The Dreaded Visit
The news no one wants to hear.15 total reviews
Comment from Rikki66
First, don't shoot the messenger He was just doing a duty he probably had no great desire to do. Secondly, he probably has some of the same sentiments. Good story.
Rikki:)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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First, don't shoot the messenger He was just doing a duty he probably had no great desire to do. Secondly, he probably has some of the same sentiments. Good story.
Rikki:)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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I agree with you feeling re: messenger. Has got to be a difficult job. Thanks for the read and review.
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Most welcome.
Rikki:)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Congratulations on your win Harry, this is a worthy winner and finned with grief and heartfelt sorrow, a poignant message here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Congratulations on your win Harry, this is a worthy winner and finned with grief and heartfelt sorrow, a poignant message here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thanks much for your review and your always encouraging words.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Excellent, I agree medals can not replace lives, but when a loved one is killed in action, that's about all that can be given. That an a show a respect for loss.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Excellent, I agree medals can not replace lives, but when a loved one is killed in action, that's about all that can be given. That an a show a respect for loss.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your read, rating and comments.
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Wow. So very sorry for your loss. Thank You for your Gold Star Service and the support you so obviously provided for your loved one that enabled him to serve with bravery and distinction. Beautifully written. Thank You for sharing your loved one and yourself. God Bless and Keep You and Yours!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Wow. So very sorry for your loss. Thank You for your Gold Star Service and the support you so obviously provided for your loved one that enabled him to serve with bravery and distinction. Beautifully written. Thank You for sharing your loved one and yourself. God Bless and Keep You and Yours!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your read and comments.
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You're very welcome. Thank You again for your service. It's the love and support from the family that strengthens our service members to serve. You're very much appreciated.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I think you did a great job with this piece. I loved the 'hung with military sympathy'. I thought that was a super way of describing things. Very matter-of-factly but intensely effective.
The last line completely sells it, having it come from the sibling.
Great stuff and best of luck
GMG
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Hi there,
I think you did a great job with this piece. I loved the 'hung with military sympathy'. I thought that was a super way of describing things. Very matter-of-factly but intensely effective.
The last line completely sells it, having it come from the sibling.
Great stuff and best of luck
GMG
Comment Written 05-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from RICH01
The subject is heart wrenching. The writing is clear, illustrating the difficulty of the deliverer of the news but its dramatic effect in different ways on the members of the family. It is worthy of the highest rating. I see no way to improve it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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The subject is heart wrenching. The writing is clear, illustrating the difficulty of the deliverer of the news but its dramatic effect in different ways on the members of the family. It is worthy of the highest rating. I see no way to improve it.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Wow! Thank you for the read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from juliaSjames
This story with its terse style and tragic theme is like a lesson in show rather than tell. All the emotion is expressed in the action. The sister's anguished words are a vehement rejection of the glory that is supposed to be the prize for those who are victims of war.
Congratulations on your win.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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This story with its terse style and tragic theme is like a lesson in show rather than tell. All the emotion is expressed in the action. The sister's anguished words are a vehement rejection of the glory that is supposed to be the prize for those who are victims of war.
Congratulations on your win.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the read and review. Much appreciated. I hate the use of glory to describe the experience of war.
Comment from kahpot
And dreaded it would be, this is a beautiful yet very sad read, you are quite correct no amount of medals or praise can replace a loved one, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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And dreaded it would be, this is a beautiful yet very sad read, you are quite correct no amount of medals or praise can replace a loved one, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sugarray77
You did an excellent job crafting this short story full of emotional anguish and angst. The dialogue... heart cries from the oldest sibling, were well chosen and marked your story as intensely real. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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You did an excellent job crafting this short story full of emotional anguish and angst. The dialogue... heart cries from the oldest sibling, were well chosen and marked your story as intensely real. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019
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Thank you for the read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eighty-word flash fiction story, The Dreaded Visit, has the proper word count and creates a scene that no one ever wants to be in.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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This eighty-word flash fiction story, The Dreaded Visit, has the proper word count and creates a scene that no one ever wants to be in.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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So true. Thanks for the read.
