The Everlasting Dance
Waltzing through life together63 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Memories of Lawrence Welk in this! My mother loved to watch him, and she also watched Kathryn and Arthur Murray's dance show. You capture the delight of the dance in this. Feels like a waltz. This is perfectly measured and the rhyme is great. It's a dance of life you're celebrating. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Memories of Lawrence Welk in this! My mother loved to watch him, and she also watched Kathryn and Arthur Murray's dance show. You capture the delight of the dance in this. Feels like a waltz. This is perfectly measured and the rhyme is great. It's a dance of life you're celebrating. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Judi. Nothing like waltz time to give a little lilt to a poem. I remember Lawrence Welk, too. (Did you know that he had a pretty good sense of humor? His license plate was Ana 1 Ana 2. I'm serious!) xo
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You're very welcome. Didn't know about Welk's license plate. That is funny. judi
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I remember being surprised when I first saw it because he didn't seem like he'd had a sense of humor like that!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Love it, a beautiful waltz, my favourite dance, and now I must learn the words to the melody. Your dance poem is just that, a dancing poem and a delight to read, my friend. Good luck in the contest with this little gem. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Love it, a beautiful waltz, my favourite dance, and now I must learn the words to the melody. Your dance poem is just that, a dancing poem and a delight to read, my friend. Good luck in the contest with this little gem. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Sandra! I appreciate that you could feel the waltz in there! I appreciate this validating review! xo
Comment from Colin John
Hi Rahelle , could not expect less Mrs dance teacher s lovely write , makes me want to dance except we are in a heatwave lol . Wish you well with this one . Kind regards Colin xx
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Hi Rahelle , could not expect less Mrs dance teacher s lovely write , makes me want to dance except we are in a heatwave lol . Wish you well with this one . Kind regards Colin xx
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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We are, too, but I still dance anyway. I have no control when it comes to expressing myself that way. Thank you for this very nice review. xo
Comment from Michele Harber
I wondered how long it would take you to enter the Dancing poetry competition. It was never a question in my mind of would you, only when. Your poem is sweet and loving and joyous and, with its staccato rhythm, reads like a tap dance (maybe some jazz hands?), which I suspect is not by accident. The repetition of the first line of the stanza, and the "my life"/"our life" of the last line works well to tie the stanzas together.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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I wondered how long it would take you to enter the Dancing poetry competition. It was never a question in my mind of would you, only when. Your poem is sweet and loving and joyous and, with its staccato rhythm, reads like a tap dance (maybe some jazz hands?), which I suspect is not by accident. The repetition of the first line of the stanza, and the "my life"/"our life" of the last line works well to tie the stanzas together.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Yes, I could not resist this contest; no question about that!! This is actually a waltz. Tap rhythms are usually four beats to the measure, rather than three.
Thanks for the encouragement! xo
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Geez, what do you think you are, a music and former dance teacher? Thanks for the correction. At least I picked up that it was a dance rhythm. You have to give me credit for that - and for the fact that I didn't use any shellfish puns in this comment.
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You're my star(fish) for that...
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Uh oh, this means (Man o') War!
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We need something else to octopi our mind!
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That made me laugh out loud. Of course, it wasn't quite a shellfish, but I am a sucker for a good sucker. Besides, your desire to make me laugh just warmed the cockles of my heart.
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You win! You win! Let squid it now! xo
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Chill out. This was all in good fun. Please stop whaling about it.
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hahaha.
Comment from Irish Rain
Simply put and wonderful.
It says everything needed about
dancing through life with the
right person.
Great entry!
Good luck,
Blessings...
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Simply put and wonderful.
It says everything needed about
dancing through life with the
right person.
Great entry!
Good luck,
Blessings...
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much, Irish Rain. You know how much I appreciate your kind reviews. xo
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You're most welcome!
Comment from juliaSjames
Love the waltz you composed in words and metre, Rachelle.
It's lilting and joyful. It seems that one can dance forever, floating in love's arms.
What do you think of changing "happy"to "blithe" for meaning and metre
"so blithe and
so carefree"
But that's just a tweak. Let the dance go on ...
I'm sure this will do well in the voting booth.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Love the waltz you composed in words and metre, Rachelle.
It's lilting and joyful. It seems that one can dance forever, floating in love's arms.
What do you think of changing "happy"to "blithe" for meaning and metre
"so blithe and
so carefree"
But that's just a tweak. Let the dance go on ...
I'm sure this will do well in the voting booth.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thanks for the suggestion; I'll run it through my mind with the whole poem in front of me. I always appreciate feedback like that from reviewers. xo
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image
and presentation, Rachelle.
-Your note is appreciated.
-A nicely written poem about
dancing with that special someone
as you go through life together.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the beginning with
the dance beat.
-The joy in this poem
comes through very well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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-Very nice image
and presentation, Rachelle.
-Your note is appreciated.
-A nicely written poem about
dancing with that special someone
as you go through life together.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the beginning with
the dance beat.
-The joy in this poem
comes through very well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Pam; I appreciate your feedback very much. xo
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
I love this! perfect for this contest and the picture is amazing! what an awesome tribute to your husband. I'm sure he is so very proud of you and is as amazed at your talent as I am if not more so. :) xoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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I love this! perfect for this contest and the picture is amazing! what an awesome tribute to your husband. I'm sure he is so very proud of you and is as amazed at your talent as I am if not more so. :) xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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I couldn't believe that picture when I saw it!! I love Shutterstock; they always have the BEST choices!!
Thank you for this lovely, encouraging review. You do such wonders for my spirit, Diana. xo
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:) awe!!! xoxoxo
Comment from LisaMay
I love the rhythm of those multiple 3-beat lines then the 4... I guess it has a name in music... you've mentioned waltz so it must be that. From my observation (not from personal experience), having someone to hold and be held by, in sync and in step, knowing the moves or being guided into them, must be one of the loveliest, liberating things to experience, as your poem attests to.
In all my different relationships I have never had a guy who actually liked dancing and wanted to do it. I've had to bop around by myself, because i DO like movement and rhythm (I'm the Tush of The Tournament remember). They have either been too embarrassed or too embarrassing, too drunk or not drunk enough, too short etc etc.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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I love the rhythm of those multiple 3-beat lines then the 4... I guess it has a name in music... you've mentioned waltz so it must be that. From my observation (not from personal experience), having someone to hold and be held by, in sync and in step, knowing the moves or being guided into them, must be one of the loveliest, liberating things to experience, as your poem attests to.
In all my different relationships I have never had a guy who actually liked dancing and wanted to do it. I've had to bop around by myself, because i DO like movement and rhythm (I'm the Tush of The Tournament remember). They have either been too embarrassed or too embarrassing, too drunk or not drunk enough, too short etc etc.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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Bobby won't dance until he's had enough beers...and that number seems to vary from occasion to occasion. But we made a rule before our wedding: we dance only with each other. So sometimes that gets a little frustrating for me, since, if given the opportunity, I would dance every minute of my life. But in the overall scheme of things, it's not even a blip on the screen.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dancing poem with the one made just for you, make every step a dance for a whole life long, a waltz that goes on for as long as we breathe.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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A very well-written dancing poem with the one made just for you, make every step a dance for a whole life long, a waltz that goes on for as long as we breathe.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019
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You got it! Thanks, Sandra.
