You're Hurting My Feelings
I creep and I crawl that hard yard16 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
A unique and creative entry - from the perspective of the humble and often maligned little snail! I never imagined I would feel sorry for these little critters. But they do have a hard yard to crawl through. You painted a vivid picture of the trials and tribulations of the snail. Great artwork as well. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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A unique and creative entry - from the perspective of the humble and often maligned little snail! I never imagined I would feel sorry for these little critters. But they do have a hard yard to crawl through. You painted a vivid picture of the trials and tribulations of the snail. Great artwork as well. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2019
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I'n glad I could sway your attitude to the humble snail. They have a job to do in the garden as part of the ecosystem, apart from nibbling on lettuces.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I could interpret this poem a couple of different ways, as I can imagine a deeper meaning hidden between the lines. That makes this a really great poem for me.
Your overall presentation is exquisite, from artwork choice, color scheme, to that beautiful creeping, crawling font.
This is an exceptional contest entry. Truly best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I could interpret this poem a couple of different ways, as I can imagine a deeper meaning hidden between the lines. That makes this a really great poem for me.
Your overall presentation is exquisite, from artwork choice, color scheme, to that beautiful creeping, crawling font.
This is an exceptional contest entry. Truly best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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This is truly an exceptional review! Thanks for enjoying my poem so much, and for seeing it has a deeper meaning... snail as metaphor.
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LisaMay, I love your poetry ? always. Your writing is exceptional and creative.
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I thank you sincerely.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly. I enjoyed the clever way in which you approached this - the snail was a great choice and its lament was eloquently penned. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly. I enjoyed the clever way in which you approached this - the snail was a great choice and its lament was eloquently penned. Good luck in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Snails get a bad rap... everything is around for a purpose, not just to annoy gardeners.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao unknown poet. I gave you your 3 rd vote.
I thought your poem was creative and original. My grandmother had that cruel habit of crushing snails..it always upset me ...even now in my own patch of green I can not kill them.
I'm an early bird, so frequently I check my garden at dawn ... I pick up all the snails I can see and I release my catch in the woods close by.
Despite they do forage on seedlings and tender succulent shoots, they are an important part of our ecosystem ..they provide food for birds and snakes.
They also eat rotting vegetation and fungi and they stir up the soil.
Your poem is so well written that by the end I left really sad for the poor snail ..... the unjust treatment most gardeners reserve these defenceless creatures is unjustified and totally unnecessary.
I wish you all the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Ciao unknown poet. I gave you your 3 rd vote.
I thought your poem was creative and original. My grandmother had that cruel habit of crushing snails..it always upset me ...even now in my own patch of green I can not kill them.
I'm an early bird, so frequently I check my garden at dawn ... I pick up all the snails I can see and I release my catch in the woods close by.
Despite they do forage on seedlings and tender succulent shoots, they are an important part of our ecosystem ..they provide food for birds and snakes.
They also eat rotting vegetation and fungi and they stir up the soil.
Your poem is so well written that by the end I left really sad for the poor snail ..... the unjust treatment most gardeners reserve these defenceless creatures is unjustified and totally unnecessary.
I wish you all the best in this contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thanks for voting for my poem! I am pleased you are a snail champion. To my horror when I was a kid, Dad made us collect them in the garden and they all went in a bucket and got drowned. It was ghastly. Snails were the only thing Dad killed, otherwise he was kind to living creatures... he was protecting his lettuces (that's why lettuce gets a mention in my poem. I am very aware of interconnected ecosystems that are finely balanced and even 'pests' have their place. Besides, snails are beautiful to watch... what a cleverly constructed creature, very artistic.
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Yes they are interesting to watch as most insects ..I love watching ants carrying food back to their nest ..or watching a spider repair its web.
I had a squirrel monkey for 10 years and we went hunting in the warmer months .. insects were part of her natural diet....
...she used to keep my papa ' s vegetable patch grub free too.
Nice talking to you!
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A squirrel monkey! What a delightful creature to be around. :))
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Very intelligent and she showed me a whole world that most people miss.
She devoured tons of insects but their deaths had purpose.
Ciao!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh my goodness! This is sooo extremely good, Mystery Poet! I tried to copy and paste here just one line or stanza that was my favorite, but in doing so, I realized I was pretty much sharing the entire poem. The poor, tragic life of a young garden snail! How in the world will I ever look upon this creature the same?! AWESOME job. This one has "frontrunner" written ALL over it!! Good luck to you. xo
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Oh my goodness! This is sooo extremely good, Mystery Poet! I tried to copy and paste here just one line or stanza that was my favorite, but in doing so, I realized I was pretty much sharing the entire poem. The poor, tragic life of a young garden snail! How in the world will I ever look upon this creature the same?! AWESOME job. This one has "frontrunner" written ALL over it!! Good luck to you. xo
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Thanks for the enthusiasm in your review. Snails may be a pest, but there is room for their existence in a garden's balanced ecosystem... they eat other things then they get eaten by hedgehogs. Besides, they are attractively designed and very peaceful to watch.
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Yes, I have no problem with snails. They're kind of prehistoric looking, so I value their history. xo
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Yeah! I had fun with this one. I found myself chuckling as I read this extremely clever and enjoyable read. The hard life of a snail. Your flow is smooth, and the rhyme scheme and choice of words to rhyme are the best. "Lettuce, pray"? That is wonderfully fun. The ending is climatic of the whole piece, saying that as a snail, your feelings will harden. The title and the line above it are well executed and full of sly meaning. Thank you for making my day lighter and full of joy.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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Yeah! I had fun with this one. I found myself chuckling as I read this extremely clever and enjoyable read. The hard life of a snail. Your flow is smooth, and the rhyme scheme and choice of words to rhyme are the best. "Lettuce, pray"? That is wonderfully fun. The ending is climatic of the whole piece, saying that as a snail, your feelings will harden. The title and the line above it are well executed and full of sly meaning. Thank you for making my day lighter and full of joy.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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I am so pleased a tale about a humble snail could lighten your day!
Thanks for your brilliant rating, Jesse. You are a real treasure in MY day.
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. The brilliant rating is well deserved. Have a great rest of your day.
Jesse
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You too, Jesse.
Comment from Suzwhitethornwhispers
This is fun and at the same time provides a great jumping off point for discussions about feelings. As a teacher, I'd use this as a discussion starter and writing inspiration for elementary school students.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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This is fun and at the same time provides a great jumping off point for discussions about feelings. As a teacher, I'd use this as a discussion starter and writing inspiration for elementary school students.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
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I was hoping people might read into my fun poem the deeper meanings at the heart of it. Thanks for understanding my intention so well. I think stories and poems are excellent educational tools for discussion and personal creativity, where our own thoughts and emotions can be explored and portrayed. I often try to put myself in other's point of view... even a snail!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about the small little snail that has to go such a long way on the hard ground to get from point A to B and are often disgarded before he gets there.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about the small little snail that has to go such a long way on the hard ground to get from point A to B and are often disgarded before he gets there.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanks, Sandra. I hope there aren't too many snails in your garden!
Comment from RodG
I think this poem will appeal to a young reader because (1) it describes a small garden animal children might disregard, (2) it uses rhyme in a way a child would appreciate, and (3) most important it teaches a lesson to not hurt anything just because it's small and not pretty. Rod
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I think this poem will appeal to a young reader because (1) it describes a small garden animal children might disregard, (2) it uses rhyme in a way a child would appreciate, and (3) most important it teaches a lesson to not hurt anything just because it's small and not pretty. Rod
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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I'm pleased you got the intention behind this poem. Thanks for your nice review.
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You are very welcome. Rod
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
I love everything about your poetic offering from the perspective of a snail...with the exception of "sucks." Rather a jolting word at the end of such a poetic offering. Just my opinion...
Best Wishes...and know that I truly love snails!
Take Care,
diane
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Hello!
I love everything about your poetic offering from the perspective of a snail...with the exception of "sucks." Rather a jolting word at the end of such a poetic offering. Just my opinion...
Best Wishes...and know that I truly love snails!
Take Care,
diane
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2019
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Thanks for your positive review... regarding sucks: yes I agree it isn't a nice word but isn't that how snails eat? haha...
