God Water Sand Beggar!
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Comment from Ulla
I honestly don't know what to say about this. You seem to be very dedicated to religion and to God. All to their own, of course, as the saying goes. The writing is quite disjointed and a bit difficult to follow. Ulla
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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I honestly don't know what to say about this. You seem to be very dedicated to religion and to God. All to their own, of course, as the saying goes. The writing is quite disjointed and a bit difficult to follow. Ulla
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was food for thought, water is the main need of man, without it, we die a slow painful death. The simple lives of these people and the father of the boy who was so gifted was a story in itself. Well done, I enjoyed reading it. :) Sandra x
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That was food for thought, water is the main need of man, without it, we die a slow painful death. The simple lives of these people and the father of the boy who was so gifted was a story in itself. Well done, I enjoyed reading it. :) Sandra x
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
Comment from misscookie
I like the photo you choose to go with your poem the sky is blue and the grass is green
it's a perfect match for your poem
You captured my attention from the start ,your words truly touch my heart.
I had to chuckle remembering what one of my doctors told his staff
Miss Cookie would be a great president for she tell it like it is and, one of her many saying is "If I can't tell you nothing right I'm not going to tell you nothing wrong
thank toy for sharing
Cookie
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I like the photo you choose to go with your poem the sky is blue and the grass is green
it's a perfect match for your poem
You captured my attention from the start ,your words truly touch my heart.
I had to chuckle remembering what one of my doctors told his staff
Miss Cookie would be a great president for she tell it like it is and, one of her many saying is "If I can't tell you nothing right I'm not going to tell you nothing wrong
thank toy for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
Comment from royowen
Youve created and interesting story here,looking through the eyes of a beggarman, who probably has a rich talented son who discovered water In what is a very arid land. Well done, a unique story,with interesting characters and an even more interesting plot,well done,blessings,Roy
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Youve created and interesting story here,looking through the eyes of a beggarman, who probably has a rich talented son who discovered water In what is a very arid land. Well done, a unique story,with interesting characters and an even more interesting plot,well done,blessings,Roy
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
Comment from giraffmang
Interesting story you have crafted here.
there are quite a few grammatical and technical aspects which I won't bother pointing out as I know you aren't bothered by this, but it does affect the flow and rhythm of the piece.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Interesting story you have crafted here.
there are quite a few grammatical and technical aspects which I won't bother pointing out as I know you aren't bothered by this, but it does affect the flow and rhythm of the piece.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank you
Comment from way2gokevs
Thanks for sharing your fictional story, your story flowed well, with good breaks, a lot of meaning and descriptive flow. Enjoyed the read, best of luck and keep writing.
Have a good day, cheers, Kev.
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Thanks for sharing your fictional story, your story flowed well, with good breaks, a lot of meaning and descriptive flow. Enjoyed the read, best of luck and keep writing.
Have a good day, cheers, Kev.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
Comment from Raul1
Interesting that you did all those things and you had a lot of fun. I like this story. It is entertaining. I have enjoyed reading it. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
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Interesting that you did all those things and you had a lot of fun. I like this story. It is entertaining. I have enjoyed reading it. No grammatical errors. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
Comment from kahpot
A wonderful read, the discovery that helps any land and it's dwellers is a very worth while journey, I found this exciting and easy to read, very well done****kahpot
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A wonderful read, the discovery that helps any land and it's dwellers is a very worth while journey, I found this exciting and easy to read, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
Comment from Earl Corp
Im surprised this story isn't a contest entry. I did find a couple of editing errors: Shouldn't it be thirty third year? Shouldn't it be (the) rest of my pets?
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Im surprised this story isn't a contest entry. I did find a couple of editing errors: Shouldn't it be thirty third year? Shouldn't it be (the) rest of my pets?
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
