You Say It's Only Words
Philosophical15 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
When I initiated this prompt I'd just been listening to the Bee Gees singing one of my favourite songs, so that gave me the idea for the contest's title. Judging by the number of entries and the range of the poems, it is a popular topic to write about. Obvious I suppose... we are all wordsmiths. And I feel that your poem is an excellent offering, carrying wisdom and wit at the end. (Jim Beam is excellent company!) There is perhaps an overly tone of wagging finger. I do like the repetition at the beginning of each stanza.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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When I initiated this prompt I'd just been listening to the Bee Gees singing one of my favourite songs, so that gave me the idea for the contest's title. Judging by the number of entries and the range of the poems, it is a popular topic to write about. Obvious I suppose... we are all wordsmiths. And I feel that your poem is an excellent offering, carrying wisdom and wit at the end. (Jim Beam is excellent company!) There is perhaps an overly tone of wagging finger. I do like the repetition at the beginning of each stanza.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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It is a great song. And thank you for creating this contest. And thank you also for endorsing my friend Jim.
I appreciate your taking time to review my work.
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You're very welcome. Cheers!
Comment from royowen
Well I think you have a chance, a very good respondent to the the prompt Bob. There are some pretty good poets onsite, but remember that a winning entry is only a matter of opinion was the criteria for grammar are met...and there's nothing wrong with yours, a very clever post. Well done Bob, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Well I think you have a chance, a very good respondent to the the prompt Bob. There are some pretty good poets onsite, but remember that a winning entry is only a matter of opinion was the criteria for grammar are met...and there's nothing wrong with yours, a very clever post. Well done Bob, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you Roy and I agree there are many good poets on fanstory. I do appreciate your review. Thank you again
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Well done
Comment from Joy Graham
Ahhh, yes. Those bottles soothe us after receiving a fistful of words. Who needs to hear those words. Have another drink for me. Drinking won't solve the problem, but it sure helps us escape. It can also cause more problems.
I enjoyed reading your poem. It's a good and strong contest entry.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Ahhh, yes. Those bottles soothe us after receiving a fistful of words. Who needs to hear those words. Have another drink for me. Drinking won't solve the problem, but it sure helps us escape. It can also cause more problems.
I enjoyed reading your poem. It's a good and strong contest entry.
Joy xx
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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I agree it doesn't solve the problem but my God it does help you forget and we all need to forget sometimes. Sadly, it also leaves a hangover which inevitably leads to a promise, I'll never drink again. Luckily, promises are made to be broken. Thanks for the review
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem effectively shoots down the expression "Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words will never hurt me"! How could anyone ever have believed that? One thing: Line 19 is repetitive, could use some improvement.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Your well-written poem effectively shoots down the expression "Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words will never hurt me"! How could anyone ever have believed that? One thing: Line 19 is repetitive, could use some improvement.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Thanks Janice, just corrected that. I wish all reviewers were as constructive as you. Thank you again
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Bob, THANK YOU for taking the comment as it was meant--to help. Janice
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well you touched on some good points in your efforts here, Bob. Advice you gave is golden. "Think before you speak." Words cannot be taken back, once they are out there they stay and often spread like fire and can cause much damage. Well said my friend. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Well you touched on some good points in your efforts here, Bob. Advice you gave is golden. "Think before you speak." Words cannot be taken back, once they are out there they stay and often spread like fire and can cause much damage. Well said my friend. Nancy:)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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I'm not too bad on offering advice, just terrible at following it. Thank you Nancy
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You never know what voters will do, I think you have just as much chance of collecting a ribbon as anyone else here. This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a clear and consistent theme of the impact words have on others. The rhyme and meter are solid and it reads fluidly aloud. Good luck in the judging and thank you very muc for sharing it.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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You never know what voters will do, I think you have just as much chance of collecting a ribbon as anyone else here. This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a clear and consistent theme of the impact words have on others. The rhyme and meter are solid and it reads fluidly aloud. Good luck in the judging and thank you very muc for sharing it.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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And thank you so much for reading it.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately words can be profound, start wars, kill Queens and ruffle feathers and may also move mountains! Words are powerful tools and you proved that here with your poignant and strong write, words can hurt and they can soothe, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Unfortunately words can be profound, start wars, kill Queens and ruffle feathers and may also move mountains! Words are powerful tools and you proved that here with your poignant and strong write, words can hurt and they can soothe, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Words, is also the name of a song by the BeeGees and it rates as one of my favourites. This contest has a number of great entries and I'll be happy to be mentioned once. There are some very talented poets here. Thank you Dolly for the review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from kahpot
This poem speaks the truth, many people say it is only words and never understood that those kind of words have brought down Kings and Kingdoms, an excellent poem and read, this work has a very powerful message, very well written, ( save some Beam for me)****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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This poem speaks the truth, many people say it is only words and never understood that those kind of words have brought down Kings and Kingdoms, an excellent poem and read, this work has a very powerful message, very well written, ( save some Beam for me)****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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The bottle's open and near full. You're welcome anytime
Comment from JudyE
I've been really pleased with a couple of pieces then realised I was only 'making up the number' too. However, I think you've done well with this. Although it's Jim Beam you're talking to at the end, what you say throughout the piece is so true. Words can destroy reputations and put people's lives on the line. Whatever your place in the final line-up, I enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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I've been really pleased with a couple of pieces then realised I was only 'making up the number' too. However, I think you've done well with this. Although it's Jim Beam you're talking to at the end, what you say throughout the piece is so true. Words can destroy reputations and put people's lives on the line. Whatever your place in the final line-up, I enjoyed this.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you Judy E. I agree, smart arse comments or sarcasm can cause hurt and as writers we have a responsibility to use care when we speak.
Comment from Brady Jane
Amazing poem, I'm sure it will do well in the competition! I really enjoyed how your words flowed and the pictures they created in my mind. This has tremendous potential :))
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Amazing poem, I'm sure it will do well in the competition! I really enjoyed how your words flowed and the pictures they created in my mind. This has tremendous potential :))
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thank you so kindly for those words of encouragement. I really appreciate you giving my poem your time.
