Lightning and Thunder (5-7-5)
summer storm observations and sounds29 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Lightning and Thunder, has the right set up and creates the scene of that scary snap of light and rumbling noises that cause us to hunker down. Nice rhyme to make this one stand out.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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This 5-7-5, Lightning and Thunder, has the right set up and creates the scene of that scary snap of light and rumbling noises that cause us to hunker down. Nice rhyme to make this one stand out.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Bill,
I do appreciate your support for my short verses. As always, I enjoy and look forward to your comments.
Mark
Comment from zanya
Mother Nature can put on some spectacular displays for us earthlings ! and none more exquisite than the 'white cracks in the sky' so beautifully described here
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Mother Nature can put on some spectacular displays for us earthlings ! and none more exquisite than the 'white cracks in the sky' so beautifully described here
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thanks Zanya for your support of my 'weather report' verse (-: Pleased you liked my choice of words.
Mark
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the lightning and thunder that works together in a storm. The lightning flashes followed by the thunder that clashes before the rain comes down.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the lightning and thunder that works together in a storm. The lightning flashes followed by the thunder that clashes before the rain comes down.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thanks Sandra for your review and commentary. All are appreciated, as always.
Mark
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent description of lightning, " white cracks" in the sky, this artwork is great I love the reflections of it, very well written and presented 5-7-5 poem****kahpot
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What an excellent description of lightning, " white cracks" in the sky, this artwork is great I love the reflections of it, very well written and presented 5-7-5 poem****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review and your encouraging words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A good description of the atmospheric thunder and lightning here Mark, storms can be crazy and destroy our houses at times, a fine presentation, love Dolly x
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A good description of the atmospheric thunder and lightning here Mark, storms can be crazy and destroy our houses at times, a fine presentation, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thanks Dolly! Pleased you liked this one.
Mark
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your haiku is very well-written and descriptive, capturing the bright flashes of lightning and roar of thunder. The artwork is a very fitting
accompaniment.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Your haiku is very well-written and descriptive, capturing the bright flashes of lightning and roar of thunder. The artwork is a very fitting
accompaniment.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Janice,
So pleased that you enjoyed this entire presentation.
Mark
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Hey, hey -- a weather offering for the evening -- I like it! :) Those first two lines are awesome and contain the imagery and even rhythm your offerings always deliver....I would say that, possibly, the last line does not fit as well..? Perhaps it's the 'c' in claps and the 'c' in cracks....although I suspect it also has to do with 'word impact' in that 'flashes' and 'cracks in sky' have a completely different feel that 'thunderous'... ?? That is not a criticism but a critique....food for thought, I guess -- the poem is a good composition of the scene!! ;) ;) Always enjoy your offerings, sir -- thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Hey, hey -- a weather offering for the evening -- I like it! :) Those first two lines are awesome and contain the imagery and even rhythm your offerings always deliver....I would say that, possibly, the last line does not fit as well..? Perhaps it's the 'c' in claps and the 'c' in cracks....although I suspect it also has to do with 'word impact' in that 'flashes' and 'cracks in sky' have a completely different feel that 'thunderous'... ?? That is not a criticism but a critique....food for thought, I guess -- the poem is a good composition of the scene!! ;) ;) Always enjoy your offerings, sir -- thanx for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Yvette,
Good observation/critique: last line was the weakest IMHO. I was trying for the 'thunder claps' to go with my lightning flashes. I could just edit to 'thunderous applause' but again it misses the fluidity with the other two lines. Here is a time, I should stretch out my 5-7-5 modality. LOL
Mark
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem about those summer storms with the lightening and thunder. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem about those summer storms with the lightening and thunder. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thanks Teri for your blessings and review of my summer storm verse. Pleased you liked its overall presentation.
Mark
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You are so welcome! You did a great job on this Mark!
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This is an awesome 5-7-5 poem! You captured the essence of a storm at night excellently! I can hear the thunder roll! Great job! This would have been a wonderful contest entry! :)
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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This is an awesome 5-7-5 poem! You captured the essence of a storm at night excellently! I can hear the thunder roll! Great job! This would have been a wonderful contest entry! :)
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Diana,
I liked it enough to post without entering a contest. But I do appreciate your awesome review for my typical verse style.
Mark
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Me too! It is awesome!
