Heavens Ceiling
A perfect summer night11 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a fine entry for the 10-word poem contest. Good luck in it if it isn't over. There is a wonderful afterglow (alpenglow) that accompany some sunsets, almost otherworldly. Marilyn
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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This is a fine entry for the 10-word poem contest. Good luck in it if it isn't over. There is a wonderful afterglow (alpenglow) that accompany some sunsets, almost otherworldly. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2019
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Thank you very much, Marilyn, for your kind praise of HEAVEN?S. CEILING. Rod
Comment from robyn corum
Rod,
Hmmm... I'm really curious as to how this poem did in the contest. I mean, it's sooooo beautiful and even without the image, creates such a lovely picture in my mind. I would have expected it to do well, but don't see a ribbon. Hm. Thanks!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Rod,
Hmmm... I'm really curious as to how this poem did in the contest. I mean, it's sooooo beautiful and even without the image, creates such a lovely picture in my mind. I would have expected it to do well, but don't see a ribbon. Hm. Thanks!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2019
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Nope. No ribbon, but I am delighted you enjoyed it. Many thanks, Robyn, for your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from LisaMay
This is an attractive presentation, nicely colour matched. The mental visual image is appealing, suggesting that stars are like downlights adorning heaven's ceiling above us.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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This is an attractive presentation, nicely colour matched. The mental visual image is appealing, suggesting that stars are like downlights adorning heaven's ceiling above us.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Hi, Lisa. I am delighted you found the visual image in HEAVENS CEILING appealing. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
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... and I am delighted to see that YOU are the poet!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow! What an artistic use of language this is!! I just love this! And did you ever find the perfect piece of artwork for them, or WHAT?!! This is quite the impressive entry, Mystery Poet! Good luck to you. xo
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Wow! What an artistic use of language this is!! I just love this! And did you ever find the perfect piece of artwork for them, or WHAT?!! This is quite the impressive entry, Mystery Poet! Good luck to you. xo
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Rachelle, for your effusive praise of my poem and the artwork which inspired it.
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My pleasure. xo
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You selected a beautiful picture to highlight your ten words, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading your poem. Good job with the word count. I believe I would not capitalize ceiling. I like the 'ing' sound in lines 1 & 3. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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You selected a beautiful picture to highlight your ten words, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading your poem. Good job with the word count. I believe I would not capitalize ceiling. I like the 'ing' sound in lines 1 & 3. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Jan, for sharing HEAVEN'S CEILING and your kind praise and the suggestion. I did put "ceiling" in lower case
Comment from Nicole Hawley
Heaven's ceiling - very nice use of metaphor! Short but quite sweet - loving your alliteration and rhyme scheme. And you couldn't have chosen a better way to illustrate your work. I enjoyed this, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Heaven's ceiling - very nice use of metaphor! Short but quite sweet - loving your alliteration and rhyme scheme. And you couldn't have chosen a better way to illustrate your work. I enjoyed this, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I am delighted you enjoyed the alliteration and rhyme scheme of HEAVEN'S CEILING. And you are right. That lovely illustration inspired the poem.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Quite a delightful verse and a most appropriate illustration to complement the same.
Your newborn stars is a wonderful and descriptive phrase.
The following does not affect my review, but it is your choice to capitalize or not.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Quite a delightful verse and a most appropriate illustration to complement the same.
Your newborn stars is a wonderful and descriptive phrase.
The following does not affect my review, but it is your choice to capitalize or not.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Mark, for your very kind praise of HEAVEN?S CEILING.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a wonderful visual description of early evening!! ;) ;) Couple of catches below... :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) ;)
T'is --> 'Tis
Heavens Ceiling --> Heaven's Ceiling [poem title]
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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What a wonderful visual description of early evening!! ;) ;) Couple of catches below... :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) ;)
T'is --> 'Tis
Heavens Ceiling --> Heaven's Ceiling [poem title]
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for your kind praise of my poem and for catching that sp error. FanStory will not let me use an apostrophe in the title.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation.
-You have used your
ten words well.
-The formatting is
good and the imagery
is effective.
-I like "Heaven's ceiling."
-Effective paring of
evening and ceiling.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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-Very nice image and
presentation.
-You have used your
ten words well.
-The formatting is
good and the imagery
is effective.
-I like "Heaven's ceiling."
-Effective paring of
evening and ceiling.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your kind praise of my ten-word poem.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Sandra Montanino
Your picture takes my breath away, it conjures up such a peaceful scene. I predict you are going to do very well in in your 10 word poem contest. Very nicely done!
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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Your picture takes my breath away, it conjures up such a peaceful scene. I predict you are going to do very well in in your 10 word poem contest. Very nicely done!
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I saw the picture and the poem just erupted! Thank you so much, Sandra, for your encouraging praise.
