Same thing really for the author notes.
There's perhaps a little too much repetition going on.
The readability would certainly be improved by adding some spaces between 'canI' and making actual words. 16 'words' out the 19 aren't actually words.
Unless of course you're using it as an acronym:
Community Action of Northeast Indiana (Fort Wayne, IN) - too localised and obscure I feel for FanStory.
Canoe Association of Northern Ireland (Belfast, Northern Ireland, UK) - I am a member of this myself but feel you are probably not, and likely to have little knowledge of this organisation.
Computer for All Nigerians Initiative (Nigeria) - a good cause, no doubt but within the context of the poem, a little too far-reaching perhaps.
Child Abuse and Neglect Institute _ I sincerely hope not, giving the pairing with I can... I disregard this interpretation on the ground of good taste.
Constant And Never-ending Improvement - at last... one that seems to fit, but I fear just a coincidence.
Best of luck in the competition.
GMG
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Hi there,
I'll skip commenting on the accompanying picture as the poem needs to stand on its own two feet. Same thing really for the author notes.
There's perhaps a little too much repetition going on.
The readability would certainly be improved by adding some spaces between 'canI' and making actual words. 16 'words' out the 19 aren't actually words.
Unless of course you're using it as an acronym:
Community Action of Northeast Indiana (Fort Wayne, IN) - too localised and obscure I feel for FanStory.
Canoe Association of Northern Ireland (Belfast, Northern Ireland, UK) - I am a member of this myself but feel you are probably not, and likely to have little knowledge of this organisation.
Computer for All Nigerians Initiative (Nigeria) - a good cause, no doubt but within the context of the poem, a little too far-reaching perhaps.
Child Abuse and Neglect Institute _ I sincerely hope not, giving the pairing with I can... I disregard this interpretation on the ground of good taste.
Constant And Never-ending Improvement - at last... one that seems to fit, but I fear just a coincidence.
Best of luck in the competition.
GMG
Comment Written 24-Jul-2019
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Hey.....that's actually just a little bit easier to remember than what the little engine said...LOL! ;) But, you know, standing there at the opening to forever, there are no two better words that can be said!! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing your complete presentation this evening and best of luck in the contest! :)
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Hey.....that's actually just a little bit easier to remember than what the little engine said...LOL! ;) But, you know, standing there at the opening to forever, there are no two better words that can be said!! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing your complete presentation this evening and best of luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 23-Jul-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
Don't we all? This reminds me of a story from my childhood about a little railway engine who went chuffing up a steep hill saying 'I think I can, I think I can, I think I can,' until he got to the top. But you were forced into starting 'I can', and you could.
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Don't we all? This reminds me of a story from my childhood about a little railway engine who went chuffing up a steep hill saying 'I think I can, I think I can, I think I can,' until he got to the top. But you were forced into starting 'I can', and you could.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
Comment from Dawn Munro
I cannot, honestly, read this poem without commenting on the difficulty I had deciphering it because of the presentation (as gorgeous as it is) -- why no space between the two words, "can I", thereby creating a non-word?
The poem itself is profound, but I fear it may be dismissed because of your choice to reinvent the English language... A shame! It's truly excellent, even brilliant in its simplicity, IMHO.
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I cannot, honestly, read this poem without commenting on the difficulty I had deciphering it because of the presentation (as gorgeous as it is) -- why no space between the two words, "can I", thereby creating a non-word?
The poem itself is profound, but I fear it may be dismissed because of your choice to reinvent the English language... A shame! It's truly excellent, even brilliant in its simplicity, IMHO.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Do you know? I honestly think you can!! LOL! This is a brilliant one-line poem, for the I Can contest. It's totally original, and makes the reader believe s/he can too. I know I can!! Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
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Do you know? I honestly think you can!! LOL! This is a brilliant one-line poem, for the I Can contest. It's totally original, and makes the reader believe s/he can too. I know I can!! Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
