Been To Hell & I've Come Back
A true story12 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
This is a very powerful read, well done to the person who is trying to overcome this problem, it must take great strength, you have penned this story wonderfully, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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This is a very powerful read, well done to the person who is trying to overcome this problem, it must take great strength, you have penned this story wonderfully, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank you kahpot for such a complimentary review. I really appreciate your taking the time to offer comment on my work
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a life choice that takes one to hell and back. Some never comes back the ones who are lucky enought to be saved, are grateful and don't try that path of destruction again.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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A very well-written poem about a life choice that takes one to hell and back. Some never comes back the ones who are lucky enought to be saved, are grateful and don't try that path of destruction again.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing this rather long poem. And I agree the ones who survive addiction are the lucky one.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Whew, Bob, I thought that you were talking about yourself. You are one of my favorite writers on FanStory, and I was very concerned. I thought, "he sure does write well for someone who is suffering this much."
You told your friend's story so well. I was engaged with every word. I'm glad that she has found the support that she needs.
You did her story justice for sure.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Whew, Bob, I thought that you were talking about yourself. You are one of my favorite writers on FanStory, and I was very concerned. I thought, "he sure does write well for someone who is suffering this much."
You told your friend's story so well. I was engaged with every word. I'm glad that she has found the support that she needs.
You did her story justice for sure.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Debbie, your comment, 'you are one of my favourite writers on Fanstory,' has made my day, actually my year is closer. Comments like that keep me writing. Thank you also for the concern.
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It's true. I really like how you write.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There are many temptations in this world and it is hard to stay on the short and narrow path, but if we take a wrong turn in life, we have a second chance to put it right, wise words, here Bob, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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There are many temptations in this world and it is hard to stay on the short and narrow path, but if we take a wrong turn in life, we have a second chance to put it right, wise words, here Bob, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Thank you Dolly. Sorry it was so long. Originally it contained a couple more verses, but I thought it read better with a happy ending. Sadly, the poor girl relapsed.
Comment from royowen
It's so sad the ones that fall to addiction. Addiction takes many forms, I have tasted a few, gambling and booze just to mentions couple. The reason most addicts try drugs is the pain of existence, God replaced my addiction with Himself, so that is my story, the trouble with the temporary pain duller, is the hangover the next day, and the pain is still there. A beautfully written dedication to victory over drugs, and the merciful help from someone who cares, fortunately for those of us who He has rescued. Written in abcb rhyming with no set meter. Well done, Bob,blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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It's so sad the ones that fall to addiction. Addiction takes many forms, I have tasted a few, gambling and booze just to mentions couple. The reason most addicts try drugs is the pain of existence, God replaced my addiction with Himself, so that is my story, the trouble with the temporary pain duller, is the hangover the next day, and the pain is still there. A beautfully written dedication to victory over drugs, and the merciful help from someone who cares, fortunately for those of us who He has rescued. Written in abcb rhyming with no set meter. Well done, Bob,blessings, Roy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Mr. Owen, your reviews always boost my ego and my wife says I'm unbearable normally and my ego requires no boosting. I agree with you and I love the phrase you used, 'the pain of existence.' What a great title that would make for a poem.
As always Roy, thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
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I loved this, easy to relate, and the fact there are angels out there, well done Bob, God is the only one who could get me over the line, as He did for this precious girl.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a nicely stated story of a girl how she became free from her addiction to drug at the help of a guy who became her hubby and thank God she is now drug free; well said, well done. Write-Inspire-Change --DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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This is a nicely stated story of a girl how she became free from her addiction to drug at the help of a guy who became her hubby and thank God she is now drug free; well said, well done. Write-Inspire-Change --DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Thank you Dr. Al for taking the time to review this long poem. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Congratulations to your friend on getting her life together. I know it isn't easy. You need to edit a little. Sometimes when you transfer work from a different part of your computer you end up with some unwanted punctuation marks. Is the nun's name Percy or Perce? You've used both.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Congratulations to your friend on getting her life together. I know it isn't easy. You need to edit a little. Sometimes when you transfer work from a different part of your computer you end up with some unwanted punctuation marks. Is the nun's name Percy or Perce? You've used both.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Sadly, she didn't keep her life together for too long. She relapsed and eventually overdosed. I left that out.
The nun's name was Sister Percy, but Perce is an abbreviated form of Percy.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Addiction is such an awful thing and, as with a member of my family, it takes hitting that rock bottom before they are actually ready to face it... and that 'bottom' seems to differ in depth for different folks. :( A very sad yet promising offering that tells a good story for anyone who will listen... :) Be sure to pop back in there and delete the gnome graffiti:
I promise it won't cause no harm�?�´ that's what you
Thank you for sharing! ;)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Addiction is such an awful thing and, as with a member of my family, it takes hitting that rock bottom before they are actually ready to face it... and that 'bottom' seems to differ in depth for different folks. :( A very sad yet promising offering that tells a good story for anyone who will listen... :) Be sure to pop back in there and delete the gnome graffiti:
I promise it won't cause no harm�?�´ that's what you
Thank you for sharing! ;)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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I've corrected the gnome graffiti. Love that phrase. Thank you for pointing that out and an even bigger thank you for reviewing. Your review is much appreciated
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Bob,
This is a very long poem. I usually pass up the long ones, but something about your story drew me in to stay and read. It made me think of how lucky I was to avoid drugs when I was a teenager. I struggled, but not like this gal.
In stanza four it looks like Evil Eddie got you with his question mark and A's.
I got used to you calling her Sister Percy which rhymes with mercy, but then you changed her name to Perce in stanzas 14 and 15.
I'm glad the gal in this story found her happy ending in this story.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Hi Bob,
This is a very long poem. I usually pass up the long ones, but something about your story drew me in to stay and read. It made me think of how lucky I was to avoid drugs when I was a teenager. I struggled, but not like this gal.
In stanza four it looks like Evil Eddie got you with his question mark and A's.
I got used to you calling her Sister Percy which rhymes with mercy, but then you changed her name to Perce in stanzas 14 and 15.
I'm glad the gal in this story found her happy ending in this story.
Joy xx
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Sorry about the length. But originally it was several verses longer as I told how she tragically relapsed and overdosed. Perce is an abbreviated form of Percy and the Nun's friends generally called her that.
Comment from Earl Corp
If this isn't a contest entry it should be. I don't think you have to worry about doing justice to the story. You're poem rhymes, makes sense, is spiritual, and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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If this isn't a contest entry it should be. I don't think you have to worry about doing justice to the story. You're poem rhymes, makes sense, is spiritual, and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Earl, your six pointer made my morning. Your comments were even more appreciated than the six stars. Initially the poem was longer, but I chose to leave it on a positive. Sadly she relapsed.
