Senryu (when feeling low)
Senryu 5-7-7 format28 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, this made me smile, a gorgeous picture and your words are uplifting and positive, my happy place is within myself, my dogma where I can heal and put things into perspective, I enjoyed your wonderful words Melissa, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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He he he, this made me smile, a gorgeous picture and your words are uplifting and positive, my happy place is within myself, my dogma where I can heal and put things into perspective, I enjoyed your wonderful words Melissa, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review, Dolly. I am really glad you liked it! Enjoy your happy place!
Melissa
Comment from Colin John
Haha Melissa, yes usually I don't have time to find anywhere just use my head as i am having a cuppa, but do go for walks on the coast and this clears any cobwebs. Thanks for sharing, a lovely write. XX
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Haha Melissa, yes usually I don't have time to find anywhere just use my head as i am having a cuppa, but do go for walks on the coast and this clears any cobwebs. Thanks for sharing, a lovely write. XX
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hello Colin... I am delighted that you liked the cheerful sunflower. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this uplifting piece. We all must have at least one special place, even if it's only in our mind
or the porch swing!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this uplifting piece. We all must have at least one special place, even if it's only in our mind
or the porch swing!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hi Janice... Thank you!!! I am delighted that you liked it. I hope the Indigo Bunting with the sunflower cheered you and gave you a good start to your day!
Comment from poetwatch
I also like to pick up my spirit when I'm feeling low. There was a time when I went to the back of the house and smell the roses and then lit a joint. :) High there Melissa. Now I lock myself in my room take my meds, wrestle with my emotions, and relax. :) Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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I also like to pick up my spirit when I'm feeling low. There was a time when I went to the back of the house and smell the roses and then lit a joint. :) High there Melissa. Now I lock myself in my room take my meds, wrestle with my emotions, and relax. :) Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hey there! I hope you enjoyed this little verse and that it cheered you a little, Jose. Thanks for the review and comments.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
What you so is so true. I think we all have a special place we can go to get a fresh perspective. It's needed when you're feeling low and maybe overwhelmed by life's problems. Happy place not to be confused with Happy Hour, although that's the cure-all for some. Lovely artwork. I believe that bird has found its happy place! judi
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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What you so is so true. I think we all have a special place we can go to get a fresh perspective. It's needed when you're feeling low and maybe overwhelmed by life's problems. Happy place not to be confused with Happy Hour, although that's the cure-all for some. Lovely artwork. I believe that bird has found its happy place! judi
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hi Judi... Thank you!!! I am delighted that you liked it. I hope the Indigo Bunting with the sunflower cheered you and gave you a good start to your day!
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You're very welcome. What would cheer me up is for people to read what I've posted. I don't think what I've done is that bad, but it's not getting reviews. judi
Comment from Mistydawn
I think we all need a happy place where we can go to recharge. Your poem is well-written, interesting and your artwork is gorgeous. It shows us just how beautiful nature can be. Great job.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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I think we all need a happy place where we can go to recharge. Your poem is well-written, interesting and your artwork is gorgeous. It shows us just how beautiful nature can be. Great job.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hi Misty... Thank you!!! I am delighted that you liked it. I hope the Indigo Bunting with the sunflower cheered you and gave you a good start to your day!
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It brought a smile to my face.
Comment from Joan E.
Just seeing the giant sunflower put a smile on my face! I am glad you have a special "happy place" to find a "new perspective". The Bunting was a lovely bonus for your 5-7-7 senryu. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Just seeing the giant sunflower put a smile on my face! I am glad you have a special "happy place" to find a "new perspective". The Bunting was a lovely bonus for your 5-7-7 senryu. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hi Joan... Thank you!!! I am delighted that you liked it. I hope the Indigo Bunting with the sunflower cheered you and gave you a good start to your day!
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Great idea. I love sunflowers. They are my favorite, a bouquet of yellow sunflower, white daisies and red roses, just like a Susan Winget picture. =} Well done as always. Rox
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Great idea. I love sunflowers. They are my favorite, a bouquet of yellow sunflower, white daisies and red roses, just like a Susan Winget picture. =} Well done as always. Rox
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hi Rox... Thank you!!! I am delighted that you liked it. I hope the Indigo Bunting with the sunflower cheered you and gave you a good start to your day!
Comment from June Sargent
Well, that certainly is one way to deal with it. A change of scenery is always good for the soul and a great way to get a new perspective. And we all have our secret gardens where we can be ourselves and relax. Cute illustration for this senryu.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Well, that certainly is one way to deal with it. A change of scenery is always good for the soul and a great way to get a new perspective. And we all have our secret gardens where we can be ourselves and relax. Cute illustration for this senryu.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Hi June... Thank you!!! I am delighted that you liked it. I hope the Indigo Bunting with the sunflower cheered you and gave you a good start to your day!
Comment from Pantygynt
The senryu, like the haiku, is normally restricted to a 17 syllable syllable total. Also like much Japanese shortform poems it is pared to the minimum. The theme here is great and the picture gorgeous. What about this:
when feeling low
move to happy place
for new perspectives
Fourteen syllables! Now if you decide you want to put yourself back in the picture, you have three syllables vacant, and you really only need one:
when feeling low
move to happy place
for new perspectives
also please note that, like the haiky again there is no punctuation or capital letters (except for proper nouns).
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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The senryu, like the haiku, is normally restricted to a 17 syllable syllable total. Also like much Japanese shortform poems it is pared to the minimum. The theme here is great and the picture gorgeous. What about this:
when feeling low
move to happy place
for new perspectives
Fourteen syllables! Now if you decide you want to put yourself back in the picture, you have three syllables vacant, and you really only need one:
when feeling low
move to happy place
for new perspectives
also please note that, like the haiky again there is no punctuation or capital letters (except for proper nouns).
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thanks Jim. I had not planned to have one sentence rambling through, but it seemed to just sneak its way onto the page. LOL. I remembered later that the Japanese style is choppier with dramatic impactive lines. Thanks for the reminder and great review. On a lighter note, I hope your puppies are doing well and their momma too. Good luck with them.
Melissa
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Pups are fine and Mum is recovering slowly. She is an old lady in doggy terms, and it was a traumatic birthing, but she has her milk back now so I am off bottle duty thank goodness.
