Anticipation
The end of missing you.26 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are clear, interesting and creative. The poem
flows and connects well. The last line says it all. The artwork is
perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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The author's words are clear, interesting and creative. The poem
flows and connects well. The last line says it all. The artwork is
perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank You!
Comment from Janetsue
I really enjoyed reading this...and I hope the hourglass doesn't run out before the right person comes along. This beautiful girl shouldn't worry too much about that, however, because time is being very kind to her and she's gorgeous. It is definitely going to get noticed, and if it is by Prince Charming, the uncertainty and fear will rapidly disappear.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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I really enjoyed reading this...and I hope the hourglass doesn't run out before the right person comes along. This beautiful girl shouldn't worry too much about that, however, because time is being very kind to her and she's gorgeous. It is definitely going to get noticed, and if it is by Prince Charming, the uncertainty and fear will rapidly disappear.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your kind words!
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You're very welcome!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Anticipation", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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"Anticipation", is short, succinct and very much to the point. With a minimum of words, this talented poet has told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank You for your kind words of encouragement!
Comment from Patty Palmer
I think your poem is cute. When you say you're not quite ready and looking at the drink, is it the drink you haven't been seeing and now you are finally going to drink again and you're anticipating the drink or are anticipating seeing a person and you look like you need the drink for bravery to see him?
Patty
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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I think your poem is cute. When you say you're not quite ready and looking at the drink, is it the drink you haven't been seeing and now you are finally going to drink again and you're anticipating the drink or are anticipating seeing a person and you look like you need the drink for bravery to see him?
Patty
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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That's an hour glass that she's holding. Yes she is waiting for a person. She's not ready because she's feeling insecure. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement!
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I so apologize for my mistaking it for a wine glass. But I'm glad I asked because now it makes total sense now! Thanks
Patty
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You're Welcome!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, I know that feeling and this is what women do, they make such an effort and I wonder if men know or care how much goes into looking this good! I enjoyed your words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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He he he, I know that feeling and this is what women do, they make such an effort and I wonder if men know or care how much goes into looking this good! I enjoyed your words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank You Dolly!
Comment from JanPerry
This makes a welcome start to a story. I think you should centre it and single spacing to improve the word's appearance.
I love the picture of the waiting lady.
What is the sarcasm here? She is waiting for someone but she is not ready?
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This makes a welcome start to a story. I think you should centre it and single spacing to improve the word's appearance.
I love the picture of the waiting lady.
What is the sarcasm here? She is waiting for someone but she is not ready?
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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No there's no sarcasm.
The "NOT" denotes her personal insecurity. She wants to see him but not ready to be seen by him. Thank you for your encouraging words.
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That's complicated
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You're right!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this piece. At first,
I was a little surprised by the last line, but then I thought of the uncertainty that can fill one's thoughts when it HAS been a long time.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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You have made excellent use of all your syllables in this piece. At first,
I was a little surprised by the last line, but then I thought of the uncertainty that can fill one's thoughts when it HAS been a long time.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much! It was just like that. Bad hair day and all!
Comment from l.raven
HI Brenda, way back when I would have worried about my looks...I have come to understand....that what I look like is what God has given me...and at my age...what you see is what you get...so hurry home my love...my heart hasn't changed...I love your poem sweet girl...and the perfect picture...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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HI Brenda, way back when I would have worried about my looks...I have come to understand....that what I look like is what God has given me...and at my age...what you see is what you get...so hurry home my love...my heart hasn't changed...I love your poem sweet girl...and the perfect picture...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much!
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you are so very welcome...love xxoo
Comment from Mark D. R.
Very good presentation of verse and illustration. Will the sands of time affect her? Your last line is a real pip (-:
Not that this affects my review, but for these small verses, please consider centering lines and increasing the font size. Bolding the same is your artistic choice. Methinks that the overall presentation for FS readers will be enhanced by the larger font.
Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Very good presentation of verse and illustration. Will the sands of time affect her? Your last line is a real pip (-:
Not that this affects my review, but for these small verses, please consider centering lines and increasing the font size. Bolding the same is your artistic choice. Methinks that the overall presentation for FS readers will be enhanced by the larger font.
Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank You!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Brenda, this is a good Haiku written in perfect form. Good line three, good turn after lines one and two. Perhaps turning these 2 lines into one sentence, making enjambment. It would distinguish it from line 3 which incidentally has a nice cynical touch. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Hello Brenda, this is a good Haiku written in perfect form. Good line three, good turn after lines one and two. Perhaps turning these 2 lines into one sentence, making enjambment. It would distinguish it from line 3 which incidentally has a nice cynical touch. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank You!
