Just Say The Words
Business-Speak is different.62 total reviews
Comment from Gail Denham
A lot of truth in this poem. Pity that the husband must kowtow - but it's true. If he always told the truth, well...he'd lose his job likely. It's few employers who could take that.
Good poem - I like "and does not do well with baloney" . There are times when the best thing you can say is "I see." Otherwise a fight can take place.
Your poem makes a person think - which is good.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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A lot of truth in this poem. Pity that the husband must kowtow - but it's true. If he always told the truth, well...he'd lose his job likely. It's few employers who could take that.
Good poem - I like "and does not do well with baloney" . There are times when the best thing you can say is "I see." Otherwise a fight can take place.
Your poem makes a person think - which is good.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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This is a really nice review, Gail. Thank you for the time and thought that went into it. I appreciate it very much. xo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about words that we can use in many ways, sometimes we use it to soothe another in time of pain, other times we use words to fool others to bet what we want.
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A very well-written poem about words that we can use in many ways, sometimes we use it to soothe another in time of pain, other times we use words to fool others to bet what we want.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Yes.
Comment from Sanku
Every coin has two sides. It is true that it is honest if you say what is in your mind. but businessmen and diplomats can't afford it .Nor can friends. If my friend asks me if i like her dress which I absolutely dislike ,I can't say it . I would rather say 'I like it.' Hurting someone would me my choice.
But I know often it is dangerous to keep your thoughts to yourself.
A great attempt with the topic .The poem has come out very well ,expressing your exasperation .good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Every coin has two sides. It is true that it is honest if you say what is in your mind. but businessmen and diplomats can't afford it .Nor can friends. If my friend asks me if i like her dress which I absolutely dislike ,I can't say it . I would rather say 'I like it.' Hurting someone would me my choice.
But I know often it is dangerous to keep your thoughts to yourself.
A great attempt with the topic .The poem has come out very well ,expressing your exasperation .good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thanks very much, Sanku.
Comment from bob cullen
A tragic hit on reality. You could call this a BOB poem. That stands for the Business of Bullshit. Pardon the language. I think it may also be a practice employed by literary agents. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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A tragic hit on reality. You could call this a BOB poem. That stands for the Business of Bullshit. Pardon the language. I think it may also be a practice employed by literary agents. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Oh, I think I might know that one. Does it go: "Although your piece is very interesting and well-written, it is not right for us at this time"? I could wallpaper my entire downstairs with such notices!
I love the "BOB" code. Because that's my husband's name, though, I'll have to pass on being able to use it.
Great review...and that's no BOB, Bob. Thank you. xo
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes businessmen, politicians, and diplomats have their own language. Some of their words would mean different things to people not in their
way of life. I agree with the wife and the husband. It is horrible to have to hide behind words but sometimes it is necessary to life the way you wish to.
Good luck and keep writing
dp
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Yes businessmen, politicians, and diplomats have their own language. Some of their words would mean different things to people not in their
way of life. I agree with the wife and the husband. It is horrible to have to hide behind words but sometimes it is necessary to life the way you wish to.
Good luck and keep writing
dp
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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I agree with you, dragonpoet; I agree with them both. Sometimes, when you want to live a certain lifestyle, you have to make concessions. Like it or not, there are just trade-offs in Real Life sometimes. You choose the ones you can live with, I guess.
Thanks for the terrific review. xo
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You're welcome, Rachelle
Joan
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Love it! Cute, bouncy, plucky! AND in all probability, oh so true. Those in business probably do have to cater to "customer always right" and to an extent, we all do who work, but you laid this out quite well. Great rhyme, rhythm and the topic is super and speaks the truth! WHAT things we do to make money! GRRR. Great job!
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Love it! Cute, bouncy, plucky! AND in all probability, oh so true. Those in business probably do have to cater to "customer always right" and to an extent, we all do who work, but you laid this out quite well. Great rhyme, rhythm and the topic is super and speaks the truth! WHAT things we do to make money! GRRR. Great job!
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Wendy, you will just love this: I keep a journal I've entitled: Things I Would Say If There Were No Repercussions!! It is MOST satisfying and therapeutic. Definitely takes the edge off!
Thank you for the encouraging review. xo
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My luck, I would fall over dead and everyone would have it read at my funeral. :)
Wendy
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By then, you're dead. They have to forgive you!
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Knowledge is Power by Catch22 shows as the winner in Higher Education, but in the results, he is not even listed. I clicked on the poem title and it says it has been cleared away?????? What? I have sent about 3 messages now, because something is not looking right and that contest, wasn't it like $10.50 to enter? Not sure about that, but I think so. Something a bit weird going on here.
Wendy
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi there is a great message here. I do not blame your husband nor do I blame you either. If you want continued business ,do then as your husband. If you want money by any means, well you may lose the trust of people on the way. You can fool people once, not twice.
Benny
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Hi there is a great message here. I do not blame your husband nor do I blame you either. If you want continued business ,do then as your husband. If you want money by any means, well you may lose the trust of people on the way. You can fool people once, not twice.
Benny
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Well, smart people anyway, right? And this is about my friend and HER husband, not my husband and me. Thanks for the terrific review, Benny. I appreciate it. xo
Comment from MissMerri
This is delightful, and a most appropriate response to this writing prompt. I like the humor and the reality of it. I think, if you tried, you could smooth out the meter a little, but it probably isn't important in a humorous poem like this, to have consistency in every stanza. The meaning and the humor comes through anyway, and I'm sure it will be readily enjoyed by all who read it. Best of luck in this interesting contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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This is delightful, and a most appropriate response to this writing prompt. I like the humor and the reality of it. I think, if you tried, you could smooth out the meter a little, but it probably isn't important in a humorous poem like this, to have consistency in every stanza. The meaning and the humor comes through anyway, and I'm sure it will be readily enjoyed by all who read it. Best of luck in this interesting contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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I have struggled so much with the meter of this one. I have changed that second stanza a million times now, and it STILL isn't right. I would LOVE your help if you have any suggestions, Miss Perfect Rhythm Poet!! Thank you for the nice review. xo
Comment from Colin John
Hi
A great subject matter and nice to see it recognised in poetry if not before then right now . A lovely flowing poem with truths not normally acknowledged . Kind regards Colin Xx
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Hi
A great subject matter and nice to see it recognised in poetry if not before then right now . A lovely flowing poem with truths not normally acknowledged . Kind regards Colin Xx
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much! xo
Comment from Mame
Very apt and so true. How desirable to speak honestly but impossible in a world where players play games. I think we were very honest as children though. Would everyone like to hear the truth though?
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Very apt and so true. How desirable to speak honestly but impossible in a world where players play games. I think we were very honest as children though. Would everyone like to hear the truth though?
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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I'm around children day in and day out, and it's their candor that I find most charming. They have no malice about what they say; it's just pure honesty. I always prefer that to someone who is "kind" "for my own good." Like I'm some piece of delicate porcelain who can't handle reality.
Anyway, thank you very much, Mame, for the terrific review. I appreciate it very much. xo
