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Conspiracy8 total reviews
Comment from aryr
Definitely an interesting piece of writing and you presented the details in a rather descriptive way. I guess Roberts got off to a shaky start but seemed to find his niche in life. I found the last paragraph very interesting indeed.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Definitely an interesting piece of writing and you presented the details in a rather descriptive way. I guess Roberts got off to a shaky start but seemed to find his niche in life. I found the last paragraph very interesting indeed.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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The last paragraph is your government at work. Thank you for reading and feedback.
Rikki:)xo
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most welcome, ahaaa that makes sense.
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Thanx
Rikki:)xo
Comment from Heather Knight
Very interesting story. What autopsy photos do you refer to in the notes?
There are a couple of typos:
- "Yes, director. Johnson" (Director Johnson)
- Like a row (of) dominoes."
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Very interesting story. What autopsy photos do you refer to in the notes?
There are a couple of typos:
- "Yes, director. Johnson" (Director Johnson)
- Like a row (of) dominoes."
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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The JFK autopsy photos on Google. Thank you for reading and the review.
Rikki:)xo
Comment from juliaSjames
Hi there
I like the crisp writing and swift flow of this version of the assassination of JFK. Also the questions left unanswered. The write has a script like feel. Scene flashing into scene. Then the voiceover at the end.
However there is a lot of spag. I notice that other reviewers have noted these errors in detail so I won't repeat.
Good read.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Hi there
I like the crisp writing and swift flow of this version of the assassination of JFK. Also the questions left unanswered. The write has a script like feel. Scene flashing into scene. Then the voiceover at the end.
However there is a lot of spag. I notice that other reviewers have noted these errors in detail so I won't repeat.
Good read.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and the review.
Rikki:)xo
Comment from annh
That's an interesting take on history, Rikki. I enjoyed your story. II notice that another reviewer has pointed out a few typos, I would also note: as SEALS is an acronym it should be capitalised. Also, you have written southeast Asia in paragraph one and Southeast Asia later in the story. Either is correct, it depends on how you want to convey what you're saying e.g. I am travelling to North America vs I am travelling to the northern states of America. Thirdly, the drive asks should be the driver asks. Cheers, annh
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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That's an interesting take on history, Rikki. I enjoyed your story. II notice that another reviewer has pointed out a few typos, I would also note: as SEALS is an acronym it should be capitalised. Also, you have written southeast Asia in paragraph one and Southeast Asia later in the story. Either is correct, it depends on how you want to convey what you're saying e.g. I am travelling to North America vs I am travelling to the northern states of America. Thirdly, the drive asks should be the driver asks. Cheers, annh
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and the review. All errors pointed out are appreciated for further study.
Rikki:)xo
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, very interesting! Did you base your theory on other readings that you did? I often wonder who really is running the government show behind the scene. Good storytelling but I found a lot of grammar and punctuation nits:
"Yes, director. Johnson" ("Yes, Director Johnson." )
"have ever been assigned. " (end with question mark not period here)
"They commies got Cuba" (either "Them" or "The")
"Like a row dominoes." row (of) dominoes
"I do, what's the plan." (I do. What's the plan?)
"his special made sniper " (specially)
"Let's go, Who" (period not comma)
"The drive asks. " (driver?)
"fired first I did thee kill shot"
(fired first. I did the kill shot," Robert answers.)
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Oh, very interesting! Did you base your theory on other readings that you did? I often wonder who really is running the government show behind the scene. Good storytelling but I found a lot of grammar and punctuation nits:
"Yes, director. Johnson" ("Yes, Director Johnson." )
"have ever been assigned. " (end with question mark not period here)
"They commies got Cuba" (either "Them" or "The")
"Like a row dominoes." row (of) dominoes
"I do, what's the plan." (I do. What's the plan?)
"his special made sniper " (specially)
"Let's go, Who" (period not comma)
"The drive asks. " (driver?)
"fired first I did thee kill shot"
(fired first. I did the kill shot," Robert answers.)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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I based the story on an x-ray and photograph of the late president. My Parkinsonism is acting up so some time I read one word and see another. Thank you for pointing out the spags.
Rikki:)xo
Comment from Cindy Warren
I've heard that theory. There are people who don't think Oswald was a good enough shot to have killed the president. It was someone inside the government. If it's true they would have had to shut that person up.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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I've heard that theory. There are people who don't think Oswald was a good enough shot to have killed the president. It was someone inside the government. If it's true they would have had to shut that person up.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and the review.
Rikki:)xo
Comment from Earl Corp
Interesting plot I would read a book about this. You had a lot of editing errors that need fixed.
1.They should be the.
2. Drive should be driver.
3. thee should be the.
4. New should be news.
5. assignation should be assassination.
Let me know after you reedit and I'll up my rating.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Interesting plot I would read a book about this. You had a lot of editing errors that need fixed.
1.They should be the.
2. Drive should be driver.
3. thee should be the.
4. New should be news.
5. assignation should be assassination.
Let me know after you reedit and I'll up my rating.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and pointing out my spag that must be fixed if it is to go any further.
Rikki:)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- now there's a version I've not heard any of the conspiracy theorists posit...at least not publicly...yet. :) ;) I would only suggest, perhaps, putting the last part in italics to indicate that it was a radio broadcast.... :) ;) Thanx for sharing, sir -- veeeeeeery interesting! ;) ;) Yvette
Like a row dominoes --> Like a row of dominoes
"Done?" The drive asks. --> "Done?" the drive asks.
did thee kill shot. Roberts --> did the kill shot." Roberts
assignation of President Kennedy, leads the new this November day there -> assassination of President Kennedy leads the new this November day, there
news, C.I.A, Director Roland Johnson --> news. C.I.A Director Roland Johnson
accident and closer to home Texas --> accident, and, closer to home, Texas
Texas Louisiana border killing four unidentified occupants --> Texas-Louisiana border killing four unidentified occupants."
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Wow -- now there's a version I've not heard any of the conspiracy theorists posit...at least not publicly...yet. :) ;) I would only suggest, perhaps, putting the last part in italics to indicate that it was a radio broadcast.... :) ;) Thanx for sharing, sir -- veeeeeeery interesting! ;) ;) Yvette
Like a row dominoes --> Like a row of dominoes
"Done?" The drive asks. --> "Done?" the drive asks.
did thee kill shot. Roberts --> did the kill shot." Roberts
assignation of President Kennedy, leads the new this November day there -> assassination of President Kennedy leads the new this November day, there
news, C.I.A, Director Roland Johnson --> news. C.I.A Director Roland Johnson
accident and closer to home Texas --> accident, and, closer to home, Texas
Texas Louisiana border killing four unidentified occupants --> Texas-Louisiana border killing four unidentified occupants."
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and the kind review. When I rewrite I will take your suggestions to heart to make my story better.
Rikki:)xo
