A View of Venus
have fun with it48 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem is very comical on one level--somewhat thought-
provoking on another. Gazing at the sky and thinking of sun and moon can engender some interesting thoughts.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Your well-written poem is very comical on one level--somewhat thought-
provoking on another. Gazing at the sky and thinking of sun and moon can engender some interesting thoughts.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thanks. Yes, star gazing does seem to wake up the muse.
Comment from chocoletdrop052
Settle thou thoughts, because of time we cannot invent. The beautiful sky creates a canvass of wonder and a full net. Let us ponder in the shadows of death and know the ever endless protection of this atmospheric net.
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Settle thou thoughts, because of time we cannot invent. The beautiful sky creates a canvass of wonder and a full net. Let us ponder in the shadows of death and know the ever endless protection of this atmospheric net.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the review. Did you write that or is it a quote?
Comment from Gail Denham
And do they joke about the world they see down here - where there is often chaos and folks running here and there without much meaning in their life - and are they also parts of God's family - those who have believed in and received forgiveness through the death of the Son of God?
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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And do they joke about the world they see down here - where there is often chaos and folks running here and there without much meaning in their life - and are they also parts of God's family - those who have believed in and received forgiveness through the death of the Son of God?
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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If God created the universe they must be. I hadn't thought about it. In the poem they're wondering what we're like. They don't know for sure if life could even exist on a world that's mostly sea. Thanks for the review.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a really delightful write in smooth and even rhyming movement - clever and articulate in its humorous verse and startling, perfect image to complement the poem, which is fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest to this writer...
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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In my opinion, a really delightful write in smooth and even rhyming movement - clever and articulate in its humorous verse and startling, perfect image to complement the poem, which is fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest to this writer...
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks. It was a fun write.
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You are very welcome, my pleasure...Eve
Comment from Liberty Justice
SIX STARS 6******BEAUTIFULLY written such mystery and suspense. I've often wondered myself what could be watching us above--aliens of some kind who might be watching us now. Read Review mine also. lolol liberty justice
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SIX STARS 6******BEAUTIFULLY written such mystery and suspense. I've often wondered myself what could be watching us above--aliens of some kind who might be watching us now. Read Review mine also. lolol liberty justice
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the six! Did you ever watch Ancient Aliens? Some people think they've been watching us all along. That thought is kind of creepy.
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Yeah it is creepy.lolol
liberty justice
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
Both your contest entry for Poetry and your selected picture were a fun entry to read. I noticed how important the word "world" was to your poem and found it interesting.
I wish your the best in this contest.
Deborah
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Dear Author,
Both your contest entry for Poetry and your selected picture were a fun entry to read. I noticed how important the word "world" was to your poem and found it interesting.
I wish your the best in this contest.
Deborah
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks. I hadn't really notice that. Glad you had fun with it.
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:)
Comment from Wabigoon
Good poem I think but, for me, lacking...something. Not sure exactly what. Maybe a touch of reality -- like what sort of creatures could actually live on Venus? Or how does the astrophysical reality of the place change the Venus, Aphrodite of ancient myth -- or does it? Can we live with two radically different ideas of the place in our minds?
Thanks though, enjoyed it.
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Good poem I think but, for me, lacking...something. Not sure exactly what. Maybe a touch of reality -- like what sort of creatures could actually live on Venus? Or how does the astrophysical reality of the place change the Venus, Aphrodite of ancient myth -- or does it? Can we live with two radically different ideas of the place in our minds?
Thanks though, enjoyed it.
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. This was mostly just for fun. It's unlikely anything can live on Venus. Wasn't the Aphrodite of myth one of the daughter of Zeus living on Mount Olympus? Tho the planets were named for the gods, I don't think the myth had them living there.
Comment from Elizabeth Johnson1
I absolutely love this! What an incredibly creative writing! I love the though of getting the creative juices flowing underneath the sky. I love doing that myself! Perfect picture and color.
Thank you for sharing
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I absolutely love this! What an incredibly creative writing! I love the though of getting the creative juices flowing underneath the sky. I love doing that myself! Perfect picture and color.
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks. Yes, star gazing did seem to work to wake up that old muse.
Comment from Sylvia Page
It is reaaaly a fun poem that nicely rhymes and is portraying a perfect picture. I like it very much and hope it gets you a nice place in the contest.
Check this out...
Is it horns and tails they've got? / Are horns and tails they've got?
Sylvia
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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It is reaaaly a fun poem that nicely rhymes and is portraying a perfect picture. I like it very much and hope it gets you a nice place in the contest.
Check this out...
Is it horns and tails they've got? / Are horns and tails they've got?
Sylvia
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. And I'll take another look at that line.
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You are welcome
Comment from Ogden
I like your poem, although it appears to indicate you're not familiar with the real Venus. Venus is SO close to the sun that moisture can't exist there, let alone comprise mostly sea. Then, of course, that's no reason not to encourage your imagination to take your creative thinking wherever you want it to go. It's clear YOU had fun with it.
:)
Don
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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I like your poem, although it appears to indicate you're not familiar with the real Venus. Venus is SO close to the sun that moisture can't exist there, let alone comprise mostly sea. Then, of course, that's no reason not to encourage your imagination to take your creative thinking wherever you want it to go. It's clear YOU had fun with it.
:)
Don
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thanks. I think you missed a line. I've got them looking back at us and wondering about creatures that could live in a world that's mostly sea. Yes, I did have fun with it.
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You are absolutely right! I did misread that line. (You might want to consider exchanging the 3 syllables, "that could live" for "living in.")
Don
