Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

A very interesting poem full of great imagery and imagination. Your descriptive words painted an awesome picture in the mind,of a whole different world. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2019

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed my little poem.

reply by Boogienights on 11-Jul-2019

Comment from Tpa

Exceptional

it flows beautifully as I read through it and the punctuation (or purposeful lack of) keeps me at the rhythm that I know the author intended for me. I also pay particular attention to the presentation of it. Since there are usually fewer letters and words than a story or article, I place great importance on the spacing, placement and actual choice of letters and words.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019

Thanks for the six! Yes, it's a little more important to watch the word count with poetry than with articles or prose.

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Wonderful, when the mind wanders it certainly can wonder, and this poem certainly takes the imagination on a beautiful journey to maybe distant worlds, love the artwork, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2019

Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed my little poem.

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

"A View of Venus", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poets work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2019

Thanks. I re-posted this one because it was a blind contest entry last time. Now that the contest is over I can send it out with fan notifications.

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 10-Jul-2019

You're more than welcome, and that sounds fair enough.
Take care and God bless,
the Duchess !(-_-)!

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is an imaginative and interesting poem about life on Venus. Image is dynamic and works well with your piece. I like the idea of while we are watching them, they are also watching us--wondering and dreaming as we do. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thanks. It didn't win the contest. That's OK. I had fun with it.

Comment from Sheridan1

Excellent

This is fun to read. I see you have awards so I'm not sure if you want a suggestion. Some people don't. Please let me know - it is just one line. And then I must write a bit to reach 150 ch.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thanks. Suggestions and constructive criticism are always welcome.

reply by Sheridan1 on 08-Jul-2019

Thank you. Re: your first line. My personal thought is that when we write about writing and then refocus - we weaken the poem or story, even if it is meant to be a light read. I'd think about, rather than the reader visualizing you struggling with a pen in hand, a kite, might set the scene outdoors and give you an advance reason for looking up. Hope this is useful to you and not invasive.

Comment from Joanna S. Blue

Excellent

I like how you begin by wondering what to write, look at the sky, and let your imagination play. This is a poem children would like, and could inspire them to create stories or poems and draw creatures. It inspires me because I mostly relay on biographical stuff and don't use my imagination that much. Your use of rhyme is very natural.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thanks. I'm told I have quite an imagination. Glad you liked my little poem.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

haha. this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear Cindy! I love the rhythm and rhyme. I love the special sentiment you refer to as stellar occupations.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

You sit and ponder over the cosmic life and existence, and weave stories of being on a world cold and wet; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write-Inspire --DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2019

Thanks. I'm so glad you liked my little poem.

Comment from Coco Jane

Excellent

What a neat reflection on what might be out there!
You handle some difficult rhymes well.
I believe the word in line 18 is spelled s'mores. Note the apostrophe.
I like how you describe Earth as "cold and wet."

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2019

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019

Thanks. I'll have to fix that line. Glad you liked my poem.