Anticipation
The end of missing you.26 total reviews
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Brenda,
Your poem, "Anticipation" takes a turn! I loved your photograph with a woman holding an timer and watching the sand flow! Your description is perfect and guides the reader to its end!
My best in the contest. Deborah
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Dear Brenda,
Your poem, "Anticipation" takes a turn! I loved your photograph with a woman holding an timer and watching the sand flow! Your description is perfect and guides the reader to its end!
My best in the contest. Deborah
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Thank You!
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My pleasure!
Comment from susand3022
Hi Brenda, I wanted to come over and see what you were writing... the haiku contest!
I love the poem. It's really cute... but it's really more senryu than haiku.
Where the senryu focuses on human nature (like your poem does) the haiku focuses on physical nature and will usually include some sort of seasonal refrence.
I hope this helps, you can change your poem until the entry time is over.
This is a really cute one though. ð???
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Hi Brenda, I wanted to come over and see what you were writing... the haiku contest!
I love the poem. It's really cute... but it's really more senryu than haiku.
Where the senryu focuses on human nature (like your poem does) the haiku focuses on physical nature and will usually include some sort of seasonal refrence.
I hope this helps, you can change your poem until the entry time is over.
This is a really cute one though. ð???
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Thank You!
Comment from Janilou
I'm not certain what the specific rules of this contest are, but my understanding is haiku are usually nature related. All the same, I enjoyed your three line poem and the artwork is a good match for the poem.
I didn't see any edits needed.
All the best in the contest.
Jan
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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I'm not certain what the specific rules of this contest are, but my understanding is haiku are usually nature related. All the same, I enjoyed your three line poem and the artwork is a good match for the poem.
I didn't see any edits needed.
All the best in the contest.
Jan
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Thank You!
Comment from Earl Corp
The artwork you chose to accompany your haiku is awesome!! I don't get the last line of the poem about being so "NOT" ready. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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The artwork you chose to accompany your haiku is awesome!! I don't get the last line of the poem about being so "NOT" ready. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your kind words. The last line is about the paradox of can't wait to see him and feeling unprepared. It's completely irrational but not at all unusual.
Comment from Hitcher
They do say that absence makes the heart grow fonder do they not. Once they arrive all that anxious energy normally quickly disappears and is replaced by passion : )) Nice!
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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They do say that absence makes the heart grow fonder do they not. Once they arrive all that anxious energy normally quickly disappears and is replaced by passion : )) Nice!
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thank You. I hope so!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7-5 haiku poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and very nice imagery from the art work you used. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 haiku poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words and very nice imagery from the art work you used. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thank you Teri!
