Comment from Sankey

Exceptional

There you were on page 2. Glad I found you over here. Another great read. Seems like McKenzie and Logan will get on fine, if things progress like I think they are.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019

I should have been at the bottom of page 1. Hmm, will check it out. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Tootsie55

Exceptional

Great work again and glad the SIXES are still on. Did not see this on mine have to dig for it looks like. Thoroughly good reading. Looking forward to the romance but I know you keep us waiting a while. No spags.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Poor Logan, perhaps Mac's mum was a drunk, it wouldn't surprise me, she's displaying her emotional side, perhaps she's all woman after all. Or,she's deeply attracted to Logan,which is my guess, but perhaps she should tread lightly, well done Barbara, an excellent chapter, blessjngs, Roy
Typo : Each time he glanced (in) her direction. As (Megan) sipped her milkshake. Mack?

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019

Wow!! I made those corrections immediately. Thank you for the catch.

reply by royowen on 01-Jul-2019

Well done

Comment from JLR

Excellent

You are writing a compelling story. The characters are interesting. Your length of submission is not too long, as it flows and keeps this reader engaged. thank you and continued success

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Barbara,

Whoa. That girl has some serious deep-seated issues if one beer sets her off. Wow. This should be interesting. I'll be anxious to see what the deal is with that. I imagine it has something to do with an old male figure in her life -- huh? Huh? Huh?

This chapter was really good - as always. The dialogue was realistic - as always and the characters relate to each other in a way that is believable for this reader. *smile*

Notes, if I may?
1.) "Deal. Tomorrow, (I)'ll make a list and let you read it."

2.) "It'll be too dark. You'll need to tell me. That way I can ask questions if I need (to)." Logan grinned.

3.) After Logan parked in the parking garage across from the stadium
--> how about just 'garage' so you don't repeat 'park/parking'?

4.) "Yadi, just came out." He smiled as McKenzie jumped up and
--> no comma after 'Yadi'

5.) "Okay. I get it(,)" interrupted Logan.

6.) He called after her(,)"Try not to hurt anybody(!)"

7.) He silently read it(:) "Mac needs protection during the night.

I would normally deduct a star for several nits, but I know you will edit quickly - I'm in a generous mood today... (You know how evil I really am.)

Thanks and happy day!

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019

LOL Yes, I made the corrections as soon as I read the review. In four of the areas, I had changed the wording and still messed up. I hate when I make mistakes that I know better than. #7 was an honest mistake. I didn't know it should have been a ':'. I appreciate the help.

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

Hi Barbara, you paint a typical American picture here what the baseball game, I didn't understand the half of and never will, but that is not your fault. I liked the ending and I'm looking forward to the continuation. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Sandra Montanino

Excellent

Summer is all about baseball and hotdogs. It's the great American pastime. I think you did a good job and I can see you put a lot of thought into your story and I like your last line. Great job.

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 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019

Thank you for the encouraging review.