Bunching Hunching Herds
Modified Minute poetry form20 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
This simple poem could become an excellent children's picture book. Even the title is perfect.
It reflects the fun adventure of learning to master the magic of words. And words are the building blocks of the future.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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This simple poem could become an excellent children's picture book. Even the title is perfect.
It reflects the fun adventure of learning to master the magic of words. And words are the building blocks of the future.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 10-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much, Julia. I am so glad you enjoyed reading my little verse. I wrote it in a childlike way so that perhaps the little ones could enjoy reading it. Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Melissa,
Cute picture and message :) As a minute poem lover, I found it difficult to accept an extra stanza in this one. I'm all for modifications, but it may take me a while to come around for that in this poetry form. Sorry, that's just my own personal pet peeve. I must talk myself through this and open my mind to different things.
Best wishes to you in this contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Hi Melissa,
Cute picture and message :) As a minute poem lover, I found it difficult to accept an extra stanza in this one. I'm all for modifications, but it may take me a while to come around for that in this poetry form. Sorry, that's just my own personal pet peeve. I must talk myself through this and open my mind to different things.
Best wishes to you in this contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 09-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019
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Hi Joy, thanks so much... I too just love the Minute form and its cadence. But.... I needed an extra stanza to get it all said, therefore, modified. Thanks for stretching a bit with me.
Melissa
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a lovely Minute poem, illustrated well with mother and child. Learning to read and write are the most important lessons and have the most impact on a person. Without them, we're handicapped. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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This is a lovely Minute poem, illustrated well with mother and child. Learning to read and write are the most important lessons and have the most impact on a person. Without them, we're handicapped. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hi Marilyn. Thanks for your comments and I am glad you liked it. Learning to read seemed to me to be the most impactful word event there is. :)
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes, children can really get enthused when they learn to read. I went crazy about spelling and was very smart, I thought, but was shot down by the word lunch. I had no idea. I had focused on longer more difficult words. LOL I thought they were more difficult. LOL This is a good entry, Melissa.
Nancy:)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Yes, children can really get enthused when they learn to read. I went crazy about spelling and was very smart, I thought, but was shot down by the word lunch. I had no idea. I had focused on longer more difficult words. LOL I thought they were more difficult. LOL This is a good entry, Melissa.
Nancy:)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hi Nancy, thanks so much. It is funny what trips us up... much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
It is of course one and a third minutes , but that is the declared modification, an added 20 seconds or syllables. In line twelve, would it improve the meaning slightly if, instead two 'there's' one of them became 'here's':
'here's ball, there's fence'
It might reflect the childs suddenly coming across a new word -- here and there as it might be. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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It is of course one and a third minutes , but that is the declared modification, an added 20 seconds or syllables. In line twelve, would it improve the meaning slightly if, instead two 'there's' one of them became 'here's':
'here's ball, there's fence'
It might reflect the childs suddenly coming across a new word -- here and there as it might be. Just a thought.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hi Jim. I like your suggestion to use here and there. I will go play with it and see what it looks like. Thanks bunches!
Melissa
Comment from CD Richards
Hmmm... if "sense" and "prince" rhyme, you might be a closet Kiwi!
Just stirring. This is a quite lovely poem, demonstrating perhaps the most important aspect of words. How different would we as a species be if our children never learned them!
Great job, Melissa.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hmmm... if "sense" and "prince" rhyme, you might be a closet Kiwi!
Just stirring. This is a quite lovely poem, demonstrating perhaps the most important aspect of words. How different would we as a species be if our children never learned them!
Great job, Melissa.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Hi Craig. Thank you for the great and fun review. I have never been to New Zealand, but would LOVE to visit there. Thanks for the comments.
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about words, the only thing is this is not a minute poem. You should lose one stanza to make it a perfect minute poem you can either not say it is a minute poem or change it to only three stanzas of 84444.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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A very well-written poem about words, the only thing is this is not a minute poem. You should lose one stanza to make it a perfect minute poem you can either not say it is a minute poem or change it to only three stanzas of 84444.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thanks Sandra. I will hop back over there and edit it.
Melissa
Comment from kahpot
I like the way the first stanza points out the girl is inviting Mum to try so she may learn " the world is mine at reading time" this is an excellent poem about words, I love the artwork, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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I like the way the first stanza points out the girl is inviting Mum to try so she may learn " the world is mine at reading time" this is an excellent poem about words, I love the artwork, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019
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Thanks. I am glad you liked this childlike perspective on reading and learning words.
Melissa
Comment from bob cullen
Loved the title 'Bunching Hunching Herds.' The message contained is also uplifting. I see this as a Little Golden Book, if they still exist to be read to children.
The rhyme was great and the message delightful. As I said, it was uplifting but you're up against the best field I've ever seen for a Fanstory contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Loved the title 'Bunching Hunching Herds.' The message contained is also uplifting. I see this as a Little Golden Book, if they still exist to be read to children.
The rhyme was great and the message delightful. As I said, it was uplifting but you're up against the best field I've ever seen for a Fanstory contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Hi Bob. I wanted to write something that I thought would be a childlike perspective on learning to love words. The other entries are awesome, you have that right!! Thanks for the review.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for showcasing the power of being able to read in this Minute Poem. I enjoyed your rhymes and your capturing the child's excitement with the use of the "herds" metaphor and "stage" simile. Big cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you for showcasing the power of being able to read in this Minute Poem. I enjoyed your rhymes and your capturing the child's excitement with the use of the "herds" metaphor and "stage" simile. Big cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Hi Joan. Thanks so much for the encouragement. I was hoping to show the impact of words on children learning to read. Much appreciated.
