My Impotent Screed
A reader's lament18 total reviews
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Yes, it's time to do away with archaic language, And writing about, or bolstering words nobody uses anymore. I think the only reason people use this kind of language is so they come off as looking prolific, but all they really end up appearing is pompous.
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Yes, it's time to do away with archaic language, And writing about, or bolstering words nobody uses anymore. I think the only reason people use this kind of language is so they come off as looking prolific, but all they really end up appearing is pompous.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"My Impotent Screed", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"My Impotent Screed", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2019
Comment from nomi338
Sadly, there exists a group of writers who feel that a goodly number of Thees, Thous and Arts, are required to prove that they have the required amount of class and style.
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Sadly, there exists a group of writers who feel that a goodly number of Thees, Thous and Arts, are required to prove that they have the required amount of class and style.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2019
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, My Impotent Screed, is a tongue-in-cheek lament over the continuation of antiquated words in modern poetry. The misuse of other words or the general writing of self-examining works on the work itself are frowned upon.
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This poem, My Impotent Screed, is a tongue-in-cheek lament over the continuation of antiquated words in modern poetry. The misuse of other words or the general writing of self-examining works on the work itself are frowned upon.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
Comment from Janetsue
I salute you for helping me learn a new word 'screed', which I have never heard before. However, I do disagree a bit with your premise about reading poems about writing. I love doing that! Oops, does that make me obtuse? (I learned that word from watching THE SHAWSHANK REDEMPTION.) lol Seriously, your have written an impressive poem and I wish you all good things. :-) Spangle
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I salute you for helping me learn a new word 'screed', which I have never heard before. However, I do disagree a bit with your premise about reading poems about writing. I love doing that! Oops, does that make me obtuse? (I learned that word from watching THE SHAWSHANK REDEMPTION.) lol Seriously, your have written an impressive poem and I wish you all good things. :-) Spangle
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Ha! This is awesome! I believe now is the time to bring fresh perspectives to writing poetry! If not, we just basically spit out the same old thing with just a few word changes! We live in a different world than poets of old, and there is a new generation to engage so that poetry doesn't become a lost art! :). Great job in this!
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Ha! This is awesome! I believe now is the time to bring fresh perspectives to writing poetry! If not, we just basically spit out the same old thing with just a few word changes! We live in a different world than poets of old, and there is a new generation to engage so that poetry doesn't become a lost art! :). Great job in this!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the poet's art to write what is on their heart, without metaphors, it is straight and hits the mark where it is aimed. No old age language in this modern age should be allowed.
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A very well-written poem about the poet's art to write what is on their heart, without metaphors, it is straight and hits the mark where it is aimed. No old age language in this modern age should be allowed.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
Comment from catch22
Hello Poet, I think this is a clever take on archaic language in poetry. I don't think it always sounds affected if done in the right context and subject matter. I tend to agree that poetry should reflect the society we live in and opt for natural phrasing and themes.
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Hello Poet, I think this is a clever take on archaic language in poetry. I don't think it always sounds affected if done in the right context and subject matter. I tend to agree that poetry should reflect the society we live in and opt for natural phrasing and themes.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
Comment from Pantygynt
The ability to laugh and take a snipe or two at one's self is a godsend, and clearly you have it in spades - according to your final stanza here.
To be serious though, just for a moment, the real problem with 'thou' and 'thine' is not just that they are archaic forms, but that so few people bother with the grammar that should go with them. It just ain't the same as wot it is now.
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The ability to laugh and take a snipe or two at one's self is a godsend, and clearly you have it in spades - according to your final stanza here.
To be serious though, just for a moment, the real problem with 'thou' and 'thine' is not just that they are archaic forms, but that so few people bother with the grammar that should go with them. It just ain't the same as wot it is now.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
Comment from Sheridan1
You certainly had fun with this. Let me know if you do want a critique because I think perhaps you choose the odd and even meter in your b lines of abcdb. I think you can do better than dumb in your second verse, though. Fun.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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You certainly had fun with this. Let me know if you do want a critique because I think perhaps you choose the odd and even meter in your b lines of abcdb. I think you can do better than dumb in your second verse, though. Fun.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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I would love any suggestions that might improve it. Especially if it makes the poem funnier! Thanks!
