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a symmatrina of sorts9 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a strong cautionary tale. These are my very thoughts. With the world the way it is, it is remarkable to see news of good deeds. I enjoy watching Kelly Clark's daytime show. She always features people doing good deeds and makes a big thing of it. She, like Ellen encourages being kind and joyful. I like your theme for this poem.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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This is a strong cautionary tale. These are my very thoughts. With the world the way it is, it is remarkable to see news of good deeds. I enjoy watching Kelly Clark's daytime show. She always features people doing good deeds and makes a big thing of it. She, like Ellen encourages being kind and joyful. I like your theme for this poem.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2020
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Oh, that daytime TV, during this quarantine! I have been out of things for a while, and much belatedly, I say thanks very much for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I think you've done well with this new form Red and I agree with what you're saying. Years ago we had neighbours and friends, now we are all just people in houses, and ne'er the twain shall meet. Good write, good topic,
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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I think you've done well with this new form Red and I agree with what you're saying. Years ago we had neighbours and friends, now we are all just people in houses, and ne'er the twain shall meet. Good write, good topic,
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 02-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my venture at the symmetrina, and I spoke what was on my mind at the moment....
Comment from robyn corum
Red,
Nicely done. Can't imagine what you're talking about, though. In this society? Uh uh. Nope. No idea. We're all big buddies. You must be imagining things.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Red,
Nicely done. Can't imagine what you're talking about, though. In this society? Uh uh. Nope. No idea. We're all big buddies. You must be imagining things.
Thanks!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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In the old days there was poverty and milksick and people needed large families and helpful neighbors. Today is better, the average lifespan declares that. But there was silver in the clouds...thanks for reading and reviewing, Robyn.
Comment from poetwatch
The day will come, I don't know when, but men will give a helping hand and smiles will grace the land. We are brothers now, Lij Red, in soul and spirit, for we hear the hate in many wordless stares. We lock the doors to all the wailing. I like your poem.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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The day will come, I don't know when, but men will give a helping hand and smiles will grace the land. We are brothers now, Lij Red, in soul and spirit, for we hear the hate in many wordless stares. We lock the doors to all the wailing. I like your poem.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Some say the HVAC ended the front porch gatherings and the general store assemblies, I think it's more sinister...thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading your challenge poem, Red. I believe the title refers to how you, really all of us, have become faceless numbers in today's society. I can feel the longing for the time when neighbors knew each other and men helped all in time of need. Those are difficult 'things' today. You did a good job with a complex form. Thanks for haring. Jan
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I enjoyed reading your challenge poem, Red. I believe the title refers to how you, really all of us, have become faceless numbers in today's society. I can feel the longing for the time when neighbors knew each other and men helped all in time of need. Those are difficult 'things' today. You did a good job with a complex form. Thanks for haring. Jan
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Social security, Navy ID, pin numbers and credit card numbers,it goes on and on. Thanks for reading my symmatrina about my numbers...
Comment from damommy
You have that right. We hardly know our neighbors anymore. Sure is a different time from when I grew up. I'm lucky to have a few good neighbors. I think you did very well with this difficult form. It was fun to do, but very challenging. You nailed it.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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You have that right. We hardly know our neighbors anymore. Sure is a different time from when I grew up. I'm lucky to have a few good neighbors. I think you did very well with this difficult form. It was fun to do, but very challenging. You nailed it.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I was trying to find a forgotten password, all numbers but one letter, and the symmatrina prompt came up...thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Red. I really like stanza one. It tells us of something we know already and, that is, the isolation of neighbor to neighbor in today's society--much different from generations past.
Although I've read it several times, I'm having a hard time getting the second stanza, especially this line: "The mass of men's (is a word missing here?) become a faceless flood."
I thought it was something I should mention it for clarification.
Marilyn
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Hi Red. I really like stanza one. It tells us of something we know already and, that is, the isolation of neighbor to neighbor in today's society--much different from generations past.
Although I've read it several times, I'm having a hard time getting the second stanza, especially this line: "The mass of men's (is a word missing here?) become a faceless flood."
I thought it was something I should mention it for clarification.
Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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I meant "The mass of men has become a faceless flood," and contracting "has" was questionable. The first write was "The people in the street: a faceless flood." Not quite satisfactory either. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I am trying escalitopram and mad as a hatter...
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written symmetrina poem. I did not check out the format yet, so I believe you did it right. Your topic is so true. We live about 10 meters away from our neighbors today, but we seldom see or hear them or know what is going on in their lives.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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A very well-written symmetrina poem. I did not check out the format yet, so I believe you did it right. Your topic is so true. We live about 10 meters away from our neighbors today, but we seldom see or hear them or know what is going on in their lives.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I hope I got it right, a rather complex stanza, actually. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Yuna Akil
Hi!
I most definitely felt the forlornness of this poem! You definitely captured the motion you feel and transmitted in ways that made people want to do about it.
In individualist societies like the one in the US, everyone seems to be locked in their own family blocks, and even now there's fewer and fewer family contact.
Yuna
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Hi!
I most definitely felt the forlornness of this poem! You definitely captured the motion you feel and transmitted in ways that made people want to do about it.
In individualist societies like the one in the US, everyone seems to be locked in their own family blocks, and even now there's fewer and fewer family contact.
Yuna
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Who is to say if institutions are better than individuals? I think the trend is here to stay until Earth decides to correct the overpopulation problem. Thanks for reading and reviewing my club symmetrina.
