Comment from Darlene BoClair

Excellent

Is David dead from the car crash; or just to evil to die? Sarah with coat,boots and food is going in what direction. Did she go back in the house. My curiosity is going buck wild. The suspense is great with the snow and the avalanche. Now, I'ill stop asking questions and let you finish your story.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2019

=} I hope to post another chapter by tomorrow so you can find out. Thanks so much dear. Rox

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Roxanna, this is really good, and I mean very very good. I love the story and now I'm left to wonder, what has happened to David, not that I much care. And Sarah, Will she make it to safety without freezing to death. It's very well written and I wish I had a six. Can't wait to be reading on. Warm regards. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019

Thank you so much dear. rox

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Wonderful. Sarah has escaped and she had time to outfit herself for the freezing weather and she has a supply of food just in case she should need it. Good thinking on her part. David on the other hand is in deep trouble being unconscious with his car half buried in snow in freezing weather. Wouldn't it be a shame if he wasn't dressed for the cold... Well done, Rox. I didn't see any spags this time. Nancy:) xxx

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

I seem to have done will on this chapter with no errors. I am so amazed. Thank you my dear. We are getting close to an end. Rox

Comment from JudyE

Excellent

Great suspense in this chapter and another surprise with David having an accident. I wonder if he'll be found before he freezes to death. And what is Sarah going to do now I wonder? Pity she has no way of knowing about the accident.

I only picked up one thing. I would hyphenate 'over corrected' in the following:

He over corrected and the car rolled, going over the embankment.

Cheers
Judy

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

Thanks so much Judy. I am amazed I only had one. Yeah!! =}

reply by JudyE on 02-Jul-2019

Way to go!! lol

Comment from royowen

Excellent

So Sarah was right in trying to escape, David is as nutty as a fruitcake and twice as dangerous. It's a very exciting episode dear Rox. But David will be delayed for awhile with the accident he's been involved in, lucky to be alive. But Sarah is right to protect herself against the cold. Well done Rox, a great episode, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

Thanks so much. =}

reply by royowen on 02-Jul-2019

Blessings

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Foxie,

Looked good to me. *smile* And I was not expecting the bad guy to get into a car wreck! Wow. You keep throwing those cool and unexpected things in there. Nice job!

Just one nit:
1.) Scott and some of the other CSI's, see if anything else has come up(.)"

Thanks!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

I like to be unexpected, thanks so much. =}

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

Buried alive? Oh, I can only hope. I hope the *** freezes, has a slow, painful death. Can't tell how much I hate him, can you? I hope Sarah makes her way to freedom. The chapter is very well-written, interesting, suspenseful. The little backstory on your character gave us a little insight, nice job.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

Thanks so much. Next chapter I hope will be exciting too. Rox

Comment from Bill Pinder

Excellent

I enjoyed reading the chapter of the book. Thanks for sharing this interesting look at a serial killer who is obsessed with his next victim. I think it makes it more interesting that she is a cop and her fellow cops are in the process of locating her hopefully before he comes back. You did a good job making the story believable and the main characters fears and actions real. Bill

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

Thanks so much Bill. Rox

Comment from JLR

Excellent

My first time reading your chapter addition. You have a great sense of drama. The last line, no saw the accident happen except a rabbit, is awesome! I really enjoyed your work...

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

Thank you so much. Rox

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Another good chapter Roxanna. I was engaged and entertained throughout the story. I like how you put us into the head of each character. It was well written in my opinion. I can't wait to read more. Good Job!

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 Comment Written 01-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019

Thanks so much, sir. Rox =}