Comment from ngage

Excellent

Great photo choice, Ms. Shana! It definitively fits the Beast's description.
I think this is now my favorite chapter. Full of action, suspense, and more!
Your srory is always so believable. You make it all real!
I do enjoy the sense of humor you manage to slip in there too. Love it!

Can't wait for the next one!

Nate

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019

Thank you, Nate :)

Glad you enjoyed the photo. It is actually one of the werewolves from Van Helsing. It reminds me of my Beast, except he is more snow white.
Hearing you liked this one put a pep in my step! I love to entertain readers with my Breedline adventures. Your support is such a positive uplift. Thank you so much!

Hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from Diana L Crawford

Excellent

Another awesome chapter! I'm guessing it's not a good idea to make Jace mad! I really like how you soothe the beast by describing his brother as being able to communicate telepathically! Can't wait to read more!

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thank you, Diana! :)

You are exactly right. It's not a good idea to upset Jace. But thank goodness his twin brother can talk him down before he goes overboard.
So glad you enjoyed. Stay tuned ... more Breedline adventures to come.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

reply by Diana L Crawford on 08-Jul-2019

Woo hoo! :) xoxo

Comment from fm wright

Exceptional

First of all, super picture! Also that is some awesome chapter! Energy and action exploded from the start! Intrigued from beginning to end! Written to perfection! Wouldn't change a thing!

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thank you, Faye :)

So glad you liked the picture. I got that off google. The werewolf reminded me of what I see when I write about Jace's beast, except his fur is more white.
Hearing your positive feedback is the icing on the cake. I wasn't sure about this chapter. I was hoping the reader would understand everything I was writing. Sometimes you feel like you get too complicated when creating action scenes. I just write what I see in my head. It's like watching a movie. Writing it down is the hard part. LOL!

Glad you enjoyed. Thanks so much!
Hugs,
Shana :)

reply by fm wright on 08-Jul-2019

You are ever so welcome for the review. I'm learning just how hard it can be, as I am working on my first novel. Look forward to reading the next chapter!

Comment from Mistydawn

Exceptional

Guess Renshaw isn't going to get his retaliation after all, unless he comes back again. I sure hope not. The chapter is very well-written, interesting start to finish. Very suspenseful. Your bit of humor was a nice touch. Great job as always.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thank you, Mistydawn :)

Yes, you are right. Mr. Renshaw just ran out of luck. It's very doubtful he will be coming back after all that. I think he had it coming though. LOL!
So glad you enjoyed another Breedline adventure. This one seemed hard to put into words due to the action scenes, but it sounds like my idea came across good by your awesome review. I do enjoy getting your take on my writing. Your positive words are motivational.

Thanks again,
Shana :)

reply by Mistydawn on 08-Jul-2019

Your actions were perfect I could picture it in my mind. I'm actually learning from you when I read. See I have this story, Mystic creature I want to revise. He is a shapeshifter out for revenge. So I'm getting pointers as I go along.

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Oh my gosh! Wow ... I never dreamed my writing would help anyone. That is fantastic to hear. That's how I learn. I get pointers from everyone here on FanStory. Read from others and get ideas. Good luck with Mystic creature! Sounds interesting.
I have to go back and revise my first book. Actually, the last four need some adjustments. LOL! It's great that we can advance in our writing as we go along. :)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

A fantastic episode Shana, and old enemy of Roman's turns up, an Ethan Renshaw, he thought him dead, but unbeknowns to him, he didn't know what Jace could turn into, our beast reappears, responding to Jem being shot, and Jace tears the heads off a couple of bed guys, Scarpelli and Renshaw, the rest bolted, emergency averted. Well done, your abilty to Be creative is among dear girl. Great episode, never a dull moment in your incredible stories. Well done,blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thanks dear friend :)

I was hoping this would be okay to follow. The action scenes are difficult to put into words. I can see it all in my head as though I'm watching a movie, but when it comes to describing it ... whew! That can be a challenge. There's one thing in my supernatural world I've created ... you never want to make Jace angry. LOL! As you know the outcome.
Thanks so much for the awesome review, Roy. I'm glad you enjoyed another Breedline adventure.

Always you fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 09-Jul-2019

It never seems to be a issue for you Shana, I can always follow the action, you?re one the best at it, just love, it, Roy