The Music of Freedom
Different songs, same message.15 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Congrats on Third Place! A wonderful offering, Lady Rachelle -- loved your focus on the music of our celebrations....but, of course, I would expect nothing less (lol)! ;) ;) I am so very thankful for your joining in the 'Fourth Fun'!! ;) :) Take care and Happy Fourth of July! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Congrats on Third Place! A wonderful offering, Lady Rachelle -- loved your focus on the music of our celebrations....but, of course, I would expect nothing less (lol)! ;) ;) I am so very thankful for your joining in the 'Fourth Fun'!! ;) :) Take care and Happy Fourth of July! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Thank you! And the same to you! How will you be doing it up down there? Myself, I'll be walking in a parade with a former piano mom of mine who's now running for the county legislature! After that, who knows what! xo
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your "stack of four" makes effective use of all its syllables with its rousing,
patriotic declarations of why we should be so proud and so grateful for our blessed freedoms!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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Your "stack of four" makes effective use of all its syllables with its rousing,
patriotic declarations of why we should be so proud and so grateful for our blessed freedoms!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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What a nice review! Thank you, Janice.
Comment from Gail Denham
I do very much like the songs of our country - they make me want to stand up and clap or something. This poem points out the music our country applauds. I do wonder why you used a hyphen in GOD? Is there a message there? Just curious.
Nice poem
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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I do very much like the songs of our country - they make me want to stand up and clap or something. This poem points out the music our country applauds. I do wonder why you used a hyphen in GOD? Is there a message there? Just curious.
Nice poem
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2019
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I'm an Orthodox Jew. We don't write out that word in full.
Thank you for the lovely review.
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Oh I did not know that - do you substitute the word Yahweh in place of God? I have two friends who are half-Jewish - I'm always learning.
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No, I never do that.
What is half-Jewish?
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Not sure if that's how it's said, but two of my good friends had mothers who were Jewish. One of them especially follows many of the customs. I know that's not orthodox, but I do learn from them.
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Oh, I see what you're saying. So only their moms were Jewish. Actually, that makes the children Jewish. The mother bestows the religion, the father the lineage. (like German, French, etc.) So your friends are fully Jewish.
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Oh I see - and yes, I remember that from my Bible reading about the mothers bestowing the religion.
One friend, who is studying Ruth and Naomi brought up some fascinating facts at our little writers group. The friend is a widow so that story means a lot to her.
. At any rate, as a Christian and believing God means what He said - I fully support the Jewish people.
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Thanks.
Comment from pome lover
very good remembrance for Independence Day
nice listings of our country's songs
question: why no "O "in God?
neat picture accompanying your poem of the fife, drum and bugle corps.
good luck.
pome lover
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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very good remembrance for Independence Day
nice listings of our country's songs
question: why no "O "in God?
neat picture accompanying your poem of the fife, drum and bugle corps.
good luck.
pome lover
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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I'm an Orthodox Jew. We don't ever write that word out in its full form.
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thanks. I wasn't aware of that.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Ogden
This is a worthy entry to the "Four for the Fourth" poetry contest, a good job of stacking 5-7-5 stanzas, comprising a meaningful poem.
Good luck in the voting!
Don
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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This is a worthy entry to the "Four for the Fourth" poetry contest, a good job of stacking 5-7-5 stanzas, comprising a meaningful poem.
Good luck in the voting!
Don
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Don.
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You're very welcome.
Don
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully with the strong theme of Independence Day running though each of the four stanzas constructed in the appropriate line and syllable count. Using the popular tunes for the day was a clever approach. You have a small typo: "G-d Bless America," I assumed this should be 'God'. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully with the strong theme of Independence Day running though each of the four stanzas constructed in the appropriate line and syllable count. Using the popular tunes for the day was a clever approach. You have a small typo: "G-d Bless America," I assumed this should be 'God'. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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It's not a typo. I'm an Orthodox Jew, and that is how we write that word.
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Oh, I didn't know. My sincere apologies if I offended you.
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Oh gosh, no. It's not like you're born with this knowledge! There was no ill-intent on your part; you had my back and were trying to help me. I appreciate that very much.
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem is a successful transition from the past to the present, linked by music: the battle hymns to urge on the troops fighting and hoping for freedom, through to the familiar songs proud and patriotic Americans sing to show their gratitude that freedom is the system under which they live.
There may be a difference in styles between USA and English punctuation, but I would put the quote marks for the titles of songs inside the commas and full stops (as shown below), where you have them outside. If it was speech, then yes, they would be on the outside.
"Star Spangled Banner",
"G-d Bless America", and
"This Is My Country".
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Your poem is a successful transition from the past to the present, linked by music: the battle hymns to urge on the troops fighting and hoping for freedom, through to the familiar songs proud and patriotic Americans sing to show their gratitude that freedom is the system under which they live.
There may be a difference in styles between USA and English punctuation, but I would put the quote marks for the titles of songs inside the commas and full stops (as shown below), where you have them outside. If it was speech, then yes, they would be on the outside.
"Star Spangled Banner",
"G-d Bless America", and
"This Is My Country".
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks, LisaMay. xo
Comment from Josh Walters
I love it. When I think of our independence I think mostly of those who fought to free us from British rule. Everyone who has served in our military has protected our freedom its just good to remember how this country stared. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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I love it. When I think of our independence I think mostly of those who fought to free us from British rule. Everyone who has served in our military has protected our freedom its just good to remember how this country stared. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Josh.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I heard the music coming from your words here, a great tribute to your country and I wish you luck with the contest, best wishes . . . . . love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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I heard the music coming from your words here, a great tribute to your country and I wish you luck with the contest, best wishes . . . . . love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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This makes me so happy to read, Dolly. Thank you for a most validating review!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7-5 stacked Fourth of July poem you penned for the writing prompt. You used very good words and very lovely imagery from the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 stacked Fourth of July poem you penned for the writing prompt. You used very good words and very lovely imagery from the art work. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Thanks very much, Teri.
