Boardwalk Romance
Falling in love in Atlantic City...16 total reviews
Comment from Janilou
This truly is a wonderful poem.
cotton candy kisses
'neath salty seaside skies,
intoxicating laughter with
your heart the Midway prize...
The only editing type comment I have is that the last line appears in white type where the other three are in yellow. It took my mind off the poem for a few seconds. Perhaps you meant it this way? Not sure.
All the best in the contest,
Jan
PS Much better now! Looks amazing!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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This truly is a wonderful poem.
cotton candy kisses
'neath salty seaside skies,
intoxicating laughter with
your heart the Midway prize...
The only editing type comment I have is that the last line appears in white type where the other three are in yellow. It took my mind off the poem for a few seconds. Perhaps you meant it this way? Not sure.
All the best in the contest,
Jan
PS Much better now! Looks amazing!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Jan -- did a bit of a 'hue touch-up'! ;) ;) Have a great day!
Comment from the13thpoet
Good morning, let me start by saying good luck in the contest. I liked your poem and I'm not just being biased cause I'm originally from NJ and have been to Atlantic City dozens of times. The flow and rhymes were good and I like incorporated the things reminiscent of a stroll on the boardwalk. Good job.
gotta watch those seagulls!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Good morning, let me start by saying good luck in the contest. I liked your poem and I'm not just being biased cause I'm originally from NJ and have been to Atlantic City dozens of times. The flow and rhymes were good and I like incorporated the things reminiscent of a stroll on the boardwalk. Good job.
gotta watch those seagulls!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Wow! Thank you so much for letting me know a little about you, and so very glad you enjoyed! Appreciate your review!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your romantic kissing encounter that brought reality to this intoxicating moment which I have not experienced for many years, you brought back the memory here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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I enjoyed your romantic kissing encounter that brought reality to this intoxicating moment which I have not experienced for many years, you brought back the memory here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from sunnilicious
I didn't know there was a ferris wheel in Atlantic City. Nice artwork choice, and overall presentation.
Love is grand... Great alliteration with cotton-candy and salty-seaside-skies. Nice visual imagery created. Romantic, sincere and tender. Well thought out and clearly written.
Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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I didn't know there was a ferris wheel in Atlantic City. Nice artwork choice, and overall presentation.
Love is grand... Great alliteration with cotton-candy and salty-seaside-skies. Nice visual imagery created. Romantic, sincere and tender. Well thought out and clearly written.
Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Brian Taylor1
Great poem. I love the seaside skies line. An excellent ending as well. But the best part for me was the opening line. Goes with the title. A title that is perfect for the piece. Good work
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Great poem. I love the seaside skies line. An excellent ending as well. But the best part for me was the opening line. Goes with the title. A title that is perfect for the piece. Good work
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thanks so very much for your encouraging review!!
Comment from kahpot
I am taking this as, you captured your desired heart midway a date on a boardwalk I hope that's right, even if not this is a beautiful read and poem, great artwork with words of love, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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I am taking this as, you captured your desired heart midway a date on a boardwalk I hope that's right, even if not this is a beautiful read and poem, great artwork with words of love, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Yes! So glad you enjoyed and thank you for your review!
